Songwriters Lyrics Critique

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Cross Roads - lyrics critique - country/southern rock 

Cross Roads

He walked up out of that delta on a hot dry July night
The music burning in him with a Gibson on his back
And the old men on the benches ...

'Losers' Hall of Fame" lyrics critique - slow three chord country 

Losers Hall of Fame

Did you see the big deal that went on in town last night
They were handing out awards for the deads in your life
It sure did ...

"Kiss me" - lyrics critique 
Sorry if it is bad. it's my first song. Keep in mind, I am only 10. Don't ask me how I got the idea.
Feel free to e-mail me if you like it.

heyer32@...

September Gray Lyrics Critique, country song 
"September Gray"


1. I'll always remember, every second of that day


When the angels came from heaven, and carried you away


They came down ...

Perestroika (incomplete)- rap metal - lyrics critique 
this is my first song, so dont be too hard

V1:
Destruction, walking through the streets of Abandonment, population 2,000,000 and growing each day

Reforming ...

Experience gain through dad - Lyrics Critique 
Experience gain through dad
(a talk)
First of all thanks to dad for bringin me in to this world life is a struggle 3x
I do this for the world to all ...

I Can Admit Lyrics Critique- Rap Lyrics 
When I'm angry,
I tend to write.
When I'm angry,
I tend to fight,
cuz those are the only things I can do right.
Right and wrong,
to me there's no ...

Lyrics for Original song by the Revolution Girlz...Style:Pop...Title: Believe 
This is just the chorus of the song. We are thinking of changing it (my band and I):

You gotta believe
That I'm here for you
I know that what you'...

Stop Judging-Christian Song 
There is a kid walking down the hall
He looks different from the other ones
Kids make fun of him for the way he looks.
He hates the way he looks

Why ...

thinking bout you always lyrics critique 
Thinking about you makes me cry
Staying up late I wonder why
Wondering why life was this way
I was picked out, I was made to pay
My daddy left me ...

"another goodbye" - Genre: Pop -Lyrics Critique 
Please leave, or i fall in love with you,
And I know, thats not, what you would like me to.

But i really like you to stay
But you know how awkward ...

"dream" - lyric critique 
VERSE:1
There's a dream in my mind
but will it come true
will i ever achieve it
there's a voice in my head
telling me you cant do it
but what i say ...

No name- lyrics- critique- opinionate- psychedelic rock 
Whats the reason for the birds and the songs they always sing
Whats the point in speaking words if you dont bother listening
Whats the reason for our ...

ill be there (working title) - lyrics critique 
haha ok so...i have a problem. i have a chorus written down and this always happens when i try to write..i can get a chorus but no verses or bridge =P ...

"Prove Song Critique - Pop Song" 
You've got me on my knees
Begging please baby please

Can you prove to me, prove to me

That you can be the answers to my prayers?
Prove that you ...

My Goodbye lyrics Critique -Pop song?? 
I've written some lyrics, but i don't know if they are good. I want some criticism from someone besides my friends! I don't exactly like mine, I think ...

Look In The Mirror - Songwriting Critique - Rock Song 
This song is about answering a single question: Are you really living your life as you want, or are you just following in someone elses footsteps, just ...

Andy L- Nadine PLEASE COMMENT. 
UNEMPLOYED LYRIC WRITER NEEDS help!!!!!!! Would love 2 work with anyone willing to put a voice and music 2 my crazy ideas. Please email lavellea@abtinternet....

Closing Doors - Grunge Rock - Songwriting Critique 
I guess I'm trying to be like Nirvana here...
Don't really like the name 'Closing Doors,' but it fits with the song... am open to other suggestions (possibly ...

Standing There-Rock/blues with the music behind it it sounds better 
Verse1-
I saw you standing there again same clothes you were wearing yesterday.. and are you drowning there in the tears rolling down your face but you ...

Suitcase Lyrics Review 
Rotting corpse starving for perfection,
Brain over loads with life's conceptions ,
Lungs disperse a blistering tone,
Functions greased to loosen as ...

"The Addiction" - Lyrics Critique - Alternative 
so, this is just a song i wrote for my girlfriend. let me know what you think, john94xc@gmail.com


( )= background voice
{ }= all voices

V1
...

Alternative Lyrics Critique - Breather 
VERSE 1
if i said tonight would be
the last time that youd hear from me
a last goodbye---
would you go on and forget about
the rest as the waves carry ...

Lyric Critique - christian/country 
i really like the idea of where my song is going about the struggle of addiction, but i just don't think it flows well, and i just think some of the words ...

If I had a car like that country Lyric Critique 
If I had a car like that

She was low and mean
I wasn’t quiet sixteen
And she was the object of my dreams
She had a Drop top, big block, with four ...

love or a trend lyrics critique 
a little song i wrote dont konw if is should be rock or old style pop???



verse 1: Theres something i cant seem to rid from my mind so i think ill ...

I know you Lyric Critique Country Song by Charlie 
I know you
By now you?re hard at work
And the phone won?t stop ringing
In the background you can hear
Nora Jones softly singing
There are yellow sticky ...

Lipstick On His Collar - Lyric Critique 
Verse 1
Every Friday night at the window, I get a glimpse of Mr. Jones,
He gets all dressed up for dinner, then he sits to eat it alone,
He gets out ...

Clay Lyrics Critique rap rock  
Typewriters produce molten population,
Paper boys toss articles cutting into self relations,
The school to study self, never opened the gates,
Plastering ...

He'll never know - lyric critique 
hey everyone, i'm Nicole, i'm 15, i just want to know what you all think, its one of my first songs :D songwritings kinda grown into a hobby for me so ...

Candy Girl Lyrics Critique - Alternative 
This is a song I have been working on for two days along with a antoher song at the same time. It kinda got my attention when I heard my chick friends ...

Untrue Lyrics 
This is a song I wrote not long ago. Tell me what you think, but keep in mind that I'm only 14!

Untrue

I’m walkin’ on an empty street
Not knowin’...

my place by liam maihi comment it. acoustic. 17 years old. 
the air, the air it flows so clear here,
and this summer, this summer smells so new,
but the faces, these faces are all so familiar,
under sky, a sky ...

Only When It Rains Lyrics Critique- Ballad 
It's a duet. Starts with a man, then a woman.
Lemme know what you think :)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
That day we were sitting at a table
...

I want to Be Someone Else Lyrics Critique- Medium tempo song with feeling 
I want to Be Someone Else

I cry Every night
Just thinking about my life
I wake up every morning
Wanting to be different

Everybody else is soo ...

Bad dream. lyrics critique. rock song.  
you promised your heart to me,
you promised your smile and shining eyes.
you promised you would pretect me.
but only if it wasnt a dream
only if it ...

The man you see - Songwriter lyric critique 
You say you want your freedom
Say you need some time
You burned up all your bridges
Made off with my last dime

I keep lookin for a reason
to hold ...

Opposites Repel Lyric Critique 
Veins black, Head pounds to a pulse,
Lips feel covered in mulch,
People so separated,
My own country, I want a truce,
Every time I try I just get pushed ...

Inside Cell Num. 666 - Lyrics Feedback 
Crystal clear glass, You intentionally blur,
You plug your ears as I attempt to be heard,
Just cause it hurts, you block it all out,
Fear to figure,...

Take You Down Lyrics Crtitique - Pop 
1st Verse:

just give it time
for that star to fly
you too busy noticing, that you might be...
invisible
just take it from the start, and never ...

Paradise - Lyric Critique - Country 
First time poster, I write a lot of songs that people like, friends at least. Uh, i just need a lil help. Its supposed to be a kinda laid back feeling ...

Having Fun Lyrics Review 
verse 1

Sitting home one day kickin our shoes (off!)
Bored out our minds nothin to do (oh!)
thinking of something xciting and cool (hey!)
come on ...

(Born To Love You)"cecily knight lyrics CRITIQUE" maybe rock song- undecided 
Im sure everybody sees the silence here.
And the words are nowhere near. They left long ago.
But im not the one about to start a greivance, and that ...

UCFK - Lyric Review 
Verse 1:
Your mind is a product of a computer installation,
Take apart the pieces, Destroy a station,
Understand there's a world beneath the mural,
Question ...

AndyL - Accelerate. Please comment. (Lyric Feedback) 
Driftiong through the craze.
Flowing through the days.
Watching other people in their real life plays.
Drifting throught this curios maze.
Driving ...

AndyL - Coralie Shiver Serenade and Deliver. PLEASE COMMENT 
Coralie Shiver worked 9 till 4 in a run down bar what a bore.
She had a room where she slept from 4 till 9 above a neonm sign that flashed club divine....

"Not This Time" Lyrics Critique- rock/pop song 
"Not This Time" is a song I wrote about my past and present relationship(s). I'm a singer/ songwriter who wants to see just how far my talents can take ...

Her Fake Love Lyrics Critique - metal song 
This song talk about a man his wife was hate and betray him and pretending that she loves him.

people I need your opinion about this lyrics ,please ...

take your pictures - lyrics critique [: 
TAKE YOUR PICTURES


VERSE ONE:
Headline of tomorrow
Got my picture on the front page
Yeah, man, I famous,
Didn’t know it would go this way
Oooo,...

Dont know a name yet . some one could help thoo. (lyric review) 
What do think of this? needs a name have not got one yet.


verse 1
what if it was dream, would i believe it or would i disagree,
ive got this feeling ...

15 Minutes (Rock, Grungy) - Songwriters Lyrics Review 
I am new to songwriting, but this song came to me, and I liked it. Its about my girlfriend who committed suicide.

(verse)
Don't you know what you have?...

"From The Sidelines" Lyrics-Screamo/Hardcore Song 
Here it is. Not very good, I know, but I thought I could use some opinions. Thanks a lot. :)

From The Sidelines

There she is again
Her eyes gaze ...

I Have This Dream 
(Verse 1:)

I have this dream
That I wished we all could know
I have this dream
That I wished we all could show
We are the one's (see)
We need to ...

Sweat Ladder Lyric Critique Rap/Rock song 
Verse 1:
View of a ladder,
There is nothing sadder,
Then no view of the top,
But I got no reason to stop,
This is where my dream begins,
My life ...

Simon Lyrics Critique - Pop Song-These Past Few Days 
Verse 1 (A)
I woke up Monday morning with a migraine
And yesterday’s pain still shows in my eyes
A swollen heart, the day fades away again
So I lie ...

It's Not Okay Lyrics-Pop/Country Song 
You let me tell you everything then you just walk away
What in the world makes that okay
Ohhh it’s not ok
No its not okay

You force me to open up ...

Ballads, Blues and Rock-n-Roll lyrics critique country/ southern rock 

Ballads, Blues and Rock-N-Roll

I woke with the night before pounding in my head
A empty bottle of tequila on the floor by my bed
Felt around on ...

Jessica Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
Picture my little baby boy
He was perfect, pure joy
It was a picture of love at first sight
The first time I saw him in the light

Chorus
In a flash ...

You...Me...Us Lyrics - Critique 
Hi! This is my first lyric to a song. It's not very far, but I think it has some great potential. I'm not really sure yet what genre it would be in, but ...

Broken Strings Critique - Country Song 
I couldn't really decide what the genre would be but the simplest way for me to explain it is slow with a beat.


