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The Pain - Songwriters Lyrics Critique- Ballad with certain parts that get a faster more powerful tempo

by L
(SC, USA)

The Pain (need help with song title; any other suggestions welcome)

They say it gets easier
As time goes by
They say you start to forget
But I keep wonderin' why

The pain is still here
Burning in my heart
I'm just trying to survive

The world moves on
With or without me
I work hard to stay alive

(Chorus)
BEcause he's gone
because he left
i'm here all my myself
he's up in the sky somewhere
watching over me
But I need him here beside me

But what nobody tells you is that the pain not only stay
It gets harder every day
With each and every hour
The pain keep gettin' stronger
I need someone to come take it away

The pain is still here
Searing my heart
I'm just trying to get by

Everybody else goes on with their daily lives
Whether or not I survive
I'm working hard to stay alive

(Chorus)

BEcause he's gone
because he left
I'm here all alone
He''s an angel up in the sky
Helping to keep my faith alive

They say it gets easier
AS time goes by
They say you start to forget
But I'm realizing...
It's all just a lie

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The Pain - Songwriters Lyrics Critique- Ballad with certain parts that get a faster more powerful tempo

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Dec 08, 2008
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cool
by: Sweetie

Great lyrics:) Suffering for title, u can maybe use "hurt". I love the lyrics:)

Dec 08, 2008
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Thanks!
by: L

Thanks so much! I appreciate it!

Dec 09, 2008
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WECOME
by: Sweetie

U'RE WELCOME. I WRITE LYRICS TOO AND ALWAYS PROBLEM WITH CHORUS AND RHYMING.

Dec 16, 2008
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Check it out...
by: Gregory Alan Cotter II a.k.a. Th Broken Child

The song is awesome, really deep and yet so hardcore. If you'd like check out my song "I'm not done with you" and "Alone". As for the title of this song, I'd go for Never Forgotten, or Suffering.

Jan 21, 2009
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Like it
by: oceansoul

Really nice and sentimentally. I like it, good work :)

Mar 17, 2009
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song title
by: John

firstly, great song!!! :D also, a good title would be "one more day, one more hour"

Apr 28, 2009
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Title
by: Trapper

Nice Lyrics.

I think "They say you start to forget..." is the strongest hook in the lyric, so that should be your title.

May 01, 2009
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Great song
by: Kayla

This is a great song.The lyrics are beautiful.Keep writing.For the title,maybe you could call it "I Need Him" or "Because He's Gone." My title probably suck!Haha!

May 01, 2009
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great lyrics!
by: Anonymous

this song could touch so many peoples hearts. The title could possibly be, not a day goes by? i think thats what i would name it. Other than title, great song all around!

May 08, 2009
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Great job!!=)
by: Anonymous

Great sentimentality/imagery! Keep up the good work! I write songs, too & find problems w/rhyming

Aug 10, 2009
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wow
by: Anonymous

i started singing this straight away had everything in my head

good writing

Sep 18, 2009
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Good
by: Nora

Good song, very emotional a good title can be "Forget"

Oct 24, 2009
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I LOVE IT!
by: Anonymous

I love it! I might only be 13 but i would totally listen to it over and over.

Nov 15, 2009
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"hard to stay alive"
by: Ryan Roy Branch

you should call it "hard to stay alive" ,i know its not a lyric in ur chorus but thats the message of ur song as i see it very good lyrics from the heart like they should be

Feb 01, 2010
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title suggestions and comments
by: Writer

Title suggestion: Gone, Im Alone, Alone, Without You, Pass Me By, Still Broken...............idk

ur song is touching and sadning, which makes it really good if the audience can connect w/ it. and most important im sure everybody understands it.
keep writing, it helps the pain a lot to let it out on paper.

Mar 27, 2010
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I like it!
by: Dan P

The lyrics are great! You tell a great story. If you are looking for a title, try grabbing somethig from your chorus like "In the Sky". I wrote a song once that didn't include the title in the song even, And nobody can remember what it's called. Because it's my art capturing that particular moment in time I kept it as is, but I learned my lesson.

May 11, 2010
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nice...
by: Bree

ok, it was a nice song dont' get me wrong but it was a little too...simple. I didn't really feel pain when i read it and that's what song writing is all about...feeling the pain!

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