"Why do you hang up? Lyrics Critique- R & B Song"

by Gerald

Hey guys hw do u feel this one.
Pliz focus on the foll areas:
1.Message.
2.Can you feel the emotions in the song.
3.Use of language.
4.Structure and flow of the song.
5.General appeal of the song.
*The lyrics have a melody, actually it is a complete song waiting for recording. So stars your views are highly appreciated.

Verse1
This is the third time you hang up
When you hear my voice on the phone
It seems just like yesterday
When you and i were inseperable
Now it feels like you have relocated to Mars
Leaving me craving for your love back here on earth
I hope you will someday hear me cry
Coz i feel like like a cactus tree on a desert

Pre-Chorus
I wish i could
Find a way to send my words to you
See the ice between us breaking down
I wish you could
Stop shutting me out of you life
Let me be the one next to you

Chorus
Girl I need to talk to you
Why do you hang up
I have noone else to talk to
Why do you hang up
Pliz can you allow me
Why do you hang up
I've got a lot of things to tell you
Why do u hang up
When I call you.

Verse 2
I don't wanna gate crush into your life
i just wanna establish some understanding
I cant stand and watch our luv going down the drain
and i will stop at nothing just to save it
How do we resolve outstanding issues
When you cut communication with me
What should i do to get us talking again
Coz i m desperate i need an advice

Back To Prechorus and (Chorus*2)

Brigde
Baby i'm running out of ideas
But the only thing I want to hear is your voice
Do you remember, all of those days
When we just could not hang up
we could talk over the phone, till the break of dawn
And neither of us got even tired
Now there is winter, in my room
And the world is too quiet for me
I see no purpose , in my life
When we just cant even talk to each other

BACK TO CHORUS*2