Broken Strings


Verse 1

I ...

I just want to know lyrics critique-country song 
I've done some thinking
I just want to know if
you love me like you did
when we were just kids

How about that time when, uh
we kissed for the first ...

Savior of Love Lyrics Critique 
Sitting alone, with both eyes closed
The image of you, sets in my mind
Standing beside me, holding a rose
Kissing me softly, but no one knows.

I ...

Country Boy - Lyric Feedback 
Well, I certainly aint no cowgirl
And you aint a country boy
I've never drove a pick-up truck
and you used to live in Detroit

We never went to no ...

Five Reasons To Fall Apart - Lyrics 
Not so very long ago

I’d count your footsteps when you’d go

And sculpt my heart to fit your palm

Welcome you back with open arms



But times ...

Who's Gonna Love Me Now? Critique Lyrics RnB 
VERSE 1:
I remember being in your arms
I love the feel
Of your skin
Against my own
And the smell
Of your cologne
Reassured me
That I ...

"Eff'd in the Ay" lyrics, soulful ballad - critique 
"Eff'd in the Ay"

Girl, I don't think that you know whatcha do to me.
Sendin out signs but they ain't comin through to me

Oh, don't wanna let you ...

Payin' Back Mine? Country Song - Lyrics Critique 
Just a short country song. wrote it on a long drive. just want to know what other people think. Constructive critiscm appreciated.


They said im a ...

Touch of Soul Lyrics Critique - undecided 
I need a story
A song to touch my soul
Make me feel whole again
I don't need no more worries
Or fears to hold me back
From being
Who I know I can ...

"Alone in this world" 
VERSE:1
I feel so alone
I need someone to lift
my spirit
Is there anyone out there
That can fill my soul
with joy
I need to be rescued
From this ...

The Hell You Don't See - Lyrics Feedback 
I wrote this song over 3 years ago in response to some school shootings across the country and a suicide attempt by one of my students in a class I cadet ...

keep believing lyrics citique- pop song 
i am loosing my mind
i am falling apart
for some reason i cant tell
who is the right.

i didnt want to be in this position
i never wanted to make ...

Retina Arson - songwriting critique 
Nuts and bolts piece together sky scraper,
Elevator rise as I scribble on paper,
Inspiration sparks from puncturing art,
The mind shoots determination ...

Untitled -i need one! - lyric critique 
Snow is falling all around seven o’clock and the roads are blocked
There’s nobody in the town so i stay at home
All The schools it seems are all closed,...

Get Out Of Jail Free - Lyrics Critique - Emo Rock - K. Fretz 
Its kind of a metaphor for suicide (The Get Out Of Jail Free card is suicide and I guess the jail is life.
Comment Please, Thanks
ROCK ON!


Get ...

Lyrics Critique - Untitled so far 
I'm new at songwriting, but I wanted to get some honest reviews on this.

Verse 1
Look at the people all around you
Can you not see the suffering
...

A Soldier’s Song (It won’t be Long) Lyric critique 
A Soldier’s Song (It won’t be Long)

There’s a solider on some foreign ground
Who stops to put a package down?
Sent to him from his home town,
So ...

"Lazy Days of Summer Lyrics Critique - Country Song" 
Lazy days of summer,
We were best of friends.
The time we shared together,
We thought would never end.
Skippin' stones and ice cream cones,
We climbed ...

"Heroes and Dreams Lyrics Critique - Country Song" 
When we were younger
We'd share with each other
Our innermost secrets and dreams.

You'd be the damsel
Of a medieval castle
In a fairy tail world ...

Part-Time Dad lyrics critique - country song 
It was you that said goodbye; it was you that said we’re through,
And it was you that left though; I’m still in love with you.
It was you, who filed ...

"Shattered Skies Lyrics Critique - Punk 
Not very good i know, but let me know what you think...
think like a Rise Against type of song


Verse I

Well I'm not sure how to tell you
but ...

Unleashed lyrics critique- Metal Song 
Injected,
Infected,
Our lives reflected
We are wolves by night
Full moons, our kryptonite

Chorus:
Unleashed, we crawl,
We fight for all,
Unite ...

Don't Crank My Tractor Country Lyric Critique 

Don’t crank my tractor,

He was a man of few words
He had farmed near all his life
just last year his ex- best friend
Ran off with his wife
...

All Alone- Ballad - Lyrics Feedback 
Here are some lyrics i wrote and i would love to hear some feedback. They have been influenced by a very hard point in my life, as you can probably tell....

She?s my island - Country w/a Tropical beat -Lyric Charlie 
She?s my island

The smile on her face feels like a warm embrace
Shared with a long lost friend
The soothing touch of her hand
Tells me, she really ...

Cracks Lyrics Critique 
HI! I'm 14 and this is one of the first songs i've ever written. I would love to hear your critiques, so please comment!!!! The lyrics are sort of "odd"...

I wish things were simple again - lyrics critique 
By: Bobby Reynolds 1792 47th street safford az 928-651-1971
This song is my song please don’t copy it with out my permission
E-mail meyapig@live....

Lay it away Lyrics Critique - metal 
This prolly isnt the Genre yall are used to but hey what the heck. its metal has some screaming but these are the lyrics.

You make me feel good, You ...

Let me sleep in silent dream before you go - lyrics critique 
Smile my woman smile…
It’s the only thing I have in this world

Love baby just love…
I’m just sacred I would die alone

It’s amazing how you made ...

Judge The Dead, Rock/Metal Songwriting Critique 
It's time to shed the blood
The blood of your people
And all who fear the name

It is time to judge the dead

The have defeated by the blood
For ...

If You Were Here Today Lyrics Critique - slow song 
It's not entirely finished yet. Advice/suggestions greatly appreciated/welcomed. Let me know whatcha think!!=)

I think of all the fun we had together
...

Corinne Lyrics Critique - What Would Happen? - Love pop song 
What Would Happen?

INTRO:
I'm not sure, how I want
To feel, about you,
And I don't want, them to know
Of the pain, you didn't see you put me through
...

Need to be Free- Country/pop - lyrics critique 
My friend and I are 14, new to songwriting, and we live in Nashville. We are really trying to make it big, like Taylor Swift. The tempo of this song is ...

I can't believe its over Lyrics Critique- country music  
I Cant Believe Its over

It started out so perfectly I can't believe it ended. The feelings that im feeling now im not so sure its ...

Sunsets - Songwriting Critique 
The sunsets in the west
The way we watched it hit the horizon
The way we were carelessly in love
But do i wish
Wish that my mistake didn't end it

Chorus:...

How Could You Do This (To Me)? - Indie Rock - Songwriting Critique 
You said we would last forever,
You said we would never end,
You said you thought I was clever,
Kind, sweet, cute,
And you liked my eyes!
Now Look!...

Escaping hell lyrics critique - rock/metal 
some of the lyrics are a little dark so i apologize if this offends you. im writing lyrics for a metal/rock song that will more than likely have a medium-...

"Back where is all started" critique-Hardcore/pop song 
(chant)
Dont turn your back on me!You'll regret this more then you know!

(Verse 1)
Black eyes,rid fist,and i was told to surrender,
but did you think ...

Rescue Me - Hard Rock Song 
Ok, this is my first song ever so...go easy on me, ok?

E-mail any suggestions to: disturbedcreedfanatic@yahoo.com

Rescue Me:

You see me falling
...

Killing Me Lyrics - Acoustic song 
It's killing me
slowly killing me
But they, say,
Im too young to die
x2

If they knew, if they cared
What if they realised, No one is here
Would ...

"Get Wastified" lyrics critique-hip-hop song (iiklipz) medium to fast tempo 
verse 1< regulate the bottle, us iron rangers get wobbled and try our hardest to regulate the throttle, theres no need for drunk vision goggles, we got ...

Gone - Lyrics Critique 

Verse 1-treat me how you want
At your own will
But your driving a car
Without any wheels
Do you see the dangers ahead
Or will you ignore them
the ...

Because of me - Lyric Critique 
This is my song called Because of me. I need help on writing the music to the piece or finding something to download to create music and include lyrics....

a part of me - lyrics critique 
Part of Me

A part of me wants to go fishing
And a part of me don’t
A part of me wants to go shopping
There’s a part of me that won’t
A part of me
...

Change not sure of genre yet, tell me what parts you like and what parts you don't 
(Note:i know it probably sucks. This is dedicated to Barack Obama for fighting for African-Americans.)

Our moment is here
our time to shine has finally ...

Love I can't ignore Lyrics 
Here is my lyrics


I feel like an idiot.
I tried to make it last.
But every time I tried, I felt emptiness.
Until i met you,
Nothing did survive....

Amends - Lyric Critique 
Amends

We've had a rough road to ride

All around us trouble seemed to fill the air

For the time being there seems to be no other way

I only ...

Something Told Me Lyrics Critique- Psychedelic Rock 
something told me, this be over,
in a little while
come to think, i think that something,
was me
clutched fists, and fingers tied in tight
im at ...

Summertime Dance - Lyric Review 
She was only thirteen years
Been through a hard time as it appears
Always sneaking out of the house
Just to have a couple beers
He was seventeen then
...

Forgetting to breathe - lyrics critique[: 
FORGETTING TO BREATHE

VERSE ONE:
I sit here with this smile
I’ve had on all day
Thinking of the words
That I really want to say
Don’t know what ...

Infliction [lyrics, critique, metal] 
I've felt pain
And have inflicted it
Countless number of times

Have I inflicted myself
With all the sorrows
That made me who I am

I will take ...

Sexual Dyslexia. Please comment. Lyric writing critique. 
lavellea@btinternet.com

U Entered the club through the rear.
Then it became clear.

CHORUS.
The music screamed take off your clothes.
Underneath ...

Scared Little Boy Lyrics Critique  
(Verse 1)Were we perfect or was it just an illusion?
I was so happy,and I thought you were too.But I guess I've finally learned my lesson.And you taught ...

Moon Lyrics Critique - Rock/Metal song - Need help with mostly... everything! 
Hi! I'm starting a band, in which I'll be drummer and song writer. The genre will by something like Metal/Hard Rock. I wil here post 3 lyrics from which ...

Just an Angel - Power Ballad - Lyric Critique 
Just an Angel

I took a walk
on a cold night
I was tryin' to get my feelings right
My mind was lost in time
And my eyes were lost in space
I was ...

Come Tomorrow lyrics critique- soft rock song 
~personally, i think the lyrics are kinda cheesy, but let me know what u think!=)~

When nothin' seems to go your way
And it seems like everyone's out ...

"**** your god", Lyrics Critique- Crust Punk 
Chorus
There's no such thing as holy
and there's no such thing as sacred
belief makes you a coward
So f*** your god

Christ never existed
he didn'...

Broken Apart Lyrics Critique - Rock Song 
Broken Apart

Eyes open i see clearly now
no longer on this cloud
you fall crashing to the ground
landing somewhere far away
with no one else ...

GO GO and never come back. - lyric feedback 
GO!
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GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
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this is some thing just quick. so i hope you all like it.






GO!
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GO!...

"Unlike Me" Lyric Critique -a Pop rock ballad.  
I only have the chorus so far:

With her long blonde hair, that can flow with the wind. With her long eyelashes, that look like they touch the sky.
With ...

