'Losers' Hall of Fame" lyrics critique - slow three chord country 

Losers Hall of Fame

Did you see the big deal that went on in town last night
They were handing out awards for the deads in your life
It sure did ...

Mirror, Mirror - lyrics - pop/rock - critique 
There's no point in lying
To the mirror on the wall
You can never hide the truth
From the one who sees it all

Always seeing just who you are
And ...

Breaking Apart - Lyrics Critique 
Strapped to the wall
Can't cross the line
I can't get to you and I don't know why
Tied to the road
The train's coming down
Why aren't you coming?
You'...

Experience gain through dad - Lyrics Critique 
Experience gain through dad
(a talk)
First of all thanks to dad for bringin me in to this world life is a struggle 3x
I do this for the world to all ...

I Can Admit Lyrics Critique- Rap Lyrics 
When I'm angry,
I tend to write.
When I'm angry,
I tend to fight,
cuz those are the only things I can do right.
Right and wrong,
to me there's no ...

He'll never know lyrics critique- pop/hiphop 
It’s gotten complicated with you and me
Before if you opened your eyes you’d see
That I had fallen for you long ago
But I couldn’t show my feelings ...

"another goodbye" - Genre: Pop -Lyrics Critique 
Please leave, or i fall in love with you,
And I know, thats not, what you would like me to.

But i really like you to stay
But you know how awkward ...

No name- lyrics- critique- opinionate- psychedelic rock 
Whats the reason for the birds and the songs they always sing
Whats the point in speaking words if you dont bother listening
Whats the reason for our ...

ill be there (working title) - lyrics critique 
haha ok so...i have a problem. i have a chorus written down and this always happens when i try to write..i can get a chorus but no verses or bridge =P ...

Goodbye Lyrics Critique 
This was inspired by New Moon from the Twilight Saga.

Life was so amazing holding your hand feeling your breath
You asked me to meet you in field ...

"Prove Song Critique - Pop Song" 
You've got me on my knees
Begging please baby please

Can you prove to me, prove to me

That you can be the answers to my prayers?
Prove that you ...

Look In The Mirror - Songwriting Critique - Rock Song 
This song is about answering a single question: Are you really living your life as you want, or are you just following in someone elses footsteps, just ...

Andy L- Nadine PLEASE COMMENT. 
UNEMPLOYED LYRIC WRITER NEEDS help!!!!!!! Would love 2 work with anyone willing to put a voice and music 2 my crazy ideas. Please email lavellea@abtinternet....

Standing There-Rock/blues with the music behind it it sounds better 
Verse1-
I saw you standing there again same clothes you were wearing yesterday.. and are you drowning there in the tears rolling down your face but you ...

Suitcase Lyrics Review 
Rotting corpse starving for perfection,
Brain over loads with life's conceptions ,
Lungs disperse a blistering tone,
Functions greased to loosen as ...

Alternative Lyrics Critique - Breather 
VERSE 1
if i said tonight would be
the last time that youd hear from me
a last goodbye---
would you go on and forget about
the rest as the waves carry ...

love or a trend lyrics critique 
a little song i wrote dont konw if is should be rock or old style pop???



verse 1: Theres something i cant seem to rid from my mind so i think ill ...

I know you Lyric Critique Country Song by Charlie 
I know you
By now you?re hard at work
And the phone won?t stop ringing
In the background you can hear
Nora Jones softly singing
There are yellow sticky ...

Sick - Lyrics Critique 
Look at the people around you
Can't you see the suffering
The words they speak are so untrue
As are the promises they break
They throw stones at others ...

Lipstick On His Collar - Lyric Critique 
Verse 1
Every Friday night at the window, I get a glimpse of Mr. Jones,
He gets all dressed up for dinner, then he sits to eat it alone,
He gets out ...

Clay Lyrics Critique rap rock  
Typewriters produce molten population,
Paper boys toss articles cutting into self relations,
The school to study self, never opened the gates,
Plastering ...

He'll never know - lyric critique 
hey everyone, i'm Nicole, i'm 15, i just want to know what you all think, its one of my first songs :D songwritings kinda grown into a hobby for me so ...

Candy Girl Lyrics Critique - Alternative 
This is a song I have been working on for two days along with a antoher song at the same time. It kinda got my attention when I heard my chick friends ...

