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unsteady lyrics critique - pop/rock/alt (?) song

by leena p

sitting here
just thinkin bout the day that didn't come.
tomorrows expectations
limitations just begun.
another smile
the extra miles are fading with the sun
anticipating
dissilating, thoughts all come undone
and i keep holding on
yes i'm drawn to the arms that will not open for me.
i am shaking shaking;
steady ground won't hold me longer
unaffected, still expected, steadied hands.
compliments, some casualties
unlimited, oh baby please
please smile for me;
we'll dance through the make believe.
twist the truth;
these unforgiving walls can not provide
satisfaction;
bandaged by the lies he tries to hide.
unraveling,
managing to keep his smile wide,
yet reality
enables me from sticking to a side.
and i keep holding on
yes im drawn to the hands that will not hold on to me
i am shaking shaking
steady ground won't hold me longer.
unaffected, still expected, steadied hands.
compliments, some casualties,
so limited, oh baby please
please smile for me
we'll dance through the make believe.
don't look
these eyes
those can't understand.
just breathe, just be.
don't speak,
those lips
these want to pretend.
make believe, make it real.
you are shaking shaking
steady ground won't hold you longer.
unaffected, still expected
steadied hands.
compliments, some casualties
miles and miles oh baby please
please smile for me
well dance through the make believe




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hi
by: talitha

very soulful I wish I could write like that

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