See You Again - Country/ Rock Lyrics Feedback 
This isn't the exact thing that happened in my relationship but I tried to fix it in an understandable way. Please tell me how am I doing?



Moving ...

"the one" - rock " - lyrics critique 
i really need someone to tell me straight forward and not be a coward about telling me what they think." i am 16.

When I see your smile
Tears roll ...

Gravity, Release Me - Lyrics Feedback 
Gravity, realese me
don't hold me down
let me fly away
I don't want to hear the words
I know you're going to say

let me escape
release me from ...

Falling in love -lyrics critique- pop 
I thought about you all last night
I wondered what youd do if I was in sight
Would you kiss me or make a move
Would I accept you, would my best friend ...

Green-eyed boy lyrics feedback 
That green-eyed boy,
he drives me crazy,
when i see his face,
my mind goes hazy.
don't know why i even bother,
he's out of my league.

That blonde-...

"Leaving Lyrics Critique- Slower Rock Song" 
This song's called Leaving

Verse 1

I've had enough
With the tough luck
I want it to be over
But you'll never be sober
So I packed up mt ...

World Stood Still Lyrics Critique - Country song 
I dont know what i should do with an intro to this... I have writers block :( Or can you start a song with the chorus?

When our eyes met, the world ...

Star Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre 
I’m lost,
I can’t find my way.
Winter frost,
Is setting on my skin.
The streets are filled with cold-eyed stares.
Can someone help me?
Anyone who ...

What if - lyrics critique 
what if it never happened at all, would i still be feeling like this
maybe there would be more tears of joy than sadness. maybe im not the only one who ...

"What's next?" lyrics critique 
"What's next?" by Dennis Fraser

I'm just trying to understand, when this all began
When everything went wrong, and for exactly how long
My life has ...

FairyTale Dream Lyrics Critique - Pop/Rock/Country 
I wrote FairyTale Dream awile back. Please don't be afraid to be harsh at all.


FairyTale Dream


Verse 1:
Those eyes still shine
like when we ...

The Irritated. lyrics critique - Rock and Roll/Punk. 
this is one of the first songs i've ever written. my friend jessica helped. to see one of her songs look for " having fun". please enjoy. :DDDDDDDDDDD
...

Live With It Lyrics Critique - Alternative/Punk Rock 
I haven't written the whole song yet, this is just the beginning. It was kind of thrown together really quickly, but then I got stuck. Here it goes.

Just ...

Chat Room Boyfriend (part 1) - Lyric Critiques 
(VERSE 1)
I was online the other day
on a chat room box with hundreds of names
but there was this one name that stood out
from the rest ohhhh
i ...

Sun Set - Songwriters Lyric Review. 
Hey wrote this today a little bit heartbroken,took about 5 minutes.Its probably crap but it really helped me. Any help would be greatly appreciated.


(1)...

Crying Now - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
How have things come to this
My world just fell apart
It’s hard to stay strong
What have I done so wrong?

I don’t know what ...

Here Alone - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1 When I was young my mother said
That fairy tale love was somewhere waiting for me
I thought I’d fall in love
But she didn’t mention broken ...

Angel in The Sky lyrics Critique - pop/soul song.  Not rated yet
I look in the mirror & all i see is hate, staring back at me.
and I can't help but wounder, is this is my fate, for my life.

I'm woundering if I go,...

Help Me (Rock) - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1

The phone rings
Your voice was quavering in every way
tears roll down your cheek
you say its over
and was wrong
its got to be this way
...

Let Go - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Christian Contemporary Slow at about 76 bpm.

Let Go
Words and music by Dereem McKinney ~ July 2009
INTRO: A-D2 A-D2 G Bm A-D2 A-D2

VERSE:
A-...

Calling Matthew - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Lyric is Contemporary Christian in nature. It is sung at about 76 bpm, somewhat slow.

Taken from the Bible:

Calling Matthew
Lyrics by Dale Archer ...

Obama Save Me! - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Obama Save ME !

You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘ve been turned down more than a bed spread,
at the local Holiday ...

"Tammie" - lyrics review - a song I wrote for a female singer to see if I could  Not rated yet
Heres a song I wrote a few years back for a female singer. I wanted to try something new and see if I could do it. Let me how I did, good or bad

Tammie
...

Untitled - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
This is my first time writing a song so i appreciate all constructive criticism. I dont have a name for this song yet.

Verse 1:
I love him oh so much
...

untitled lyrics critique - rap song  Not rated yet
-In a town inhabited by small minded fools
-Everywhere I go I always get that evil look
-Are people takin' the piss or is it cuz they're shook
-I got ...

Title: Do what you do - lyrics feedback - / hip hop / i want to know if am making progress  Not rated yet
Do what you do

Chorus
stop getting bored in fact don’t care
when they say this
immediately they say that
making life un-happy perhaps un-easy ...

The Rest Of Our Lives - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I SEE YOUR EYES
I HEAR YOUR VOICE
I KISS YOUR LIPS
AND NOTHING TO
COMPARE IT TO
ONLY TO SAY
DAY TO DAY
I'M HERE LOVING YOU
AND LIVING FOR YOU
...

Get you out this club - lyrics review - genre hiphop r&b  Not rated yet
Get you out this club (my producer did the hook and his verse ) im only putting my two verses up please comment im only 16 and i need a lot of work but ...

Goodbye - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
1:
I see you next door,
Walking down those stairs.
One by one each time,
I see you there.
I couldn’t believe that you’re really moving.
All I have ...

Complaining Lyrics Critique - Rock/Alternative Song  Not rated yet
Ok guys, these arent my lyrics, but they are my bands, and i am curious if they are good. I know that some friends think so, but i need to know what some ...

ill never forget those days - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i remember the 1st time i saw you
as if it was just yesterday
our eyes met and my heart stopped beating
in the most beautiful way

i got your name
...

This Is For You Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
The world is less sparkly without you
You left too soon
No one will know who you truly were
The lies and spies that surrounded you are now gone
The ...

Untitled Song- Upbeat - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this song, but I can't come up with a title. Any ideas?????

People say.
They will stay.
But in the end.
They just leave.

Verse 1. Revenge....

Pretty - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this songs chorus for a song my mom made up for me and my sisters. The song is pretty much about my mom and how she was like my rock when I was ...

Four Corners - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Traces, of a dreams eye, a glimpse inside my mind
Faces, those who’ve lived and learned, been burned
Places, of regret, time not spent and I’m
Shaken,...

(Scotoma) lyrics Critique Alt /Indie/ Rock   Not rated yet
Been making lyrics for songs with my guitarist for about a year and would love to have some feeback whether good or bad because I would like to know what ...

Cold Turkey Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
What Do You Think
How To Improve

He cant tell blue skys from grey
And he don’t no what to say
Cause he he cant recall your name
And he he is the ...

I'm Without you critique and hints plz  Not rated yet
This is part of a original song im working on but i need help so if u have any ideas say em :)

I'm Without you

One Day I walk through the hallway ...

"Fool For You" Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Verse 1
Been thinking I can't survive, Another day without you
It's probably a waste of my time, It's sad but it's true
How did it all fall apart,...

A Scribble in my notebook - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
I just wrote this. It is one of the first I have every written:

A SCRIBBLE IN MY NOTEBOOK-TAKE ME FROM THE PAIN
NOTHING LEFT TO OFFER--
(OFFER) NOTHING ...

in his life, in his dreams, he is dead- rock/punk song, lyrics critique  Not rated yet
“IN HIS LIFE, IN HIS DREAMS, IN HIS HANDS, HE IS DEAD”

WHEN HE WAS YOUNG
HE HAD TWO THINGS
-BRUISES FROM HIS FATHER
-HIS MOTHER'S WEDDING RING

HE ...

Confusion lyrics critique - rock song  Not rated yet
the first song i ever wrote



Confusion


(Verse 1)
Confusion rolling down my face
Strange people walking all over the place
I look around wondering ...

Whispers From The Past Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
v1 just wanna hear what you've gotta say
are you feeling the same cuz' im not ok
thought when i met you, you were something more
but ...

Slap lyrics Critique - Song is about the Corporate rat race!  Not rated yet
You always say one thing
Never see it through
The goalposts keep changing
In everything you do

Why are you lying?
You talk so much shit
No understanding
...

The Sorry Bird Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
The sorry bird seems so sad
Perched inside his cage
Can’t lift his wings, drives him mad
A mind that’s full of rage

I am caged deep in your love
...

Killer of a Broken Heart Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Killer of a broken heart
In pieces from the very start
Killer of a broken heart
Think you’re clever, think you’re smart
Killer of a broken heart
Got ...

I know - lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I’m not afraid to go
I’m just a little scared it may be slow
All I can do is hope
That those who love me learn to cope

I’m afraid of night and day
...

got dance? uptempo country, lyric critique  Not rated yet
i was dancin cross the floor like a pig on ice
when i saw a little red head, man she sure looked nice
two stepped over to her trying to keep the beat
...

where's my truck? lyrics critique, up tempo country  Not rated yet
i guess i must have had myself a drink or two last night
and looking at my face, i think i might have had a fight
i got me a gash up on the right side ...

Alone lyrics critique- rock song  Not rated yet
I lay here. Staring at the sky.
Remembering things. That made you cry
Like why and how. Did you have to go?
You promised me. I'd never be alone

Slowly ...

I Do's critique-country  Not rated yet
Hey guys. I'm just lookin 4 an honest critique. Say whatever u think. Sing it about like u would sing "big green tractor" by Jason Aldean. That's just ...

First Date Lyrics Critique :)  Not rated yet
I'm only 16 and i dont know why but i sat at my computer tonight and this just came to me. It's about all the thoughts in a girl's head right before a ...

Chasing After the Wind Chorus Lyrics Critique- Soul Ballad  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
I fell into the trap of worldly desires
I wanted to belong to its ways
Felt like I had to take more for myself
I was nowhere near satisfied
...

Blue -Lyrics Critique- Country  Not rated yet
I've drove a couple of miles
In the last few minutes
Been playin' this game for a while
Guess the card of love's not in it

My truck's loaded down
...

Remember Me- Lyrics Critique- Country  Not rated yet
Remember Me
I'm the one you said you loved
I was everything you dreamed of
Remember me

Remember me
I'm the one who was your world
Your one and ...

Mirror, Mirror - lyrics - pop/rock - critique  Not rated yet
There's no point in lying
To the mirror on the wall
You can never hide the truth
From the one who sees it all

Always seeing just who you are
And ...

Face the Music (a planet in trouble)- Lyrics - Critique - Rock   Not rated yet
The time has come to tell you
Why I'm feeling out of tune
I can't hide the scars you see
When you're standing on the moon

You had it all before you
...

In Your Arms Tonight - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
CHORUS:

Can't we just forget all
The hurt within, all
The tears we've shed
Can't we just let
Time pass us by
Cause I need you by my side
Won'...

Give me life Lyrics Critique- pop song  Not rated yet
Verse 1
There once was a lonely girl
Invisible to the world
She blends in with the crowd
Hiding in the shadows

A guy walks in that she doesn’t know
...

Reflection - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
I see you everyday
I see you every night

I know all your mistakes
I know all your regret

You say your good, when all you do is bad
You say your ...