Untrue Lyrics 
This is a song I wrote not long ago. Tell me what you think, but keep in mind that I'm only 14!

Untrue

I’m walkin’ on an empty street
Not knowin’...

my place by liam maihi comment it. acoustic. 17 years old. 
the air, the air it flows so clear here,
and this summer, this summer smells so new,
but the faces, these faces are all so familiar,
under sky, a sky ...

Only When It Rains Lyrics Critique- Ballad 
It's a duet. Starts with a man, then a woman.
Lemme know what you think :)

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
That day we were sitting at a table
...

I want to Be Someone Else Lyrics Critique- Medium tempo song with feeling 
I want to Be Someone Else

I cry Every night
Just thinking about my life
I wake up every morning
Wanting to be different

Everybody else is soo ...

Bad dream. lyrics critique. rock song.  
you promised your heart to me,
you promised your smile and shining eyes.
you promised you would pretect me.
but only if it wasnt a dream
only if it ...

The man you see - Songwriter lyric critique 
You say you want your freedom
Say you need some time
You burned up all your bridges
Made off with my last dime

I keep lookin for a reason
to hold ...

Opposites Repel Lyric Critique 
Veins black, Head pounds to a pulse,
Lips feel covered in mulch,
People so separated,
My own country, I want a truce,
Every time I try I just get pushed ...

Inside Cell Num. 666 - Lyrics Feedback 
Crystal clear glass, You intentionally blur,
You plug your ears as I attempt to be heard,
Just cause it hurts, you block it all out,
Fear to figure,...

Take You Down Lyrics Crtitique - Pop 
1st Verse:

just give it time
for that star to fly
you too busy noticing, that you might be...
invisible
just take it from the start, and never ...

Having Fun Lyrics Review 
verse 1

Sitting home one day kickin our shoes (off!)
Bored out our minds nothin to do (oh!)
thinking of something xciting and cool (hey!)
come on ...

(Born To Love You)"cecily knight lyrics CRITIQUE" maybe rock song- undecided 
Im sure everybody sees the silence here.
And the words are nowhere near. They left long ago.
But im not the one about to start a greivance, and that ...

UCFK - Lyric Review 
Verse 1:
Your mind is a product of a computer installation,
Take apart the pieces, Destroy a station,
Understand there's a world beneath the mural,
Question ...

AndyL - Accelerate. Please comment. (Lyric Feedback) 
Driftiong through the craze.
Flowing through the days.
Watching other people in their real life plays.
Drifting throught this curios maze.
Driving ...

AndyL - Coralie Shiver Serenade and Deliver. PLEASE COMMENT 
Coralie Shiver worked 9 till 4 in a run down bar what a bore.
She had a room where she slept from 4 till 9 above a neonm sign that flashed club divine....

Broke My Heart - Lyric Review 
i thought we had a connection
so why'd you run and hide
did i read a wrong signal
because someone made a lie
now im all on my own
holding back the ...

"Not This Time" Lyrics Critique- rock/pop song 
"Not This Time" is a song I wrote about my past and present relationship(s). I'm a singer/ songwriter who wants to see just how far my talents can take ...

Her Fake Love Lyrics Critique - metal song 
This song talk about a man his wife was hate and betray him and pretending that she loves him.

people I need your opinion about this lyrics ,please ...

take your pictures - lyrics critique [: 
TAKE YOUR PICTURES


VERSE ONE:
Headline of tomorrow
Got my picture on the front page
Yeah, man, I famous,
Didn’t know it would go this way
Oooo,...

Dont know a name yet . some one could help thoo. (lyric review) 
What do think of this? needs a name have not got one yet.


verse 1
what if it was dream, would i believe it or would i disagree,
ive got this feeling ...

15 Minutes (Rock, Grungy) - Songwriters Lyrics Review 
I am new to songwriting, but this song came to me, and I liked it. Its about my girlfriend who committed suicide.

(verse)
Don't you know what you have?...

"From The Sidelines" Lyrics-Screamo/Hardcore Song 
Here it is. Not very good, I know, but I thought I could use some opinions. Thanks a lot. :)

From The Sidelines

There she is again
Her eyes gaze ...

