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Wise Girl lyrics critique - country/soft rock

by Derek
(Ontario)

this is my first song any feedback and constructive criticism would be much appreciated.

First verse

I’ll never lose the memory of that Saturday night
I was in my prime, felt good, not a worry to consider
The party started bumpin and we were doin it right
She gave me a wink and I felt big like a designated hitter
Now if I ever saw Kenny I’d give him my lucky penny
But she idolized Ms Monroe though she had me from hello

Second verse

My dreams are haunted by complexities
Want to grasp an understanding with certainty
But her mannerisms are encrypted
A wise girl has her plot pre scripted
Moments together seem to be just right
Cause you’re the one I want when my dreams are in flight

Third verse

I find it so funny how a fairytale to yours truly
Can be interpreted poles apart to someone named Julie
That defect that forces you to chase the real thing
Obligates an appearance in the boxing ring
Enlightenment now leads the belief to bloom
That love works like the window of an interrogation room

Chorus

Day and night I’ll never stray too far
No fray could delay she’s my north star
Beyond my control I never feel whole
Without her, she’s the keeper of my soul
Now I know we all have our part
To play in this game we like to call life
No longer so simple it’s an abstract art
Not so precise can’t compare to a medics knife

Bridge

And all I want is to pierce this firewall
I swear Il protect the contents above all




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Jan 01, 2010
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The song is HOT!!
by: Anonymous

I like the song because of the Idea and lyrics are really fit the song, I'm poet wanting to be a songwriter,you gave me some good ideas. Peace James Cook

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