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Title: Unknown Lyrics Feedback/critque-Alternative rock

by Shawn Dunn; writter Wade Patry
(Sault Ste Marie Ontario Canada)

another song wriiten by my friend Wade Patry. He has been on a writing storm latley, anyway just wondering what other people thought about this song. It's about his new girlfriend and her problems but he is willing to cope with them. NO MUSIC YET, but were gettin together to record it soon if you have any ideas for a title aswell as some feedback send it to me at shawndunn15@msn.com:

Verse 1: Today you told me
About what you've done before
People you've hurt
Terrible things and more
You've done some bad things
But the past is the past
I'm willing to work through it
Because I know we're going to last

Verse 2: What you've done before
Thing's you're afraid to tell
It doesnt mean anything
You've gone through hell
I want to hold you
Tell you everything will be okay
Anything that would make you smile
That's what I want to say

Chorus 1: Your heart has scars
That's alright with me
I love you just the same
Baby can't you see
I'm going to mend your wings
If you only let me
We're going to fly together
And be all we can be

Verse 3: I love you
I have no doubt
Nothing can change that
as you pour your heart out
No one else I'd rather be with
Your smile lights my world
And when we kiss
I know you're my girl

Chorus 2: Your heart has scars
And that's alright with me
I love you just the same
Baby can't you see
I'm going to mend your wings
If you only let me
We're going to fly together
And be all we can be

Verse 4: We're going to be stronger for this
Baby believe me
I can love you
If you only let me

Chorus 3: Your heart has scars
That's alright with me
I love you just the same
Baby can't you see
I'm going to mend your wings
If you only let me
We're going to fly together
And be all we can be




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Title: Unknown Lyrics Feedback/critque-Alternative rock

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Nov 10, 2009
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Wow...
by: LiekRawr

I absolutely love this. It flows so nicely, and when I was reading it my heart simply began to melt. I wish someone would write something like this for me.

Dec 05, 2009
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AWESOEM!!!
by: Marie

I love itt must be some special girl!!

i wish someone could love me that much. wade's girlfriend is lucky!! :)

Dec 17, 2009
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by: andrew

i like it and i think the theme would have great appeal with the general public. keep it up bro

Dec 21, 2009
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Kepp doin what you are doin Son
by: Anonymous

Tukker: this is real good lil brother - I can feel the passion and the heart - you are on your way lil man - always write what your heart tells you. You may have to bend a bit for the music industry but always , always remember who you are and why you love to write the music. Peace to you and yours and Happy Holidays.
Douglas W White
The Glass Poets

Jan 24, 2011
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Hmmm.
by: Amanda

it's good, but try not to repeat the same words all the time. try to expand your vocabulary

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