Art Class Shirt - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
When I bought that shirt I was thinking of you
Now I don't know if I'll ever meet you
Everything had promise
Everything was new
I know what I've done
...

Lol (What's It Like) - Lyrics Review  Not rated yet
We were walking down the street, just you and me
I was just about to tell you how I feel
But then you see her and you start laughing and talking and ...

"If I Was a Liar" Christian Rock Comment away my friends  Not rated yet
If I Was a Liar
Copyright @ Tom Hammond

I search for answers just to find the broken tears I tried to hide;
Are they the reason these days just fade ...

"Closer To You" Genre: Christian? But honestly what do you think?  Not rated yet
My senior year in high school a freshmen boy lost his life in a car accident, I felt compelled to write a song and at the next day played it for the school....

"It Had to be You" Lyrics Critique- not sure on the genre yet.  Not rated yet
Hey guys, I'm 17 and this is my first song. I'm wrote it for my boyfriend who's leaving to go off to college next month. I want this to be special, and ...

"Hold On Tonight" Christian Pop/Rock Critique/Comment as it pleases you  Not rated yet
I wrote this song after talking to my friend about her faith life, where she was, where she had been, and the things that were now consuming her life. Throughout ...

"10 Shades of Gray" Pop/Rock Comment/Critique at will  Not rated yet
10 Shades of Gray
Copyright @ Tom Hammond

I chase the moments but can never keep up with the days
I?m barely holding on but if you've lost your heart ...

"What's Left of Me" Pop/Rock Critique/Comment at will  Not rated yet
This is the title track to our debut album. It's a song about the loss of a loved one, whether it was a boyfriend/girlfriend, brother, sister, parent, whatever,...

Irony of life - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
When you want the sun to shine out bright
When you think everything is going your way
Just when you feel things are perfect
The clouds creep in
The ...

One last time - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
One last time..
I wish I could start all over again
I want to stop feeling the pain
No one understands me
No one my fear can see

One last time..

I ...

Long Shivers Run LYRICS/METAL/CRITIQUE  Not rated yet
Inches from the blade
Looking worse every minute
Seconds from
Splitting your skull in half

Clothes torn to shreds
No need to say by what
Skin ...

Rain Lyrics Critique-country song   Not rated yet
Verse 1: I gave you my heart
so please dont even start
I trusted you not to break it
so here is why we split

Chorus: You ...

"Nothing she does is in vain Lyrics Critique -hard rock"  Not rated yet
I’m sitting here pondering
Wondering where my life gone
Looking into the sunsets shimmering light
Missing my sister that’s so far away
Who always kept ...

All Right in Time Lyrics Critique - Indie, Rock, Pop Song.  Not rated yet
just looking for a bit of feedback it's also posted on yahoo answers its the same song. Oh and i have another one on here called "That's just the way things ...

"Strawberry Delight" lyrics critiques - Psychedelic Rock  Not rated yet
Please critique!

Verse:
Let's start a fire, make it 20 feet high
The smoke and the flame will drown out the sky.
We're all outside and keeping under ...

Lost Love Critique - Country  Not rated yet
The verses are about medium speed, and the chorus is a little faster.

Depressed
Obsessed
Love is lost
What is the cost?
Nothing can heal it
Just ...

watching me critique- country pop  Not rated yet
its pretty rough still... i need more for the second verse, and i dont like "i always wished you were mine...my guitar and im just fine" please be easy ...

I'm Sorry - Soul - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
I’m sorry I don’t always find the words to say
I’m sorry I cant be there, everyday
I’m sorry for the things I couldn’t say
I’m sorry, I’m sorry
 
Sorry ...

Who I Am - Soul - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I don't know who I am
I wanna know what brought me here
I don't know who I am
All I know is that I can
 
Who dares to stand where I stood?
Where ...

keep your feet on the ground -lyrics-critique -pop song  Not rated yet
people everywhere, they don't know me
every where i walk its like im making a scene
watching where i walk and saying my name
they don't know me, the ...

Vacation - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I'm scared
But I can't let you know
Because it's you're turn
and it's mine to be strong

And what looks like a frown is a smile

You are going ...

Summer in Sydney - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
Was introduced to beauty
and it's bitter taste
Wish I didn't introduce it to you
but we wanted to share absolutely everything

We'll end
I should ...

Carmen's Song - Lyrics Review  Not rated yet
Well i wrote this about my friend because she's went through a really hard time. I'm thinking of turning it into a acoustic/ emphasized drums with a keyboard ...

Dead Man Walking Lyrics Critique - Punk Rock lyrics  Not rated yet
my influencial break tolls out to none
i`m subject to controversy
i`m a chaos victim behind a gun
future`s end i don`t see

life`s too short to worry ...

Born of indignity Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Been writing for a while, Lyrics to a Metal song.

Born of indignity
Suffering of blight
Humanity is doomed as we know
Before flight is taken place
...

Fragments Lyrics Critique - Rock/Metal Song  Not rated yet
I was planning on using this song for my band if it was good enough. Please tell me what you think. I'm not exactly sure what the genre will be. It could ...

Two Way Street Lyrics Critique -R&B song  Not rated yet
This is a song i made a while ago and i want to kno if my lyrics stay to the point with growing interest


Love is a two way street
You can make a ...

Breaking Apart - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Strapped to the wall
Can't cross the line
I can't get to you and I don't know why
Tied to the road
The train's coming down
Why aren't you coming?
You'...

The nitty popper lyrics critique- r&b song  Not rated yet
~Nitty Popper~
~intro~
child: mommy, mommy, mommy
mom: yes baby
child: let's do the nitty popper
mom: what the heck is the nitty poppy
child: get ...

Inspiration - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
Inspiration hits the soul
Then you’ve got a record made of gold
What’s in words that can’t be spelled
Poetry’s dead, can’t you tell

Inspiration sparks ...

Caitlins Lyrics (looking for support cos im only 11)  Not rated yet
Crying on the Inside

You help me up
Then push me to the floor
You whisper we are meant to be
But Im no longer sure

So you hold me in your arms
...

Something you'd never do (Country) lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Ok so I have been fiddling with these lyrics for a while now and still can't get the right words! Please help me!

1st- It was first grade and my very ...

Lonely - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is one of the songs i wrote about 2 year ago when i was feeling lonely.


Here all alone by myself tonight drinken whiskey to drown away your memories ...

"Dantes Inferno"- Alternative Lyrics crtique   Not rated yet
This book was inspired by the Dantes book the "inferno" from the series "The Divine Comedy" phrases in Qutaion marks are direct qoutes from the book


We ...

"you were somthing else", alternative - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
ok so , this was just a try , if its no good please dont be fake and be like "yes, your amazing ".i just want honest feed back. first try , i dont know ...

Growing Pains ( maybe...) - Pop - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
***
I think the chorus might be a bit long. I'm not so good with writing the chorus.
It's meant to sound sort of jingly in ...

Do we know? Lyrics Critique - Rock / Pop Song  Not rated yet
Hi,
I`ve written a few sets of lyrics but I need a musician to collaborate with in order to bring the lyrics to life..

Anyway, please let me know ...

Shut Up Lyrics Feedback -Rock Song  Not rated yet
I am just eleven and i really love writing songs and singing please tell the truth!

You say i'm crazy, you say im lazy, but there's only one thing to ...

Why - Lyrics Review  Not rated yet
Why

I wake up to a silent house
A letter on my pillow
Covered in crossing outs
Tear smudged words and crumpled edges

And why
Did you have to ...

This Mirror Lyrics Critique - Christian Rock  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
I sing a song of worship.
I sing a song prayer.
I sing to represent the King i know is always there.

ChorusI wanna see beyond my eyes....

"your Welcome lyrics critique/comment -acoustic rock song"  Not rated yet
one of my first songs written..


Released from confinement
Emotions Run Free
The Demise
of us
Is truly
Fictional to me..fictional to me..

I ...

The Price I've Paid Lyrics Critique - Country Slow Song  Not rated yet
My first serious attempt, all comments/advice welcome

The Price I've Paid

I remember when we started ...

ballad - all i had to do lyric feedback - pop  Not rated yet
i know i had my chances
you gave me all the time i needed
but still i made it hard for myself
because i wanted more than i needed
i wanted everything
...

fall from grace brit pop - lyric critique  Not rated yet
Lyrics
2 semi naked dead lovers
by the river off the beaten path
No polaroid pictures, scattered
recorded their trysts or past

The puritan press ...

back and forth lyric feedback  Not rated yet
Lyrics
back an' forth

can't pull a trigger
anymore
second guessing
walks in the coridor

refused to stand up
he took it sitting down
once a ...

Heart Lyrics Critique-Undecided  Not rated yet
You should have gone home
You should have known
That what you did was wrong

Should’ve known all along
That I’d find out in the end
That you two ...

Invincible Lyrics Critique - Rock Song  Not rated yet
Everybody look into her eyes,
She’s invincible tonight
She’s rising up, taking her place.
And she’s invincible

Invincibility is in your name
You ...

B. Lyrics Critique - Portugal "Breaking free"  Not rated yet
My english isn't that good so it might be some mistakes in the lyric.I don't play anything so I can't make a real song.If theres's anyone interested in ...

B. Lyrics Critique - Portugal "Until it stops raining"  Not rated yet

Hi. I write lyrics since I was 12 but I don't play anything so I can't make a real song. My english isn't that good so it might be some mistakes in ...

Glory or Pain lyrics critique -rock song  Not rated yet
A woke up, the sun shone in my eyes and the world fell upside down when i remembered you
the day has past and you're walking the walk home without me
...

break up lyrics critique(pop)  Not rated yet
break up

(verse 1)
i sit at home crying
looking at a picture that used to bring me joy
i stare at many photos all around me woundering
what went ...

Wish - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
This is something I wrote a while ago, but I wanna start getting serious about songwriting, so I posting it to see what people think.

Verse 1
I always ...

Do you know - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
Verse 1:

Can I trust that you’ll stay?
Even if I say I’m ok
I hope that you’re never gone
So I’ll never be alone
I don’t know what I would do
If ...

Air - Lyrics Critique - Calm, Popish  Not rated yet
Ok..I'm not the best at writing songs but I enjoy it...so well here

Air

As I stand here upon this cliff
Awaiting danger to come to me
As I fall,...

Why?-lyrics-critique-Christian/inspirational song  Not rated yet
WHY?

V1:You are walking the walk
You are talking the talk
Doing everything so you can just fit in
But you look above
And you see God's love
And ...

She's a Riot, Really. Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
She's A Riot, Really.
By The GB


When I first saw her, my heart stopped beating, here.
Then she looked and she met my eyes
The pain and hurt took ...

Peoples gonna Change- Written by Gage Helms - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hey people, My names Gage, I am currently 12 years old and I enjoy writing songs, Some people might say I suck at it, some people might say I am good, So ...

Vikkii Critique- Reminiscing (when there was a you and me) maybe rock   Not rated yet
About this guy I've like for ages and we used to kind of be mates.

I’m just left reminiscing
About how things used to be
When there was you and ...

help with title (rap) - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I do want i wanna do
I do it at my momma
I'll do at yours too
Bet you can't do like me
Bet you wanna be like me
Because all you do is wanna be
or ...

you shoud like me lyrics critique-pop/alternative  Not rated yet
Im only 14 this is the first song i have written. Please dont say means stuff, but i do like constructive critisism (unless its about my spelling cause ...