I Have This Dream 
(Verse 1:)

I have this dream
That I wished we all could know
I have this dream
That I wished we all could show
We are the one's (see)
We need to ...

Sweat Ladder Lyric Critique Rap/Rock song 
Verse 1:
View of a ladder,
There is nothing sadder,
Then no view of the top,
But I got no reason to stop,
This is where my dream begins,
My life ...

Simon Lyrics Critique - Pop Song-These Past Few Days 
Verse 1 (A)
I woke up Monday morning with a migraine
And yesterday’s pain still shows in my eyes
A swollen heart, the day fades away again
So I lie ...

Obama Save Me! - Lyrics Critique 
Obama Save ME !

You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘ve been turned down more than a bed spread,
at the local Holiday ...

Ballads, Blues and Rock-n-Roll lyrics critique country/ southern rock 

Ballads, Blues and Rock-N-Roll

I woke with the night before pounding in my head
A empty bottle of tequila on the floor by my bed
Felt around on ...

Cross Roads - lyrics critique - country/southern rock 

Cross Roads

He walked up out of that delta on a hot dry July night
The music burning in him with a Gibson on his back
And the old men on the benches ...

"Kiss me" - lyrics critique 
Sorry if it is bad. it's my first song. Keep in mind, I am only 10. Don't ask me how I got the idea.
Feel free to e-mail me if you like it.

heyer32@...

Pretty - Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this songs chorus for a song my mom made up for me and my sisters. The song is pretty much about my mom and how she was like my rock when I was ...

Jessica Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
Picture my little baby boy
He was perfect, pure joy
It was a picture of love at first sight
The first time I saw him in the light

Chorus
In a flash ...

You...Me...Us Lyrics - Critique 
Hi! This is my first lyric to a song. It's not very far, but I think it has some great potential. I'm not really sure yet what genre it would be in, but ...

Lost Love Critique - Country 
The verses are about medium speed, and the chorus is a little faster.

Depressed
Obsessed
Love is lost
What is the cost?
Nothing can heal it
Just ...

I'm Sorry - Soul - Lyric Feedback 
I’m sorry I don’t always find the words to say
I’m sorry I cant be there, everyday
I’m sorry for the things I couldn’t say
I’m sorry, I’m sorry
 
Sorry ...

I just want to know lyrics critique-country song 
I've done some thinking
I just want to know if
you love me like you did
when we were just kids

How about that time when, uh
we kissed for the first ...

Savior of Love Lyrics Critique 
Sitting alone, with both eyes closed
The image of you, sets in my mind
Standing beside me, holding a rose
Kissing me softly, but no one knows.

I ...

September Gray Lyrics Critique, country song 
"September Gray"


1. I'll always remember, every second of that day


When the angels came from heaven, and carried you away


They came down ...

Country Boy - Lyric Feedback 
Well, I certainly aint no cowgirl
And you aint a country boy
I've never drove a pick-up truck
and you used to live in Detroit

We never went to no ...

Let me sleep in silent dream before you go - lyrics critique 
Smile my woman smile…
It’s the only thing I have in this world

Love baby just love…
I’m just sacred I would die alone

It’s amazing how you made ...

Five Reasons To Fall Apart - Lyrics 
Not so very long ago

I’d count your footsteps when you’d go

And sculpt my heart to fit your palm

Welcome you back with open arms



But times ...

Who's Gonna Love Me Now? Critique Lyrics RnB 
VERSE 1:
I remember being in your arms
I love the feel
Of your skin
Against my own
And the smell
Of your cologne
Reassured me
That I ...

"Eff'd in the Ay" lyrics, soulful ballad - critique 
"Eff'd in the Ay"

Girl, I don't think that you know whatcha do to me.
Sendin out signs but they ain't comin through to me

Oh, don't wanna let you ...

Payin' Back Mine? Country Song - Lyrics Critique 
Just a short country song. wrote it on a long drive. just want to know what other people think. Constructive critiscm appreciated.


They said im a ...

I Will Lighten Your Life - Justin Cayce - Balladine Blues - Songwriting Critique 
I'd like to know exactly what kind of mood this evokes (if any)...

I Will Lighten Your Life - Justin Cayce

Oh Lord I?ve been lost
For such a long,...

