The Breakup Song - Lyrics Critique

by Charlie Mitchell
(Alabama)

The Breakup Song By Charlie in Alabama

You said you were sorry / but it’s over/
You say that we have/ slowly grown apart/
You say I no longer / pay attention to your needs /
And breaking up / is breaking your heart /

You say I didn’t notice / the details /
Well, darling /that simply isn’t true/
Just to prove my point, /have a seat right here/
There are some things/ I need to say to you /


About your hair……/
I suggest/ you pick a color /
Either blonde or brunette /
Or buy a hat/
And about those real tight jeans/
You’re always wearing/
They really do/
make your butt look fat/

I’m glad I had this chance / to be honest /
I should have been/ honest all along/
I guess I zoned out/ when I’d hear you start to pout/
It’s not a problem now / if your really gone /

No, I’m not saying this/ to get even /
Or because /I’m trying to hurt you /
You are right /I never was/ really honest/
Honey, that’s all / I’m trying to do/

So, About your hair…./
I suggest/ you pick a color/
Either blonde or brunette or red or brown or green/
Or buy a hat /
And about that little black dress /
You’re always wearing /
It really does make you look fat /