You're Ok Tonight Lyrics Critique- No particular genre, just with an acoustic

by Kimberly
(Texas)

the tempo is around 76.
This is a duet, so when the female is only singing I will put a F by the line, when a male is singing i will put a M and when they are both singing, which in this song it is always in harmony, I will put a H on the line. Enjoy(: Any feedback is welcome(:


You're Ok Tonight

Beginninng all Female:
I watched the sunset sink over this rainy town
I don't know what will happen now that I'm future-bbound
I watched you bring me to life through the years
So I kiss you goodnight and I smile through all of my tears

Bridge:
H-Iwanna hold onto you
F- Whatever it takes
F-But I know that time can give and it can take
F- I don't Wanna lose you

Chorus: All Female

But I'm throwin down this ring
I'm gonna live my life
I hope I didn't break you
But you'll find another one
I'm throwin down this ring
I'm gonna live my life
I hope that you're ok
I hope you're ok tonight.

2nd part: All male

I knew I saw somethin' in your eyes
the night that you kissed me and told me that you were fine
Though I never imagined you'd go to such extremes
I never imagined you'd be leavin me

Bridge(same format)

H-Ohhhh (leads to chorus

Chorusx1 (Still all female)

Middle:
H- Time went on, It's been so long, since I've seen your face
H- I wish that I, could go back to my, mistakes

Female: I never imagined I'd see my own heart break

Chorus x1 (Still all female)


Chorus change:

F-I threw down that ring
F-I went and lived my life
M-I hope it didn't break you (F-I broke myself)
M-But I found another one (F-ohh)

All Male:
You threw down your ring
You went and lived your life
I hope that you're ok (F-I'm not okay)

H- I hope you're ok tonight

end.




sorry this sketch is so rough, I just really need feedback.