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Summer Romances - Acoustic - Lyrics Critique

by Michelle

Summer Romances

I thought this summer would never pass
But then came fall so quick and fast
And you were just as quick to leave
As if you already forgot about me
But you crossed your heart and hoped to die
That I would never see another gray sky

But it looks like you lied again
Down this cold dark road I've already been
So please just stop your promise making
I deserve more than your promise breaking

My mama told me to never believe
In summer romances he'll always leave
He'll steal your heart and you will let him in
They he will break it just so he can win
If only I listened to her wise words
I wouldn't be broken on the floor so hurt

And now the summer is dead and gone
But I still stayed awake until dawn
Waiting for you to come say you're sorry
But you never showed up where could you be
I thought to you I had meant more
You said you loved me like no one before

But it looks like you lied again
Down this cold dark road I've already been
So please just stop your promise making
I deserve more than your promise breaking

My mama told me to never believe
In summer romances he'll always leave
He'll steal your heart and you will let him in
They he will break it just so he can win
If only I listened to her wise words
I wouldn't be broken on the floor so hurt

And it is time for me to be strong
And it is time for me to move on
I will erase your pathetic self from my mind
I will be happy and I will be fine




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Jul 16, 2011
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Wow!
by: Catrionaa Maxwell

This Is Really, Really Good! I Love It, The Chorus Is Really Powerfull! Well Done :) x

Jul 20, 2011
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Brings back memories of someone I once knew
by: Lenny

Very cool, very inspiring to write some music to.

Dec 13, 2011
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Nice images
by: Anonymous

Hey there! I think you have some really great ideas here and some really nice images. I love:
So please just stop your promise making
I deserve more than your promise breaking

Great line! BUT...I'm confused by the first verse. I'm not sure where the romance is going. When did he leave? And when was the promise made? It might make it clearer if you switch the lines around:

I thought this summer would never pass
But then came fall so quick and fast
You crossed your heart and hoped to die
That I would never see another gray sky
And you were just as quick to leave
As if you already forgot about me

I know it messes up the rhyme scheme so you'd have to tweak that, but I think it makes it easier to follow the chronology of the story.

Also, in what I'm guessing is your chorus I'm confused by the line:
They he will break it just so he can win

I think you mean to say "That he will break it..." but even so, I'm not sure what he's winning.

Just my thoughts. Hope they help! You have the start of some really nice lyrics here! Wish I could hear the music to go along with it! Best of luck!


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