Untitled Lyrics Critique Rock

2 songs here. The first is kind of passive. When the chorus kicks in it kind of picks up. Then the last part really picks up. I don't know I guess I'm wondering if it flows and that it makes sense..

Second isn't done.. It's heavier but not screaming heavy. I need to know if it's got potential or if it's just a bunch of nonsensical drivel.

I still think that we were one in the same
We had our own way
We made the rules to our own little game
A game I still play
I remember every little thing
Every precious second I laid
By your side and felt it all fade away

But I failed to make the best of
All the time that we had left
Maybe you tried to explain
Maybe you tried to explain but all in vain
So consumed that I became
I became the man I am today
Too scared so I push away
Anything that matters to me

Well I guess you made it perfectly clear
It will always be you and me
A world apart and yet you still appear
To be all I really need
I think of you I think of all of those years
Without you I could not be
With every breathe I feel you drawing me near

Oh I failed to make the best of
All the time that we had left
Maybe you tried to explain
Maybe you tried to explain but all in vain
So consumed that I became
I became the man I?ve come to hate

Maybe you tried to explain
Maybe you tried to explain everything
If I had stayed would things have changed?

Would I have been able to stop you from trying?
Would I have been able to stop you from..?

I hated you for the longest time
Blamed you for everything
I could not bear to say goodbye
Because that would mean
That you were no longer here
You are no longer here
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Halo

I rode the storm, let it wither out
Tilled the soil and braced the walls with grout
All in all, I don?t fear the consequence
Cuz when it feels like, there is something, a yearning,
Burning a hole deep in me

I swallow my pride as I break away
I?m left with the band of rose to comfort me
I?m biding my time while I try to find my way back from here

A wilted rose engraved in a halo
A halo adorned by a queen
Inside gleams the guide that has led me here
A glimmer bound by chain just to keep me sane
Oh I?ll do anything to keep this halo for me
And me alone, cuz I built her throne
When her kingdom was going to waste

I am the fucking consequence
Cuz when it feels like, there is something, a yearning,
Burning a hole deep in me

I swallow my pride as I break away
I?m left with the band of rose to comfort me
I?m biding my time while I try to find my way back from here