Who Knew Lyrics critique - faster heavy metal

by Corey
(Wentworth, NH)

Hi, This song doesn't have a chorus, but I am open to any suggestions. I wrote this song when I was thinking about children who's parent's treat them badly and neglect them.

Why do I waste my time with you
You're only worth a bronze star
You're barely worth my shoe
Who knew
I'd waste my time with you
You just neglect and disconnect
From the love we shared
I would have gave my life for you
But now you're just a bump in my regretful past
Just a regret in a life long contract

What did I do
To be punished to
Live with you
In public you pretend
To be my best friend
But in the deep black shadows
You show your dark side
And on the inside
You're ice cold heart beats
Like an infernal ticking time bomb

Who knew how evil you were
You're a broken nerve away
From serial killer status
Who knew
I feel exanimate
When your stone cold eyes meet mine
My heart burns with hate and rage
I want you out of my sight
Leave, go back to your dingy cage
I am the light
That overpowers you
I bring the peace back
Your death is long overdue

That's when I realize
If I kill, I'll just turn into you
I hold back, and run away
Never to see you again
As I leave you in your dirty ditch
I begin to idealize about a life
Where I'm free
To have a life without you

That's all I've got, any comments are welcome help with the lyrics if you can.

Thanks,
Corey