How Do I Say I Miss You lyrics critique-country/pop  Not rated yet
it's me again...Bailey. i forgot to mention that i'm only 13 years old. but don't critisize me just because i'm young. i want to become famous. and with ...

Shallow Lyrics Critique-Country/pop song  Not rated yet
hey. i'm very young but looking for future potions. please please pleas tell me what you think!!!



(verse 1)
You said that you’re madly in love ...

You're Not The One lyrics- Rock/Alterntive - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
It’s a typical Saturday evening, and I’m listening to some music, just letting my head get away from the world. I check my e-mails and as usual no ...

If You Were Here Today Lyrics Critique-slow song -UPDATE-  Not rated yet
This is the finished product of the song I posted here a little while back. Let me know what u think!!


I think of all the fun we had together
I ...

hollow man lyrics critique rock  Not rated yet
i am the hollow man
the broken and diseased
i am the one you hate
so blame this all on me
you are my drug of choice
the painful memory

so its come ...

Can't do this anymore lyric critique - country? slower tempo  Not rated yet
Verse
Lyin' next to him, cryin' in the dark
listening to him softly sleep
she's thinking how am I gonna let him down gently
it's gonna break his heart ...

Backstage Lyric Critique - medium tempo  Not rated yet
Verse
Look at you so tall and strong
The picture of perfection for all to see
Life goes on without a hitch
you look as happy as you could be

Chorus
...

Pure White Dove Lyric Critique - slower song maybe country  Not rated yet
Verse
Sitting here
With tears streaming down my face
thinking of how much you've changed
You used to say
I truely do loev you
now all you say
is ...

How Can I - Lyrics critique -country? kind of like taylor swift  Not rated yet
i was wondering if i could get some feedback?


How can i do this anymore?
you always end up with what i'm looking for
i guess i'll take my hope ...

Not sure about title yet.....any suggestions?? Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I am 13 years old and never written a song before and not really sure how to write one so its not very good. I wrote this song for a friend who is going ...

Title: I do (it's a rap, please help finish) - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I do want I want I wanna do
I do how I do
i do it my momma house
I'll do it at yours too
Bet'cha can't do like me
Bet'cha you can't do like me
...

what [else] can i do - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
What do u think of these lyrics
Verse 1
A dollar a day is not enough
my daddy laid off, i'm the new Mr tough
a family i got, to feed, my life's rough
...

"Waves Rolling In Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Waves Rolling In

V1. Back then.
We used to walk on the beach.
Hand in hand.
Yeah.
And back then.
You actually cared about me.
About my feelings....

Paranoiaphobia lyrics - Classical Hard Rock - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
My Definition: Webster hasen't put my work in their dictionary yet but Paranoiaphobia means the fear of going insane. Just wrote this because i sing in ...

You'll Be Fine- Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I am just beggining to write songs, and would like lots of suggestions. Don't be nice, be truthful! It won't hurt my feeling if you say it's the worst ...

You'll be fine - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is one of my first songs, and I was thinking about when I moved,all the way across the country, and I wanted to let my friends know they would be ...

The Future's Ours -Not sure on genre  Not rated yet
(verse)
The Path's uncertain,
The Journey's quite far
But one thing's worth Betting____
You'll come along_______________

(Chorus)
The future's ...

How Come? -Not sure on genre - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
It happened all on one day,
I met you the one,
The one I thought would would come along,
WIth me

But then you got frightened,
I didn't understand,...

Why Me? -Not sure on genre - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I'm confuesed,
and I don't understand___
what all happened,
while I was in your hands

You were warm,
you were nice,
From the beginning I thought,...

How Come??- Love song- Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
It happened all on one day,
I met you the one,
The one I thought would would come along,
WIth me

But then you got frightened,
I didn't understand,...

How it is. Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I dont want the drama,
I dont need it right now.
Maybe you dont get it,
maybe you wont see it,
but this is how its going down.
Im sick of all the ...

In Too Deep - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Look at you,so high on your cloud.
All you do is put people down.
I dont know whats your problem,
Maybe you dont like yourself.
But i dont really care,...

Free to be me lyrics- Rock/pop song Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
hi im only 13 so plz tell me what you think as id love to hear from everyone and every one!!:) i wrote it after the movie barbie diaries!

every day ...

Love Cycle - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
After a while i re-read it a few types and thought it was a little amateur for most of it so i need a completly truthful critique. Thanks.

I wanna ...

I am all that you need Lyrics Critique- can be any genre, soft and smooth or a higher tempo and more fun  Not rated yet
(Help with title please and any other comments welcome- thanks!)

I need you now
more than ever
the time has come
it won't last forever

stop at ...

I love You Lyrics Critique- SLow ballad but not too slow, with some soul  Not rated yet
(Help with title and I appreciate and feedback- good or bad, Thanks)

I wish I could
TEll you... what I'm feeling
Tell you what I never could
Let ...

Fall .Alternative Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
How could I turn my back on you when I'm the one you didn't want .
How could you blame me when you know better it's not my flat.
How could it be
you ...

ballad,we could never say hello,only goodbye - lyric critique  Not rated yet
there are no words
that we can say
only tears can we find today
and when we have,dryed them away

i pray our love
will bring us closer together
and ...

Pedal to the metal - Rock Critique  Not rated yet
This is my second song I've written. I'm only 13 and wanted some feedback so I could know what genre I'm better at writing. Please no negative comments....

give and take rock/grunge lyrics critique  Not rated yet
This is my final one so far........
Verse 1
There’s too many takers and not enough givers the worlds under the hammer 1st one in 1st one served don’t ...

suzies song rock/country lyrics critique  Not rated yet
This is another one about my dog that died feed back please.
Verse 1
My best friend died the other day. I wish it didn?t have 2 be that way.I?ll remember ...

long walk to nowhere rock/grunge/country - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
Hi jst started writing a week ago need some feed back so know weather i'm on the right track
Verse 1
Won?t u come with me down an endless road the only ...

Untitled lyrics Critique - R&B  Not rated yet
I feel your hand rubbin up and down my spine
my heart starts beating faster
cuz i know your about to blow my mind
been waiting for you all night long ...

Beholding Obscurity lyrics PLEASE CRITIQUE! Metal/Grindcore song  Not rated yet
Intro/Verse 1
This monster has terrorized the people
Of this great city
He is a murderous monster
Killing only for pleasure
He is out to destroy ...

Bye - Slow - Songwriting Feedback  Not rated yet
Does This Sound Any Good
Please Commet Back As Wont To Know Weather To Perfom It Yet !!

It Was The Last Thing On My Mind
Saying Bye To You
Standing ...

something different lyric critique  Not rated yet
all of these timeless worries, and pityless lies seems to bury deep inside me
everything is a blur, without you
I feel so lost and unreal
and all i ...

Beat Down, Rock/Metal PLEASE CRITIQUE  Not rated yet
Your actions have driven me to despair
Your words trap me

Broadcasting your foolishness
To the remains of deaf ears

Your words will become a weapon ...

Still Thinking Of A Title/ Rock/Metal Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Who will end this wretched horror

Inches from the barrell
My God, what have I done

In a single moment
Gods judgment fell upon this horrid sight
...

This Monster - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
This monster has terrorized the people
Of this great city
He is a murderous monster
Killing only for pleasure

A monster of great strength and wit
...

Survival - Rap/Hip Hop...critiques/suggestions will help  Not rated yet
It’s all about survival
Getting past all of life’s troubles
Yeah, yeah it’s all about survival
Overcoming everything than comes your way
Yeah, yeah ...

Black Walls - Prelude - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
(These are the lyrics to the Prelude of a concept album I am writing called "Black Walls". Let me know what you think!)

So here I am, lying in bed.
And ...

song name : Sad - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Evry time i see you it makes me depres.Id loved you but you dont care. you are the only one that makes me feel sad , am i so bad

if i were in your ...

believe me lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i look out of my window wonderinggggg
wonderring, what should i do with ma life?
theres two of them stuck in ma headddd
one stubborn but the other so ...

Lyric Feedback/ No Genre Yet.  Not rated yet
Please tell me what you think of this, Thank You.

Two Weapons

Verse 1: I’ve got a weapon that can draw you in again. Something that you told ...

Smiling Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hi. I am 12 and I love to write songs. This is my personal favorite.

Verse 1:
Who wants to be ordinary?
Not me,
Who wants to take every opportunity?...

Lyrics Critique - Rosie  Not rated yet
this is the first song ive written (im 14) and i really need somone else's opinion.

It just got dark in melbourne i was trying to write a song about ...

"The Bell (lyrics)"-Pop/Rock Song Critique  Not rated yet
[I'm really looking for some good feedback. This was my first song to write by myself. It's basically about this girl fanticizing about her and her dream ...

by kelcy -unanswered questions- hard rock lyrics critique  Not rated yet
For what purpose, reason, or cause;
What intention, justification, or motive
The literature with unanswered questions
Questions that hold me captive
...

Through My Eye's Lyric Writing Feedback  Not rated yet
( 1st vs )
So this is it
how did we end up like this
I thought we had everything
everything we'd ever wanted
but I guess we were wrong

Now here ...

Don't Go By Lyric Feedback: Taylor Strouse  Not rated yet
Don't go Don't go
Without you i'm hopeless
don't go don't go
without you i'm dead
(chorus=
don't go don't go
without me
don't go don't go
don'...

You're So Much More [lyrics critique] :D -pop song?  Not rated yet
i can't stop thinking about this one guy. we're friends and all, but he has a girlfriend and i hate it.. ... anywho. lemme know what you guys think ;)



You’...

for what reason lyric critique - hard rock  Not rated yet
Lyric by Kelcy lounsberry-unfinished

For what purpose, reason, or cause;
What intention, justification, or motive
The literature with unanswered ...

masks (pop) lyrics critique  Not rated yet
ladies take your maskes coz tonyt is dee nyt we gonna dance we gonna party becase we bak to who WERE

(chorus)
as far as i am concernerd we dont need ...

Promises - lyrics critique (pop punk?)  Not rated yet
ive written so many rubbish songs over the years, i think i started when i was 11, 4 years ago. still pretty cliched, but i think theyve gotten better ...

working title lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i only have to verses which is probably not enough but still

those tender years of compassion
the final days have begun
those cries have subsided
...

untitled lyrics - alternative - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
please let me know what you think its my very first shot at songwriting and i'm desperate for some feedback

lately i've been dreaming of a burning fire ...

Florence lyrics - comment please -critique!  Not rated yet
Dear Florence,
i havent seen you in a long time,
your fathers in a mess,
hes in the garden finding a tree to climb,
to cut down fire wood,
to ...

geek queen- indie/ soft rock - lyric critique  Not rated yet
hi i'm 15 and ive just started this but i would like feed back off others.

the sparkle in her eyes,
clear my lies, makes my soul rise.
the beauty ...

Crush (Preview of the song not the whole thing!!!!) - songwriting critique  Not rated yet
even though i can be so weird
i still think that i need you
even though i never met you
what i hear is making me
fall for you ohhhh oh oh oh oh
(chorus)...

Indie Acoustic - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
We're not in Kansas Anymore...