Touch of Soul Lyrics Critique - undecided 
I need a story
A song to touch my soul
Make me feel whole again
I don't need no more worries
Or fears to hold me back
From being
Who I know I can ...

"Alone in this world" 
VERSE:1
I feel so alone
I need someone to lift
my spirit
Is there anyone out there
That can fill my soul
with joy
I need to be rescued
From this ...

Stop Judging-Christian Song 
There is a kid walking down the hall
He looks different from the other ones
Kids make fun of him for the way he looks.
He hates the way he looks

Why ...

thinking bout you always lyrics critique 
Thinking about you makes me cry
Staying up late I wonder why
Wondering why life was this way
I was picked out, I was made to pay
My daddy left me ...

The Hell You Don't See - Lyrics Feedback 
I wrote this song over 3 years ago in response to some school shootings across the country and a suicide attempt by one of my students in a class I cadet ...

keep believing lyrics citique- pop song 
i am loosing my mind
i am falling apart
for some reason i cant tell
who is the right.

i didnt want to be in this position
i never wanted to make ...

My Goodbye lyrics Critique -Pop song?? 
I've written some lyrics, but i don't know if they are good. I want some criticism from someone besides my friends! I don't exactly like mine, I think ...

Closing Doors - Grunge Rock - Songwriting Critique 
I guess I'm trying to be like Nirvana here...
Don't really like the name 'Closing Doors,' but it fits with the song... am open to other suggestions (possibly ...

Retina Arson - songwriting critique 
Nuts and bolts piece together sky scraper,
Elevator rise as I scribble on paper,
Inspiration sparks from puncturing art,
The mind shoots determination ...

"The Addiction" - Lyrics Critique - Alternative 
so, this is just a song i wrote for my girlfriend. let me know what you think, john94xc@gmail.com


( )= background voice
{ }= all voices

V1
...

Lyric Critique - christian/country 
i really like the idea of where my song is going about the struggle of addiction, but i just don't think it flows well, and i just think some of the words ...

If I had a car like that country Lyric Critique 
If I had a car like that

She was low and mean
I wasn’t quiet sixteen
And she was the object of my dreams
She had a Drop top, big block, with four ...

Untitled -i need one! - lyric critique 
Snow is falling all around seven o’clock and the roads are blocked
There’s nobody in the town so i stay at home
All The schools it seems are all closed,...

Get Out Of Jail Free - Lyrics Critique - Emo Rock - K. Fretz 
Its kind of a metaphor for suicide (The Get Out Of Jail Free card is suicide and I guess the jail is life.
Comment Please, Thanks
ROCK ON!


Get ...

Lyrics Critique - Untitled so far 
I'm new at songwriting, but I wanted to get some honest reviews on this.

Verse 1
Look at the people all around you
Can you not see the suffering
...

A Soldier’s Song (It won’t be Long) Lyric critique 
A Soldier’s Song (It won’t be Long)

There’s a solider on some foreign ground
Who stops to put a package down?
Sent to him from his home town,
So ...

"Lazy Days of Summer Lyrics Critique - Country Song" 
Lazy days of summer,
We were best of friends.
The time we shared together,
We thought would never end.
Skippin' stones and ice cream cones,
We climbed ...

"Heroes and Dreams Lyrics Critique - Country Song" 
When we were younger
We'd share with each other
Our innermost secrets and dreams.

You'd be the damsel
Of a medieval castle
In a fairy tail world ...

Part-Time Dad lyrics critique - country song 
It was you that said goodbye; it was you that said we’re through,
And it was you that left though; I’m still in love with you.
It was you, who filed ...

Paradise - Lyric Critique - Country 
First time poster, I write a lot of songs that people like, friends at least. Uh, i just need a lil help. Its supposed to be a kinda laid back feeling ...

Unleashed lyrics critique- Metal Song 
Injected,
Infected,
Our lives reflected
We are wolves by night
Full moons, our kryptonite

Chorus:
Unleashed, we crawl,
We fight for all,
Unite ...

Don't Crank My Tractor Country Lyric Critique 

Don’t crank my tractor,

He was a man of few words
He had farmed near all his life
just last year his ex- best friend
Ran off with his wife
...

All Alone- Ballad - Lyrics Feedback 
Here are some lyrics i wrote and i would love to hear some feedback. They have been influenced by a very hard point in my life, as you can probably tell....

