sunset - lyrics critique(:

by kelsey
(wisconsin)

hey guys, this is just one of the many songs i have on here. just looking for some tips to make it better or flow more. (: thanks!


Sunset

I’ve always been the one picked last
Kuz no one gives me the chance
Im tired of playing your games
It gets worse every day

But, I’ll be the one to show
Kuz right now im letting go (oh)

I’ll just let my voice
trail off into the sunset
Im following my dreams
to wherever they may take me
and if you’re not along for the ride
(oh) you’ll catch up sometime

I’ve always been the one behind the crowd
too scared to stand up for myself
im tired of being lonely
it gets worse every second

But, I’ll be the one to show
Kuz right now im letting go (oh)

I’ll just let my voice
trail off into the sunset
Im following my dreams
to wherever they may take me
and if you’re not along for the ride
(oh) you’ll catch up sometime

(ride off) into the sunset
spread my wings (im gonna fly)

I’ll just let my voice
trail off into the sunset
Im following my dreams
to wherever they may take me
and if you’re not along for the ride
(oh) you’ll catch up sometime

(oh) you’ll catch
(yeah) you’ll catch
you’ll catch up sometime