Chorus

Verse 1

Well I'm a 100 miles Away from home
Not a Starry night can save me now

A momentary, relapse ...

When The Sun Goes Down- Lyrics Critique Wayne's Song  Not rated yet
It sure gets lonely when the sun goes down
It sure gets lonely since your not around
It sure gets lonely when the sun goes down
I hope you're happy ...

One Life lyrics critique - pop song  Not rated yet
This is all I've got so far. I just want to know if I am on the right track or if I should just start all over.

Verse 1:Dreams, everyone has one.
Whether ...

"I Still Love You" Lyrics Critique - Pop Song  Not rated yet
I always seem to wonder
Why you hang out with her
We used to get along so well
And then somehow it turned to hell

We were always together
And you ...

Who I really am Lyrics Critique- Slow ballad with tons of feeling  Not rated yet
Tell me how its going...
Tell me how you've been...
Are you okay with everything..
That's happening in your life...

Are you okay now?...
Better ...

Beauty Pageant Lyrics Critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
Verse 1. Celebrities on tv.
Showing off their perfect face.
Perfect teeth.
All of their assets.

When you step into the real world.
You realize it'...

Kass Lyrics Critique- Hip-Hop Song  Not rated yet
This is my song I have not recorded yet one of many, But before i write out my lyrics, I need to tell you about myself. I'm 21 years old now, I come from ...

Lyric Critique - I'm not a simple a girl-shortened version of later longer song...   Not rated yet
Oh you say that I'm odd
Well thats cause its true
Im not normal
Thats what you knew
But not in the way ya thought
Ooooh not in the way ya thought....

"You Weren't There" - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
VERSE:1
I always depended on you
to be here for me
but when i needed you most
you werent there
out of everyone i thought
you would be the one to ...

"If You Were My Girl" - Songwriting Feedback  Not rated yet
VERSE:1
When we first spoke
you toke my breath away
everytime i see you
i just wish i can be
with you
your everything i want in
a girl
your the ...

"Time To Let You Go" Lyric Writing Critique  Not rated yet
verse:1
Ive known you my whole life
and everytime we hangout
im falling more in love with you
we gave it a shot at dating
but all we did was argue
...

Too Much To Lose - lyrics critique ballad   Not rated yet
Too Much To lose
Andrew Day (welcome all comments new to this and won't be offended ...

Revolution - Punk Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
You will overcome your oppressors,
You will overthrow your dictators!
Revolution, revolution, revolution, revolt!

Do these streets belong to the coppers?...

Closed Doors - Grunge Rock Lyric Critique   Not rated yet
Hey, I'm back! I put this song on under the name 'Closing Doors' and said I didn't like the name or the chorus... well here's exactly the same thing, with ...

Fairytale Lyrics critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
V1. you surprise me, with all of the things that you do.
you love me, with all that you have.
you say your sorry, whenever i'm sad.

now tell me how ...

Her Man Lyrics Critique- Country Song  Not rated yet
I'm looking for suggestions and Idea's on ways to improve. I am only 14 so this is semi new to me. I usually write during my classes because that's when ...

Fittin' In Lyrics Critique-Christian Song  Not rated yet
You're walking the walk
you're talking the talk
doin everything to just fit in
but you look above
and ya see God's love

and ya say
why do i have ...

Imdependent (Lyric Writing Feedback plz plz plz)  Not rated yet
I used to be the type of girl that wanted to fit in. I wanted the most expensive clothes wanted the perfect hair. Just wanted to fit in.
Now I look back ...

I Could Trust You - Country/pop - Lyric Critique   Not rated yet
My friend and I are 14, and we are trying to become famous in Nashville. We have only been writing a short time, so we welcome any constructive critisism!...

unnamed,acoustic, Lyric Writing Critique  Not rated yet
first time any advice would be great , just posting parts of it as others nowhere near ready to be seen yet

(verse)
Staring aimlessly, as I walk right ...

Battlescar- Country song - Song Writing Feedback  Not rated yet
This is something I threw together in a few minutes. It, obviously, isn't completed yet. I just want some critique. I'm going to add some things here and ...

(Rough) Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
These are really rough lyrics for a song, I need to add alot more to it, Just wanted to see what people thought so far. I have a guitar tune for it too....

Losing my Soul Lyrics Critique - Ballad  Not rated yet
This song came to me when I was laid in a field early evening last summer. Haven't wrote the bridge yet and hopefull will add another verse.

I laid ...

I Will Lighten Your Life - Justin Cayce - Balladine Blues - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
I'd like to know exactly what kind of mood this evokes (if any)...

I Will Lighten Your Life - Justin Cayce

Oh Lord I?ve been lost
For such a long,...

Breaking Apart - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Strapped to the wall
Can't cross the line
I can't get to you and I don't know why
Tied to the road
the train's coming down
Why aren't you coming
You'...

"you dont need him" - song critique  Not rated yet
VERSE:1
I see the way he treats you
And i can tell from your eyes
That you dont want him
You should leave him
And look for a real man
Why be with ...

"looking back at me" Suggestions - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Looking back at me I see
Everything he can’t
Looking back at me I see
Not the hateful words he rants
Looking back at me I see
The love that is inside
...

You Break My Heart - song critique  Not rated yet
Because a heart is just an "e" and an "r" turned on itself, it's psycho
"Love" is "Evil" backwards, just with a typo
I'm at the edge of the earth a'lookin'...

Untitled Lyrics, Critique, Genre - Alternative  Not rated yet
I'm 12, and I'm just giving songwriting a go, just because I love music.
Here goes haha.


As I see you perform on that stage,
My heart stops, and ...

Let Go (indie punk garage rock)  Not rated yet
this is what ive got so far.
the song has a fast tempo and the guitar has downstrokes verse 1

late nights, always so right C
living life, high as ...

HIDDEN AMOUNG THE LEAVES lyric critique  Not rated yet
Where is she? She's late
I want to see this fight
I came all this way to see this fight
If I knew that she was going to be late
I would never have ...

ghost stories -country song  Not rated yet
heres what i got Ignore the spelling(just begining)


I'm wondering around listening to those who tell my stories
Cause i've got nothing to lose
These ...

He'll never know lyrics critique- pop/hiphop  Not rated yet
It’s gotten complicated with you and me
Before if you opened your eyes you’d see
That I had fallen for you long ago
But I couldn’t show my feelings ...

the burgur place down by the fountain. genre- rock-lyrics crytique  Not rated yet
my grades the've been gettin low.
my dad hes been scoldin'me since forever
my futures not lookin to bright
my mom face isnt lookin light at all

she ...

holocaust lyrics critique - rock metal song  Not rated yet
should i keep it? first verse and pre chorus
the music has a rock/heavy metal feel to it

Ashes fall from the sky
Blackening all my reason
And my ...

"Lied to- rock/metal" - songwriting critique  Not rated yet
(Talking)
For the time that felt like an eternity,
I was in the corruption and depression.
My way around was a task, too hard.
That was the most complicated ...

"watch yourself- rock/metal" songwriting critique  Not rated yet
I wanted to stay for away,
but your face keeps drawing me back.
All i wanted was to fade, away,
but i'd lose if i fell hrough the cracks

And i knew ...

Untitled- chorus lyrics only... lyrics review  Not rated yet
CHORUS 1:
When you say, "Tell me something,"
I wanna scream out loud,
I wasn't this way before you,
wouldn't be this way now,
if you hadn't given ...

I'm Fine (Hip-Hop, Pop) Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
This song just clearly states that I'm not gonna be all moped out just because a friend and I just split up. The song also shows that since she left me ...

Goodbye Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This was inspired by New Moon from the Twilight Saga.

Life was so amazing holding your hand feeling your breath
You asked me to meet you in field ...

This Peace - Rock Song Critique  Not rated yet
This song is called This Peace, and is in short about being confused in life, not knowing where to go or how to get there, trying to think to hard and ...

You Are The Light - Rock Ballad - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
well every successful Rock album needs a slow, soft Rock ballad. Basically I wanted to play around with the topic of Love and what people in love would ...

Paths - Rock song - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
This song is about a corrupt world and everyones following each other down the same path making it even worse. I'm just looking to see what others think,...

The Scars Of War - Rock Song - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this song to show how tramatic war is and how millions of people know but just brush it off and don't really care, not knowing the pain of being ...

Smiling lyrics critique  Not rated yet
I'm 12 and this is my favorite song out of my 33 songs that I've written because it makes me happy.

Who wants to be ordinary?
Not me,
Who wants to ...

I don't have to be his - Lyrics critique  Not rated yet
I wish that he still loved me
I wish that he knew
I wish he knew about
everything he just put me through
I've always been so faithful
Now I have ...

Thinking of you- Lyrics Critique- Genre not picked  Not rated yet
Your out with your friends while I'm home alone
My fairy tale ends, when your not on the Phone
And who'd think it'd be, you here with me
You dont have ...

where am i ? songwriting critique  Not rated yet
ok just to say first song i've ever written ! and i have no melody so that would help please!if you can think of one to go with the song


There was ...

Will you - Songwriting "Critique"  Not rated yet
Okay well this song I think is a good one that i think that i have wrote, can you please help me on this one leave your thoughts.

Will ...

Love Lyrics Critique - Rock Song  Not rated yet
You’re The Reason
Verse One:
G Am D
How can I be missing you
G C D
I don’t even care anymore
C ...

"What happened Lyrics Critique - R&B Song"  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
I always wondered if i'd ever find true love, one I could hold and never get enough of, I never thought it would be ...

unknown title lyrics critique- alternative  Not rated yet
hey boy, im in love with you
its not easy to see but its easy to do
you tickle my lips with the hair on your chin
and you keep me awake with the smiel ...

Someone Special - Lyrics Critique-Pop  Not rated yet
When I'm dreaming, you never leave my mind,
you never go away
When I'm singing, I sing to you my love everyday
But when your laughing, you make my ...

I'm gone lyrics critique - pop  Not rated yet
"Just writing what I feel"



I remember the day
I had once stood tall
You held me so high
just to watch me fall
Now I gave you another try
but ...

"The Answer lyrics Critique - Christian song"   Not rated yet
Everyone that lives and dies
needs the love of Jesus
the only thing that saves our lives
is the love of Jesus

What we need to help us through
is ...

Your Not The One - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
I’ve yelled and I’ve screamed, to get your attention
I’ve had my friends talk to you, and I’ve has them mention
How me and you could be this great thing
...

Papa's Song - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Since I can remember I have dreaded this day
The day that we would put you in the grave
I remember all the good times we had
I remember you wouldn’t ...

Soldier's Life - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Johnny turned 18
The other day
Sent him off to a foreign land
where no one knows his name

gives his mom a kiss
and hugs his dad
looks at his girlfriend ...

Gone Too Long - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
My wheels are rollin down the highway tonight
i see the brightness of my hometown lights
push the pedal a little closer to the floor
i'm gonna see my ...

Let It Be - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Here ya go your callin me again
it's the same ol' same how have you been
it ain't nothin new
i don't expect that from you
here ya go your callin me ...

Tears Or Rain - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
I hope you will never see the tears in me
I thought it was meant to be
But you never knew
How much pain and heart brake you caused me

Crying ...

