Time Lyrics Critique - Medium Tempo Acoustic Song
by Jake
(NH)
Hey guys, I'm Jake and this is one of the best songs I've written so far. I just want to know what you think about the lyrics; I feel like I can't make them better! This is kinda like Smashing Pumpkins' acoustic stuff, or that's what I had in mind. I call it, "Time"
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Verse;
As Time, tries to find, you and I, we escape
When fitting in isn't an option, anymore, we would know
Bridge;
What I see, isn't what you see, isn't what they see
What I feel, isn't what you feel, they could never feel
Chorus;
Some of us get stuck where we are, not moving on
Don't get left behind
Stuck on a stitch in time
We wont leave you behind, leave you behind
Verse;
As time, finds you and I, we'll come to realize,
We can never escape
A sad fact it may seem, that we can only dream
Bridge;
And as I scream, so desperately, they can only pretend not to hear me
And as I scream, scream, scream, scream
hopefully one day, they will see
Chorus;
Some of us get stuck where we are, not moving on
We won't leave you behind
Waiting on a stitch in time
We won't leave you behind, leave you behind
Verse(Ending);
And in the end of time, it's just you and me, and that's all we need
so come with me, and we will, we will escape
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So I hope you enjoyed, and PLEASE leave me comments, I want to know what you think!!!
