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What will we do? Lyric Feedback /Country Lyric/ Charlie from Alabama

by Charlie
(Alabama)

This is an older Lyric I wrote.I have rewritten it several times. I think it has a powerful message.I would appreciate some feedback on this one.

What will we do?

He threw her away,
Like an old newspaper he'd already read.
He got all he wanted,
Last night, when he took her to his bed.
As he turned the covers back,
It was as if he'd turned a page,
on a chapter of his life.
One more mistake that he has made.
What will she do? What will she do?

Nine months later,
In the back room of a clinic south of main.
A baby boy is born,
With no father there, to give the child, a name.
The child is handed to a stranger.
Then the money changes hands.
A mother can't help but wonder,
If her boy will ever understand.
What she had to do? What she had to do.?

Chorus
And the circle goes unbroken
as the truth remains unspoken.
When nothing changes, don’t expect it to.
While we look for the answer
a mistake
becomes a cancer.
Leaving us to wonder,
what will we do? What will we do?

The boy grew up,
With a question he was too afraid to ask.
There's no future,
If you're always looking for your past.
But he found someone who loved him,
And one night things went too far.
He became his father's son
In the back seat of a car.
Now, what will he do? What will he do?

And the circle goes unbroken
and the truth remains unspoken.
When nothing changes, don’t expect it to.
While we look for the answer
A mistake
becomes a cancer.
Leaving us to wonder,
What will we do? What will we do?




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What will we do? Lyric Feedback /Country Lyric/ Charlie from Alabama

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Dec 04, 2008
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hi
by: Sweetie

interesting lyrics..... Good work:)

Jan 20, 2009
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yes
by: Anonymous

what a pretty song i love it

Feb 20, 2009
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Liked it
by: Mickey

Charlie,,,i really enjoyed this song...It has a powerful message and one we see all to often...This song really hit home to me...I adopted a little girl when she was 12. and i can tell you personally that she is always chasing the past....Good work and i cant wait to read more of your writings...

Mar 12, 2009
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good story
by: Danny

Hey Charlie,
Good story line.Keep doing your thing.

Mar 16, 2009
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wow
by: Anonymous

wow the lyrics to this song was amazing. i got chills reading it. i hope you never give up writing. can't wait to read more of your lyrics...or hear them on the raido.

Mar 24, 2009
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NICE!
by: K. Fretz

Nice one dude, very powerful...
you said you've rewritten this? would be interesting to see the original, but dude... don't rewrite it again, VERY GOOD!

p.s. you spelt Maine wrong :)

Apr 06, 2009
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Great!
by: Anonymous

Wow. It really sounds like a professional wrote it. It would be wonderful to hear this on the radio. Great story line, nice delivery, love it!

Apr 21, 2009
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Very Interesting
by: Anonymous

This is a very interesting, powerful song. I feel that this can relate to many people. Keep on writing! This was wonderful!

Apr 28, 2009
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cool
by: Anonymous

Wow those lyrics were so amazing!You are so talented.Keep writing.

May 27, 2009
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OK, where to start?
by: Anonymous

This is a good song, but you have too much of an image of the story in your head. Instead of making it like time, just do one section, also, I did not get a certain beat out of that, and was wondering what type of music would be playing with it. Other than that, good work.

Jun 06, 2009
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wow
by: M-M-M

this is amazing i really love it
you dont get alot of songs written these days with a realy story too them, i love it please write and post more!

Jul 22, 2009
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beautiful
by: Kel

Honestly keep writing. you have a good song just maybe polish it up a little. all in all i can't wait to hear it on the radio.

Aug 08, 2009
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They're young and they're gonna do it
by: Thomas

I guess you get five stars. I didn't read the whole thing. I rewrote the lyrics 12 times to a song I first wrote in 1985. Now I'm to the point of no more. It's ready. It's going on tape. The last two re-writes were just two very simple two or three word phrases which really seem to make the difference. Sometimes you just have to hurry up and say it's finished, let's do it.

Aug 16, 2009
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would love to hear it
by: Lonnie

very strong subject, but I like that in a song. I would love to hear it

Oct 29, 2009
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alsome
by: Anonymous

Hey that song was great i read it about 4 times!!!!!!! The part of the song i love the most was the chorus the first two lines just blew my mind!!!!!!! GREAT WORK!! WRITE MORE AND POST!!

Nov 30, 2009
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awesome, keep working on it!! it is almost there
by: Akilina Merel Koralie

im still a beginner but i can tell just by looking that you built on your skill when rewriting trying to get the right words. the lyrics tell the story well.

but, i dont know how i should say this but,i dont think it expresses the actual emotions enough. you should try to make it a little more simple. in my opinion. to me i think you are focusing on the story and the words too much...

its like you are making a song summarizing some short story you read or something. you are telling it as is, and the main events, but not focusing on making it so the feelings with the song show that even those who never experianced it can just feel it.

this is a song, remember, and will have someone singing it and playing music to it. make it simple and clean and get the message across while leting the audience feel it and not making it too complicated.

whether you heed what i said and keep it in mind is up to you... this is mostly opinion based now that i think about it. lets all work hard!!!

Dec 13, 2009
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Full Circle
by: Jeff

Charlie,

I really like songs that come full circle when they tell a story. It's a traditional way of doing a country song. I think any song that makes you laugh, cry or think is a good song and your's definitely qualifies.

Keep doin' what you do.

Jeff

Aug 31, 2010
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Good Song
by: Joshua Rhodes

Charlie this one is great too. The lack of a resolution as to what the kid did is driving me crazy tho. I'd like to think he went on to be a good father, but I feel like I really need the song to tell me what happened. All in all a great song. you sucked me right in to the story line like any good song should so great job!

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