Your Dying Heart Lyrics Critique - rock/pop song

I here you crying in the dark
I try to help
But were so fare apart
Were could I start

Around the bend - here we go
Like a shooting star
Of summer after-glow
(Oh I know you know)

I'm writing this song - just for you
I hope to make - all our dreams come true
yes I'd like to

I know its hard - to loose someone
But believe in me
and do not run
I'll be here for you
Please brave it through
Don't let go
Even with - a dying heart
(Even with a dying heart)

Trudging on - through the dark
Your broken heart cries
To take a chance
To make it last
To take the bullet
For everyone

I know you think - its your fault
But let it go - and don't fall down
keep your faith
Don't misplace
The love I gave to you

Because I know its hard - to loose someone
But believe in me
and do not run
I'll be here for you
Please brave it through
Don't let go
Even with - a dying heart
Even with - a dying heart
Even with - your dying heart

When I'm gone - still carry on
And live your life out loud
For I'll share the love - from God above
And heel - your dying heart