Songwriters Lyric Critique - doesnt have a name,,,yet

Um this is sorta my first song... thats been seen on paper, but it isnt finnished but i would really like your opinions and comments about what you like/dislike.


The damage there is beyond repair.
There is no use tryin to get through to me that all you want is to see me pleased.
Well now my heart is tripin, now its ripin and and and!
Tripin, ripin breaking my heart
Boy you planed this from the start.
You thought it would be fun to rip pieces of my heart one by one.
(background echo ‘one by one’)
Now im piecing them back together.
I ‘ll repair your broken lies
I want see your plans, and find out why you are a mystery to me…
(background ‘to me’)
boy why you try to hide from this
If all you want is to see me content