She?s my island - Country w/a Tropical beat -Lyric Charlie 
She?s my island

The smile on her face feels like a warm embrace
Shared with a long lost friend
The soothing touch of her hand
Tells me, she really ...

Cracks Lyrics Critique 
HI! I'm 14 and this is one of the first songs i've ever written. I would love to hear your critiques, so please comment!!!! The lyrics are sort of "odd"...

Here Alone - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1 When I was young my mother said
That fairy tale love was somewhere waiting for me
I thought I’d fall in love
But she didn’t mention broken ...

I wish things were simple again - lyrics critique 
By: Bobby Reynolds 1792 47th street safford az 928-651-1971
This song is my song please don’t copy it with out my permission
E-mail meyapig@live....

where's my truck? lyrics critique, up tempo country 
i guess i must have had myself a drink or two last night
and looking at my face, i think i might have had a fight
i got me a gash up on the right side ...

Broken Strings Critique - Country Song 
I couldn't really decide what the genre would be but the simplest way for me to explain it is slow with a beat.


Broken Strings


Verse 1

I ...

Chasing After the Wind Chorus Lyrics Critique- Soul Ballad 
Verse 1:
I fell into the trap of worldly desires
I wanted to belong to its ways
Felt like I had to take more for myself
I was nowhere near satisfied
...

Caitlins Lyrics (looking for support cos im only 11) 
Crying on the Inside

You help me up
Then push me to the floor
You whisper we are meant to be
But Im no longer sure

So you hold me in your arms
...

Lay it away Lyrics Critique - metal 
This prolly isnt the Genre yall are used to but hey what the heck. its metal has some screaming but these are the lyrics.

You make me feel good, You ...

Gravity, Release Me - Lyrics Feedback 
Gravity, realese me
don't hold me down
let me fly away
I don't want to hear the words
I know you're going to say

let me escape
release me from ...

Judge The Dead, Rock/Metal Songwriting Critique 
It's time to shed the blood
The blood of your people
And all who fear the name

It is time to judge the dead

The have defeated by the blood
For ...

If You Were Here Today Lyrics Critique - slow song 
It's not entirely finished yet. Advice/suggestions greatly appreciated/welcomed. Let me know whatcha think!!=)

I think of all the fun we had together
...

Scared Little Boy Lyrics Critique  
(Verse 1)Were we perfect or was it just an illusion?
I was so happy,and I thought you were too.But I guess I've finally learned my lesson.And you taught ...

Corinne Lyrics Critique - What Would Happen? - Love pop song 
What Would Happen?

INTRO:
I'm not sure, how I want
To feel, about you,
And I don't want, them to know
Of the pain, you didn't see you put me through
...

Need to be Free- Country/pop - lyrics critique 
My friend and I are 14, new to songwriting, and we live in Nashville. We are really trying to make it big, like Taylor Swift. The tempo of this song is ...

Just an Angel - Power Ballad - Lyric Critique 
Just an Angel

I took a walk
on a cold night
I was tryin' to get my feelings right
My mind was lost in time
And my eyes were lost in space
I was ...

"dream" - lyric critique 
VERSE:1
There's a dream in my mind
but will it come true
will i ever achieve it
there's a voice in my head
telling me you cant do it
but what i say ...

I can't believe its over Lyrics Critique- country music  
I Cant Believe Its over

It started out so perfectly I can't believe it ended. The feelings that im feeling now im not so sure its ...

Sunsets - Songwriting Critique 
The sunsets in the west
The way we watched it hit the horizon
The way we were carelessly in love
But do i wish
Wish that my mistake didn't end it

Chorus:...

How Could You Do This (To Me)? - Indie Rock - Songwriting Critique 
You said we would last forever,
You said we would never end,
You said you thought I was clever,
Kind, sweet, cute,
And you liked my eyes!
Now Look!...

Escaping hell lyrics critique - rock/metal 
some of the lyrics are a little dark so i apologize if this offends you. im writing lyrics for a metal/rock song that will more than likely have a medium-...

"Back where is all started" critique-Hardcore/pop song 
(chant)
Dont turn your back on me!You'll regret this more then you know!

(Verse 1)
Black eyes,rid fist,and i was told to surrender,
but did you think ...

