Untitled - Song Lyrics Critique

I've been working on this song recently, it is subject i've never experienced until recently so i just wanted some advice of any other writers. Basically what i have is two verse's and a chorus so far, i have a melody for the song but i'm still unsure where to go with the story:

Counting down the days drains the colour from your skin and the hurt that sleeps inside you…it slowly drags you in
Counting down the days, it drains the colour from your skin and the fear that sleeps inside of you…it slowly pulls you in

It’s so hard to see you as a shadow of what you used to be
It’s so hard to see you as a shadow of what you used to be

Just whisper in my ear and tell me all those fears,
no one has to hear what you say.
Just whisper in my ear and tell me all your fears,
no one has to hear what you say.

It’s so hard to see that you are a shadow of what you used to be
It’s so hard to see that you are a shadow of what you used to be