The Irritated. lyrics critique - Rock and Roll/Punk.

by Summer
(North Texas)

this is one of the first songs i've ever written. my friend jessica helped. to see one of her songs look for " having fun". please enjoy. :DDDDDDDDDDD

verse 1

i've got this thing on my mind
i just can't stand it anymore
everyone is taunting me with the things of their world.
the things that i do keep them ringing in my ear.
but they sadly have nothing to fear
nothing to drive them away.
they just keep standing right in front of myshort getting shorter days.

chorus 1

i've got to take them out
cause i just don't need them anymore
the pain and the suffering
so just take them out
because they don't need to be there anymore.
the heart pounding draining
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sorry guys. that's all i have for now.
i promise you all that ill have more out soon. and check out my friend Jessica's song- "Having Fun"