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Someday Never Turns Today Lyrics Critique - Country Song

by Simon

Someday Never Turns Today

Verse 1 (A)
A head full of plans and a heart full of dreams
A one way ticket and she’s on her way
Sweet child of sorrow touchdown in the city
Pocket full of butterflies but she smiles anyways
She’s tired of waiting for someday
‘Cause Someday Never Turns Today

Verse 2 (A)
She works minimum pay long hours every night
Made a friend called grace and the stuff she said
Comes to her usual spot with stars in her eyes
As she smokes her cigarettes to kill the day’s end
She’s tired of waiting for someday
‘Cause Someday Never Turns Today

Verse 3 (A)
Time stole her innocence, dreams are of the past
An alias name and a different dress
With a painted face that lured cash and lust
Now she flows like the streets hand in hand with grace
She’s tired of waiting for someday
‘Cause Someday Never Turns Today

Coda
Heads full of plans and a hearts full of dreams
A one way ticket and they're on their way




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Someday Never Turns Today Lyrics Critique - Country Song

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Feb 05, 2010
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great!!
by: jessica

This song is amazing!! i can imagine it being played on the radio, i love it!

Feb 06, 2010
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thanks Jessica
by: Simon

It took me a while to write it

Jun 13, 2010
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Strong
by: Mitchell

Strong overall. "Touchdown" throws me a football you might not want in there. Also "the stuff she said" feels vague amid otherwise clear ideas. "Innocence" could maybe be an image/symbol instead of being abstract--maybe the butterflies (and that was a fabulous line) could return here.

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