Rescue Me - Hard Rock Song 
Ok, this is my first song ever so...go easy on me, ok?

E-mail any suggestions to: disturbedcreedfanatic@yahoo.com

Rescue Me:

You see me falling
...

Killing Me Lyrics - Acoustic song 
It's killing me
slowly killing me
But they, say,
Im too young to die
x2

If they knew, if they cared
What if they realised, No one is here
Would ...

"Get Wastified" lyrics critique-hip-hop song (iiklipz) medium to fast tempo 
verse 1< regulate the bottle, us iron rangers get wobbled and try our hardest to regulate the throttle, theres no need for drunk vision goggles, we got ...

Gone - Lyrics Critique 

Verse 1-treat me how you want
At your own will
But your driving a car
Without any wheels
Do you see the dangers ahead
Or will you ignore them
the ...

"Shattered Skies Lyrics Critique - Punk 
Not very good i know, but let me know what you think...
think like a Rise Against type of song


Verse I

Well I'm not sure how to tell you
but ...

Because of me - Lyric Critique 
This is my song called Because of me. I need help on writing the music to the piece or finding something to download to create music and include lyrics....

a part of me - lyrics critique 
Part of Me

A part of me wants to go fishing
And a part of me don’t
A part of me wants to go shopping
There’s a part of me that won’t
A part of me
...

Change not sure of genre yet, tell me what parts you like and what parts you don't 
(Note:i know it probably sucks. This is dedicated to Barack Obama for fighting for African-Americans.)

Our moment is here
our time to shine has finally ...

Love I can't ignore Lyrics 
Here is my lyrics


I feel like an idiot.
I tried to make it last.
But every time I tried, I felt emptiness.
Until i met you,
Nothing did survive....

Amends - Lyric Critique 
Amends

We've had a rough road to ride

All around us trouble seemed to fill the air

For the time being there seems to be no other way

I only ...

Who Knew Lyrics critique - faster heavy metal  
Hi, This song doesn't have a chorus, but I am open to any suggestions. I wrote this song when I was thinking about children who's parent's treat them badly ...

Something Told Me Lyrics Critique- Psychedelic Rock 
something told me, this be over,
in a little while
come to think, i think that something,
was me
clutched fists, and fingers tied in tight
im at ...

Summertime Dance - Lyric Review 
She was only thirteen years
Been through a hard time as it appears
Always sneaking out of the house
Just to have a couple beers
He was seventeen then
...

Forgetting to breathe - lyrics critique[: 
FORGETTING TO BREATHE

VERSE ONE:
I sit here with this smile
I’ve had on all day
Thinking of the words
That I really want to say
Don’t know what ...

It's Not Okay Lyrics-Pop/Country Song 
You let me tell you everything then you just walk away
What in the world makes that okay
Ohhh it’s not ok
No its not okay

You force me to open up ...

In Your Arms Tonight - Lyrics Critique 
CHORUS:

Can't we just forget all
The hurt within, all
The tears we've shed
Can't we just let
Time pass us by
Cause I need you by my side
Won'...

Perestroika (incomplete)- rap metal - lyrics critique 
this is my first song, so dont be too hard

V1:
Destruction, walking through the streets of Abandonment, population 2,000,000 and growing each day

Reforming ...

Infliction [lyrics, critique, metal] 
I've felt pain
And have inflicted it
Countless number of times

Have I inflicted myself
With all the sorrows
That made me who I am

I will take ...

Sexual Dyslexia. Please comment. Lyric writing critique. 
lavellea@btinternet.com

U Entered the club through the rear.
Then it became clear.

CHORUS.
The music screamed take off your clothes.
Underneath ...

Too Much To Lose - lyrics critique ballad  
Too Much To lose
Andrew Day (welcome all comments new to this and won't be offended ...

Moon Lyrics Critique - Rock/Metal song - Need help with mostly... everything! 
Hi! I'm starting a band, in which I'll be drummer and song writer. The genre will by something like Metal/Hard Rock. I wil here post 3 lyrics from which ...

Come Tomorrow lyrics critique- soft rock song 
~personally, i think the lyrics are kinda cheesy, but let me know what u think!=)~

When nothin' seems to go your way
And it seems like everyone's out ...