Too Cold To Cry - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1:When I was a young boy in my teenage years
I'd get so frustrated that it'd bring me to tears
My father picked me up and he took me aside
he ...

Sulphur Wine Lyrics Critique-Alternative Metal  Not rated yet
Let's step back and let this girl realize the error of her ways
An example must be made so her pain can be replaced

She's swallowed the pills that ...

unnamed "lyrics and critique!  Not rated yet
Hiyah people a need you to help me with this,
Plz... Tell me what you think..


Standing in the corner all by
myself, looking ...

"Rescue The Day Lyrics Critique - Pop/Rock Song"  Not rated yet
Rescue The Day

V1
First things first a heart to heart
She starts, you place your hand upon your heart
She gazes up toward your face
Your smile ...

Endless -Lyrics Critique -Dance/Soft Rock  Not rated yet
I could see
How this was supposed to end
And now we're standing here,
Again,
My friend.

Did you think I didn't matter?
Did you think I didn't ...

Hold On - song lyrics critique  Not rated yet
This crazy time
A crazy life, I'm doin the best I can
(I can)

Chorus: Hold on
Hold on to everything (everything) you know
Please don't let go of ...

Painless lyrics genre-pop/country melissa  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
Oo Oh Oo Oh
I wish I could see
Oo Oh Oo Oh
Your face lookin back at me
But I know-oh oh
That would make it harder for me
To-oo see that ...

Routine - songwriting critique  Not rated yet
Verus 1:
They both think they know
Could they try to agree
Find the common points between
Before this all turns to high sea

Chorus:
Stop with the ...

I try - songwriting critique  Not rated yet
This is a song based on personal experiences/feelings when facing up to being gay. Any feedback will be appreciated, it's my first attempt at lyric writing ...

Running Dry- Pop - Songwriting Critique  Not rated yet
Music notes on paper,
Lyrics written down below,
Song writing everyday,
Part of my dream.
They say I can’t make it.
They say I’m not good enough to ...

"Intuition"- Slower guitar and piano with single clear voice  Not rated yet
The other day I looked it up,
The word that always falls out of their mouth,
It's always two steps right behind,
The one that follows me around,

The ...

unnamed "lyrics and critique!  Not rated yet
Hiya people a need your views on this and see if a can make it better.


New kid in school, im just
a plain teenager im not ...

I Hate You - Slow R&B  Not rated yet
I've never really done this but I guess it would be good to get some feed back...


Verse 1:
Was I that foolish to believe every word you said. I ...

Falling Lyrics - Pop  Not rated yet
You took, my hand
and told me that you loved me
then the very next day
you took, my hand
and told me that i was so yesterday
and now

in falling
...

"Untitled song Lyrics Critique-progressive metal song"  Not rated yet
all i need is darkness please
my friend lives in the light i see
all i want is something else
please explain to me why i can no longer see
all i see ...

thank god i,m a city girl lyrics review  Not rated yet
thank god i,m a citygirl born and raised in the city i,m so very happy to be a city girl and I will be lost without my city thank god i'm a city girl ...

The Difference - Jessica Lyrics Critique- Alternative/rock song  Not rated yet
verse 1

speak a little softer, so they don't hear the truth, of why we keep our secrets, to ourselves.i've fallen down the depths of reality.the soft,...

Lyric Feedback - un-titled..- emo  Not rated yet
The nations failed us more than once
They will again no doubt my friends
The government takes over
They're all power thirsty and the ...

Goodbye Lyrics Critique- Soft Rock Song  Not rated yet
So this is letting go; it's difficult, but I'm sure that you know
You wrote the rules to this game; what a shame- that losing is the only way
Goodbye ...

"Fingerprints" lyrics critique- acoustic rock (? IDK)  Not rated yet
This is my first draft of the song so admit it does need some work. However, please tell me how I've done with it so far!

Fingerprints

I watch the ...

Unknown - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This song is not yet finished. I need some help with it. Please tell me if you like it, and please help me finish it, But I will give you what i have.




You ...

"Run" Lyrics Critique- Country  Not rated yet
I wrote this during a breakup. I am very saticfied with how it turned out... with my guitar, however, Im still not completly comfortable with the middle ...

The Old House critique Country /Gospel by Charlie  Not rated yet
The Dream

I dreamed,
I saw an old house
The paint,
was cracked and dried
The windows,
were all boarded up
So, that no light,
could get inside
...

Breaking Down Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
You're fading out of my life,
As quickly as you came,
Can't take it anymore.
Should've guessed it was all a game,
Ithought you loved me,
For sure....

The girl Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
A scream, A shout.
A cry for help.
But no one cares or listens.

A screech of brakes,
The sirens wail,
But everyone is busy.

The girl she lies ...

Fly Away Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre  Not rated yet
V1:
Weve been together now for a while
But theres something going on
i can see it on your face
I can tell that your thinking of something
Something ...

"Daddy's Ways" Critique - Kinda Crossover Pop/Country Song  Not rated yet
DADDY'S WAYS
Lyrics and Melody: Meredith Arneson

Copyright: 2006

[A cathartic song for me about the day my Dad passed away when I was just 13....

Lyric Critique - Dreaming of you!  Not rated yet
Hiya am 15 years old my first time writing lyrics so if you can bear with me and tell me what you think and also ways i can improve...But most of all what ...

Lyric Feedback - untitled for now  Not rated yet
NEVER THOUGHT WE COULD B OVER
NEVER THOUGHT WE'D REALLY B THROUGH
I SIT HERE ALL ALONE AND THINK OF YOU
I THINK OF ALL THE TIME WE SHARED
AND ALL THA ...

Our Last Apartment (lyric critique please)  Not rated yet
Hi everyone, been having a little trouble with this song. Getting some good feedback but would like some honest feedback, and I think this is a good forum ...

song title: you think your cupid. let me know what you think. thanks.  Not rated yet
Are you paying me out
saying im you're one and only baby
without you id be lost
saying im you're one and only baby

But..
did you think i was that ...

untitled lyrics critique-country  Not rated yet
Hey i need help with my song here. also vist me at myspace to see some others. thanks soooo much. i don't have music for it yet...i concentrate more on ...

'On My Mind' -- Rock Song , Lyrics , Critique . Please comment .  Not rated yet
My first real song . It hasnt been edited yet .

'On My Mind '
by Karmin Burton

sometimes when im thinking of the past
of times we shared , that ...

The house is not a home (pop song) - lyric critique  Not rated yet
Hi guys,I think I have come with a wonderful song here.what do you think?


The house is not a home
©2008 Irwin Byron Abrigo


If anybody see my ...

Understanding Me Lyrics Critique, Rock Song  Not rated yet
I NEED YOU TO TRY
I NEED YOU TO FEEL
I NEED YOU TO CRY
AND I NEED YOU TO BE
BEFORE YOU CAN UNDERSTAND THE REAL ME

I NEVER WANTED TO CRY
SO I ...

"Love Me Lyrics" -pop song - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
1: When you love someone, you never want to let them go. You feel like your in the sun. I can feel the wind blow,love.

Chorus: I dream of you always....

Hit and Run lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Didn't let it rain
on your parade.
Love didn't mean a thing,
Just a game that you played.

Hit and run,
You're in the dark
And you can't see the ...

Bull Horn Rap Rock Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Bank collectors, vaults flood the the salted scars,
Wise men argue as there lungs fill with tar,
Cement trucks lay a coat of gray,
Flushed skin, red ...

Warning: Gas Chambers Rap Rock Lyric critique  Not rated yet
Greenhouse Gases, Fossil Fuel,
Waste and corruption dive into same pool,
Mercury rises, Polar caps melt,
Brains disintegrate, children whipped with ...

Speak - Lyrics (Slow country or slow R&B, not sure yet)  Not rated yet
(Male)
I've been waitin' here
For the sun to finally set
I've been cryin' tears
I won't forget

(Male)
You packed you bags
Walked out the door
...

How You Do It Now - Lyrics (mix between fast tempo pop, medium rock and small rap)  Not rated yet
I am crazy, I'll admit
But I ain't never been affected like this
And if you wanna come closer
Baby, put your head on my shoulder



PRE-CHORUS:
Oooh,...

the trend - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
cutting apples cut my thumb
high speeds would be fun
rockets shot up weigh a ton
fried my eyes from the sun
seems like all tests have passed
by and ...

Forever friends - Songwriter Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
You gave me another chance to be in your life , things can never be the same but we can only try. I ain’t gonna lie you’re the light in life, you are my ...

rise up o father christian contemp  Not rated yet
chorus: rise up o father my sheild and defender glory to the great iam turn me not away save me from the lions mouth never let me go standing on the ...

"Slow Growth" Lyrics Critique - Not completely done  Not rated yet
Do something more I need to know
Gonna show you I?ll up and go
Do something more I need to know
Gonna show you I?ll up and go
Verse 1: You?re mine ...

Back On The Path Lyrics - Written For My Brother - Pop Song  Not rated yet
So, here we go! I wrote this song when I was just 13 years old. So I'd like to change some of the words, especially the 2nd verse. My brother is much older ...

"Gentle Touch lyrics critique - country song"   Not rated yet
You’re like a cool and steady breeze
I’m like a wild hurricane
That comes and goes as it please
You’re the clam creek running
I’m the rapid up ahead
...

Just Another Homeless Man - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Just Another Homeless Man

Somewhere theres a mission
and a meal thats free.
Just another hobo
thats all he's trying to be.

Drinking coffee from ...

My new song just wrote tonight not sure of a title- Country  Not rated yet
I just wrote this song. It's about my girlfriend and I and how we met through where we are now. Just wondering what you guys think. Comments please! Revision ...

Sick - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Look at the people around you
Can't you see the suffering
The words they speak are so untrue
As are the promises they break
They throw stones at others ...

Thorns - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
title:Thorns

My shadow of thorns walked out of the sea
the harmony of distant lights carried
him across the rooftops of the city.

chorus:

he ...

dream - lyric writing help  Not rated yet
When I saw you walking down the road and our eyes meat I know that you would dream.

Is this a good start my name is Ashley I'm 13 years old and I'm ...

Judgment Day Lyric Critique Rap Rock  Not rated yet
Novel with no cover, one paper thick,
Tales to be told cumbered by a viral tick,
Nothing breaks the surface, doesn't even leave a mark,
Not one fueled ...

Because of What I Know - Lyric Review  Not rated yet
I can sense the end is running after me
I can feel a wind begin to sweep me off my feet
I can hear the whispers of the people in defeat
And all along ...

Call Of The Underground Lyrics Critique - Glam Metal Song  Not rated yet
You trust in me
Your sanctuary
But I’m addicted to this blackened symphony

You come along
Tell me I’m strong
But this is where I know I always will ...

feel your pride- classic rock - lyrics critque  Not rated yet
FEEL YOUR PRIDE
Verse 1
This is where the story begins
Soon enough your parents had twins
They love you
You and your friends
Remember those days ...

Government Control - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I can't print up money,because I'd go to jail,
Can't pay the tax collector with an IOU,
I can't write a hot check, to pay off all my bill,
Double ...

Mr. Barker Masquarade - Song Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
It's the month of January, and the bills just keep a commin',
December paid for Christmas fro the kids.
My cell phone keeps on ringing, but ...

