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waiting lyrics critique

by andrew
(ny)

green’s only emerald
after the rain
numb’s only comfort
after the pain

fire’s only warmth
after we’re cold
we only feel young
after we’re old

sky’s only calm
before a storm
wrong’s only right
when it’s the norm

air’s only quiet
after the sound
until declared lost
you can’t be found

waiting to be moved
chess pieces on a board
action-reaction
what are we waiting for?

can only miss
what’s already gone
can only regret
what’s already done




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Jan 26, 2010
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by: NoReason

I like it :)

Especialy the rhyming technique?!

Mar 05, 2010
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by: Anonymous

I think this song is amazing. The words all form together in a good and positive way. You've got potential and I think you can really write. Don't let anybody tell you otherwise. :)

Jul 01, 2010
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ty
by: Anonymous

ah thank you both so much (: i dont get a lot of feedback normally so your words mean alot

Jul 22, 2010
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song
by: tjc96968@live.com

this sounds more like a poem than a song to me, but thats just my opinion

Sep 04, 2010
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Meaningful
by: Pianissimo

Really like your lyrics and rhyme pattern. I think you express something lots of us feel at times...

Sep 05, 2010
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<3
by: KristynCountry

I liked it a lot! It wasn't really complicated. I loved the lyrics and the beat. i could almost imagine the music in my head :)

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