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Sticks and Stones - Lyrics Critique - Rock

by blue
(nebraska)

I'm 13 and this is one of the first songs I've written.

Why does it matter to anyone else,
Why do they have to make it such a big deal,
Does it make them feel tough inside,
But nobody knows, how hard it is to heal.

Sticks and Stones will break my bones, but words will kill my pride.

I’m just a kid who’s being himself,
And everybody’s trying to tear me down,
I feel weak when I say that it’s working,
And they get the satisfaction of seeing me frown,

*What’s wrong with you, what’s wrong with me,
When all I know is the things you call me?
Constant harassment, constant pain,
Infecting the blood running through my veins,

Sticks and Stones will break my bones, but words will break my mind.

The call me names and I feel so helpless,
Like time is frozen but I can’t sit still,
Or they’ll attack me with words of hatred,
I'll stand there helpless while they go in for the kill,

Why do they care about the shirt I’m wearing,
Why do they care about the color of my skin,
Why do they care about what they see on the outside,
When all they’re hurting is what’s beating within,


**What’s wrong with you, what’s wrong with me,
When all I know is the names you call me?
Constant harassment, constant pain,
Infecting the blood running through my veins,
Sticks and stones will break my bones, but you will kill my pride. X3

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Sticks and Stones - Lyrics Critique - Rock

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Nov 18, 2008
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wow
by: Anonymous

wow
awsome song dude
i wanted to know if i could use the
"whats wrong with you whats wrong with me....."
chourse thing cause it goes in perfect with a peice im putting together with my band

Nov 23, 2008
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re
by: Anonymous

yeah sure dude. no problem. thanks for the comment. i appreciate it.

Nov 27, 2008
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have to second that WOW
by: Becky BC

you've inspired the first comment i've made. You are so young and it's sad the amount of pain you feel. You seem sincere and I think you have talent. Keep it up!

Dec 03, 2008
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Good job.
by: Charlie

The goal of everything i write is to convey an emotion or feeling I have in the body of work we call Lyrics. I think of them as an emotional burp. You did an excellent job in getting your frustrations across in a form that was readable and consistant. I felt it was very well written You have a gift . Your job now is to develop it to it's fullest. Do not let the people that you feel are attacking you win. Use them as motivation to brcome the best you can becomeinspite of their negitive thoughts or words. You are smart insightful and creative so now be positive and go kick some butt.keep writing. Check out some of my stuff annd even though its country let me know what you think.

Dec 05, 2008
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Hmm...
by: Amira

The lyrics are interesting, good job on them.

Dec 14, 2008
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WOAH!
by: Tiffany K.

This song is really good and it can be a cool rock song with an electric guitar and all
Anyway, my name is Tiffany and like you i think my dream is to become a singer i've written songs but there not good enough to put them here! but maybe one day when i get over my shyness i will!

Dec 30, 2008
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the real deal
by: d olsen

this is the one song that comes across as the real deal keep writing songs for us to enjoy

Jan 14, 2009
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Let It Out
by: Corey

Keep writing, I know where you're coming from, I deal with it alomst everyday, and writing's a good way to let it out.

Mar 08, 2009
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Good Job
by: Danny

Do not stop writing.Read everything you can about writing.Study the great songs.You have the talent to write classics.Good luck in the future.


Much Success,
Danny

Apr 01, 2009
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wow
by: Anonymous

your song is very powerful, and contains truths that many people don't want to admit. I think the lyrics are amazing, to be honest, and touching. I really like it, even though it makes me sad that people think like that.

May 09, 2009
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Great!
by: Anonymous

You've done a fantastic job! I know exactly what you're goin' thru, I went thru it from Kindergarten to grade 8 and still experience it frequently. I'm tryin' to write a song like this, so if you don't mind, i may use some of your lines
Keep your chin up and keep writing!

Your friend
Bri

Jul 07, 2009
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aweeesommeeee!
by: Anonymous

Like time is frozen but I can’t sit still,

that lyric is amazing i love it! the whole song is really relatable and anyone would connect with that, and it's all true.

Jul 10, 2009
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incredible
by: Bria

I really like this. I'm 16 and I can't believe someone at 13 could write something so incredible. it definitely makes a great song...keep writing more! :)

Jul 17, 2009
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Really Good
by: Anonymous

Wow! I luv the lyrics.

Aug 18, 2009
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this is a really wrote good
by: Lonnie

you may be only 13, but your writing is amazing.
I have spent two days on this site reading lyrics that other people have written, and most of the time I leave no comment,because I can't find anything good about most of them. You have a real talent that you should be very proud of. keep up the good work----

Feb 22, 2010
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(:
by: shelbelle

i'm 12 and i write songs too, this is great. (: good work (:

Sep 01, 2010
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VERY GOOD
by: Rebecca

Hi, i thought your lyrics were great, because they are emotional and people can relate....This is my personal opinion in that i think it would be nice to change "Sticks and Stones will break my bones, but you'r words will never kill my pride". and the other line "Sticks and Stones will break my bones, but words will never break my mind." I think its great to write really emotional songs but it is nice to show a form of strength in that you WONT LET PEOPLE break you down, just my suggestion, keep writing and good luck

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