Stutter - Lyrics Critique

by Leann Spicola
(Macon GA)

this tension plucks my hair like tightly wound guitar strings
and every time I push Im pulled back and Im trying to breathe

and the smell gets stronger
and your eyes get weaker
I pray you get better
but the futures looking bleaker

Open another g*d D*mn bottle
and push your kids away just a little bit harder
you say I can't understand and I don't even want to know
its your liquid lullaby and I've just got to let go

but hushaby now, I'll just let you lay down to sleep
all I can do now is pray the lord your soul to keep
await the day the bottles down again
and we'll know the pain subsides again

and the smell gets stronger
and your eyes get weaker
I pray you get better
but the futures looking bleaker




LYRICS BASED ON MY RELATIONSHIP WITH MY ALCOHOLIC MOM.
MY PARENTS DIVORCED WHEN I WAS 7 AND EVER SINCE, MY GRANDFATHER AND UNCLE HAVE DIED, BOTH ON MY MOMS SIDE. YEAR AFTER YEAR, SHE DRINKS MORE AND MORE AND I SLEEP LESS AND LESS.