Broken Apart Lyrics Critique - Rock Song 
Broken Apart

Eyes open i see clearly now
no longer on this cloud
you fall crashing to the ground
landing somewhere far away
with no one else ...

GO GO and never come back. - lyric feedback 
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!

this is some thing just quick. so i hope you all like it.






GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!
GO!...

Crying Now - Lyrics Critique 
How have things come to this
My world just fell apart
It’s hard to stay strong
What have I done so wrong?

I don’t know what ...

"Unlike Me" Lyric Critique -a Pop rock ballad.  
I only have the chorus so far:

With her long blonde hair, that can flow with the wind. With her long eyelashes, that look like they touch the sky.
With ...

"the one" - rock " - lyrics critique 
i really need someone to tell me straight forward and not be a coward about telling me what they think." i am 16.

When I see your smile
Tears roll ...

Falling in love -lyrics critique- pop 
I thought about you all last night
I wondered what youd do if I was in sight
Would you kiss me or make a move
Would I accept you, would my best friend ...

Routine - songwriting critique 
Verus 1:
They both think they know
Could they try to agree
Find the common points between
Before this all turns to high sea

Chorus:
Stop with the ...

I Hate You - Slow R&B 
I've never really done this but I guess it would be good to get some feed back...


Verse 1:
Was I that foolish to believe every word you said. I ...

"Leaving Lyrics Critique- Slower Rock Song" 
This song's called Leaving

Verse 1

I've had enough
With the tough luck
I want it to be over
But you'll never be sober
So I packed up mt ...

World Stood Still Lyrics Critique - Country song 
I dont know what i should do with an intro to this... I have writers block :( Or can you start a song with the chorus?

When our eyes met, the world ...

Star Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre 
I’m lost,
I can’t find my way.
Winter frost,
Is setting on my skin.
The streets are filled with cold-eyed stares.
Can someone help me?
Anyone who ...

"**** your god", Lyrics Critique- Crust Punk 
Chorus
There's no such thing as holy
and there's no such thing as sacred
belief makes you a coward
So f*** your god

Christ never existed
he didn'...

Heart Lyrics Critique 
You broke my heart with your smile
Your laugh made me cry
I knew you’d never look at me
And guess what
I was right

I’ll never know true love
I’...

What if - lyrics critique 
what if it never happened at all, would i still be feeling like this
maybe there would be more tears of joy than sadness. maybe im not the only one who ...

"What's next?" lyrics critique 
"What's next?" by Dennis Fraser

I'm just trying to understand, when this all began
When everything went wrong, and for exactly how long
My life has ...

See You Again - Country/ Rock Lyrics Feedback 
This isn't the exact thing that happened in my relationship but I tried to fix it in an understandable way. Please tell me how am I doing?



Moving ...

FairyTale Dream Lyrics Critique - Pop/Rock/Country 
I wrote FairyTale Dream awile back. Please don't be afraid to be harsh at all.


FairyTale Dream


Verse 1:
Those eyes still shine
like when we ...

Lyrics for Original song by the Revolution Girlz...Style:Pop...Title: Believe 
This is just the chorus of the song. We are thinking of changing it (my band and I):

You gotta believe
That I'm here for you
I know that what you'...

The Irritated. lyrics critique - Rock and Roll/Punk. 
this is one of the first songs i've ever written. my friend jessica helped. to see one of her songs look for " having fun". please enjoy. :DDDDDDDDDDD
...

Live With It Lyrics Critique - Alternative/Punk Rock 
I haven't written the whole song yet, this is just the beginning. It was kind of thrown together really quickly, but then I got stuck. Here it goes.

Just ...

Chat Room Boyfriend (part 1) - Lyric Critiques 
(VERSE 1)
I was online the other day
on a chat room box with hundreds of names
but there was this one name that stood out
from the rest ohhhh
i ...

Sun Set - Songwriters Lyric Review. 
Hey wrote this today a little bit heartbroken,took about 5 minutes.Its probably crap but it really helped me. Any help would be greatly appreciated.


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Speak - Lyrics (Slow country or slow R&B, not sure yet)  Not rated yet
(Male)
I've been waitin' here
For the sun to finally set
I've been cryin' tears
I won't forget

(Male)
You packed you bags
Walked out the door
...