A Whisper Of Betrayal Lyrics Critique - Hard Indie Rock  Not rated yet
A whisper, intended as a shout,
A whisper, that I cannot make out,
A whisper, telling me about,
A whisper, telling me to choose,

Is this the beginning ...

Untitled001 - Unplugged Death Metal Song - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I see the peasants in the valley
The pretty valley that once contained my soul
I long to lay beside the valley
And watch the demons take control


I ...

Clip the Wings - Death Metal Song - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Death to the unborn child
Death to he who has no life

Kill the crippled man
Kill the one who loathes his life

Rape the left behind
Rape the cast ...

"Verena's Lyrics Critique-country song" Tribute to Jimmi Walker  Not rated yet
Tribute to Jimmi Walker

Jimmi Walker was the boy next door
He worked in town at the country store
and when I'd walk by he'd smile and say hi...
(and ...

Because you are there lyrics critique  Not rated yet
a new year has now begun
nothing is like how it was before
I wake up without wondering
what am I in this world for

now all because I know you
and ...

the meaning of my heart lyrics critique  Not rated yet
there is a hidden mystery
down deep inside my heart
how can I get closer to you
a for us to never be apart

the path that leads to you is dark
but ...

BURDEN alternative critique please copywrite 05'  Not rated yet
Verse 1
even from here I can see
its casting a reflection on me
theres no where else to go
to seperate from here
your still going to see
things ...

Tell me, Lyrics.  Not rated yet
So i'll stay a little
while longer,
Just be there when i wake up.
Look at me with
those beautiful eyes,
And tell me about your dreams.

Oh.. I ...

Angeliqes lyrics(can't come up with a name   Not rated yet
I have the first verse to this song I've been trying to write.but I can't seem to think of a chorus.I'm 15 by the way.if u guys could give sum suggestions ...

I Don't Have A Home Anymore -lyrics critique-country song  Not rated yet
I remember when we moved into this place,
There just memories now that can’t be erased.
It’ different now; since you went away,
A cold breeze hits when ...

Without you rock lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Well this is how I’ll end it end it all tonight coz after this note won’t come back do you remember the day’s you said our friendship won’t fade away well ...

time for you and me lyrics  Not rated yet
the time has for our love to bloom
night has come way to soon
love is not love if it can not be shared

between to lovers i just can not compare
...

What Happened? lyrics - Love song.  Not rated yet
Oh... Woah...

I'm staring at my phone,
waiting for your call.
We haven't spoke in days,
i feel so alone.
Without you, i start to fall.

One minute ...

Joes lyrics critique-pop rock song  Not rated yet
Well, I can't stand to see him with you
Its more than i can take.
waht happened to the dreams we shared
And those late night rondevous
where i would ...

Get out stay out lyrics critique- pop  Not rated yet

O, o, o, o, o oh baby
I’ve been with you for a while
Long enough to see who you really are
But baby {but baby}
What you thinkan?
You thinkan you ...

Ready to Dream Again - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
Ready to Dream Again

You traveled miles around hoping that you would find
That special someone who has the key, to free your heart from this bind
...

Picture Frame - Songwriters Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Pictures in a frame
While I stumble down the stairs
Locked up tight, afraid what’s not inside
Indulge myself with what I have
Try to find a person ...

so pain is forgotten lyrics critque - rock deep heavy kind of song  Not rated yet
i wake up
to see tears on my pillow
crying my heart out
remembering that you forgot me
let my heart be crushed by these tears i cry
from you
for ...

hello beautiful. lyrics critque - slow guitar soft song  Not rated yet
your smile,
your heart,
your soul.
u make me feel,
so beautiful.
you make me shine
so very bright,
hello beautiful.

why dont you want to be ...

Hello Beautiful. Lyric Critique - piano soft slow song.  Not rated yet
your smile,
your heart,
your soul.
u make me feel,
so beautiful.
you make me shine
so very bright,
hello beautiful.

why dont you want to be ...

from cinderella into reality Lyric Critique - paino lullaby song.  Not rated yet
im all alone
on the edge of reality
crying my heart out
but doing it happily

reality makes you do these things
but cant you see whats happening?...

Talk To Me forever critique (Not sure about the genre and the tempo, Im just learing guitar)  Not rated yet
It makes my day this sound
People come around now
And they clap their hands together
All becoming one smooth harmony

Dreams all become reality for ...

"Untitled" critique lyrics alternative pop (medium paced I guess)  Not rated yet
No thoughts are
Running through my head
The gears are locked
All my ideas torn apart and lost

Friction, no intuition, what am I missing and why
Is ...

Can't think of a name - lyrics  Not rated yet
Verse 1
Blowing each deal off the highway tonight
And watching the opera lights passing me by
Just end up waiting on the hood of my car
‘Cause these ...

on my way lyric critique  Not rated yet
On my way

verse1
Things are not how they used to be
All you do is lie to me
there's too many late night calls
You don't care about me
I'd be a ...

I dont know how it got to this - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
I can’t remember for the life of me

I’ll hold my self completely responsible
for these actions that brought us too far.
I can’t decide what made us ...

Disinter Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
In your eyes I see the pain
The story lies within face
I know
Memories just tear away
At the little girl leaving her ashamed
Afraid
Alone
I know ...

Indie song Lyric critique  Not rated yet
Ya I'm feelin' kinda numb, Feeling kinda bulletproof
You Can't be wrong if you don't have a point to prove
I get got lost some time till then
I think ...

believe -"lyrics"critique" -( pop song)  Not rated yet
It was one of those song that just came to me !!!!


Do-DO-do
i was just sit in there
tears running down my face nothing to erase
and held the teady ...

put myself in motion - lyric critique  Not rated yet
hi guys hope you like this song it is about how I left my ex for another guy and how down I was about living a lie and how much better I felt for following ...

Rock Out Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
Okay I am only 12 and i am still trying to learn how to write a song so can i have feedback on how these lyrics are.

If there are times when you feel ...

little lies - lyric critique  Not rated yet
I believed these lies you call truth you promised me your love you promised you would change id try to walk away you yet you would say “baby please stay ...

All i Need - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
A song i wrote with a definite christian background
but is about much more, sorry about the included chords, i'm just too lazy to take them out


G ...

It's not you, it's me - lyric review  Not rated yet
It's not you it's me!

I thought you were the one, when we are together I feel alone. I realised we're not meant to be, don't worry it's not you it's ...

Everything is just ok - lyric critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this song to a laid back tune on my guitar
just hoping for some feedback, tell me what you think, all opinions are welcome


There’s a train,...

Euthanasia lyrics critque- metal music  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
The scared scream out to me
They want me to set them free
A mercy killer is what I am
I’ll steal your soul with my hands

Chorus:
I steal ...

Dementia lyrics critique - metal song  Not rated yet
Racing through my own mind
Looking for something I can't find
Searching for answers that aren't there
But nobody said that life is fair

(Chorus)
The ...

Hail To Fire Lyrics Critique- Metal Song  Not rated yet
Hail to Fire (written by Martin Synan)

(Intro)

Hail to Fire
Prayers of Death
Your time is up
And your death is set

Hail to fire
It reigns ...

(Rolling on 22) plz critique... rock music/pop like lyrics[looking for things that fit better and sound better   Not rated yet
Verse1
his minds all mush
and now we mess with him
now we can push
it looks so grim

chorus
his eyes so wide
his eyes so black
hes going blind
...

(holey darkness) lyrics critique... grunge/rock music./pop like lyrics[looking for things that fit better and sound better   Not rated yet
Verse1
his minds all mush
and now we mess with him
now we can push
it looks so grim

chorus
his eyes so wide
his eyes so black
hes going blind
...

Beautiful Girl/ Please Critic / Pop Ballad  Not rated yet
Beautiful Girl

Sorrow and pain, I’ll never be the same
Hurt and cold you’re the one to blame
Test after test – you almost laid this man to rest
Bring ...

Together forever - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
Hi im kelly.
im 14 and wrote some songs on here alrady.
this song i wrote a while ago.
its basically about leaving my year 8 class. they were the best ...

My Love my Dream Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
WHEN I THINK ABOUT LOVE
I THINK ABOUT SUNNY DAYS
THE RELEASING OF WHITE DOVES IN THE SIMPLIST WAYS
LAYING ON THE GRASS RIGHT NEXT TO YOU
WHEN I REALIZED ...

Imagination so fake so real - lyric critique  Not rated yet
i wrote many lyrics. but not with music. this is my fav one of all i wrote.


I need no imagination
Cause it's all here
Right here
Right now
When ...

Stronger - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
V1
When it's dark and glumy outside
and i don't know where to to hide
i close my eyes
and think of my friends who would play with me
and the sun ...

"Untitled Lyrics Critique - Alternative Song"  Not rated yet
(It's not quite finished yet. I still need to make a chorus and a few more lines...)

So much for yesterdays
And wishing for better days
As we go our ...

Listening Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I hate it when you, tell me something
you should know by now, i'm not listening
then you left me here sittin and wondering
because its just so, interesting....

Sick And Tired Lyrics, Rock Song  Not rated yet
I really need some critique, so please write what you think. This is rock song or rock ballad with faster tempo in refrain.

I had desire,
I wanted ...

All That I Am - Songwriter Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
Believing in something that can not be seen
Some people think im crazy.
But i know for sure He's out there
Everywhere; just like the air
And His angels ...

If I Only Knew - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Chorus:
Sometimes I wish time would slow down;
Let me take a breathe and think for a little while.
Maybe then life would be a little simplet.
I wouldnt ...

The Day I perish is the day the lamb eats on a terrace Lyrics(please feed back) - Hardcore/D-Metal/Screamo/What ever you wanna tittle it song  Not rated yet
Intro: Bleeding insanely loud
I cried out to the cutter
I seen her, the crowed
It past her like a clutter

Verse I: 'free me or I perish'
like a ...

Your Lies Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Funny when things never change
Even when you say they will
But while your off screwing her
My life is standing still

You tell me that you love me
...

Heart Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
You broke my heart with your smile
Your laugh made me cry
I knew you’d never look at me
And guess what
I was right

I’ll never know true love
I’...

The Addiction lyrics critique - Alternative Rock Song  Not rated yet
1st Verse

I tried to resist you, but I gave into your games
I thought I could beat you, but your like an addiction.
You seemed good at first, but ...

So Sweet Sufferings Lyrics Critique - Pop/punk/ alternative  Not rated yet
its a song about friends/lovers changing into a completly different person:

Without the trips of your emotions im now full of complaints to immaculate ...

BST Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
Hike, to the top of the mountain,
Drink, from a BST (Blood, Sweat, and Tears) fountain,
Fall down, Puke, get off your knee,
Today is the time for a ...

AndyL - Scent of the moon - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Gonna reach fever pitch.
Embraced 2gether not wearing a stitch.
Sharing each other. No ties no hitch.
Like cats 2gether sipping cream. Both purring ...

Who Knew Lyrics critique - faster heavy metal   Not rated yet
Hi, This song doesn't have a chorus, but I am open to any suggestions. I wrote this song when I was thinking about children who's parent's treat them badly ...

Broke My Heart - Lyric Review  Not rated yet
i thought we had a connection
so why'd you run and hide
did i read a wrong signal
because someone made a lie
now im all on my own
holding back the ...