"Someday lyrics"- Slow pop song

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"Someday lyrics"- Slow pop song

by Sarah (15 yrs. old)
(USA)

this is my first song and i wanted to see how you liked it! Please be honest even if it's harsh!

(Chorus)

Verse 1:
Someday,
i won't feel this pain.
I move right through this rain,
that's blocking my way.
Hopefully,
you be here with me with me,
so i won't have to dream of you.

Chorus:
Someday,
I get right through this,
i'll move right past.

Someday,
my smile will be real.
my heart i will reveal,
Someday.

Verse 2:
As we watch the sun go by,
as we watch the clouds float high in the sky.

As we see are dreams come true,
all because i came to you.

(Chorus)

Can't you see this is what life gonna be......
Someday!

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"Someday lyrics"- Slow pop song

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Dec 18, 2009
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COOLS
by: kathrine

i love it.

Dec 22, 2009
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yes
by: Anonymous

I really like these lyrics, but I feel you could use stronger words to make the song deeper to be able to feel the song :)

Dec 29, 2009
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Hey
by: Anonymous

thats very promising keep up the good work. Try to add more flesh onto yo song

Jan 01, 2010
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good
by: Anonymous

its very good for your first song. just keep working at it. you could be very good.

Sep 04, 2010
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Really good
by: Pianissimo

Would sound really good as a slow pop song, I also like the lyrics allot.

Nov 14, 2010
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Nice start!
by: Anonymous

I think you are on the right track, but let the words be more melodic so the song doesn't have to work so hard to be.

Maybe like this:

Someday,
I will move through this pain.
I won't let it stop me again,
soon I'll be on my way
to you.
Hopefully,
you'll be here with me
and not someone I can only reach
in my dreams.

Chorus:
Someday,
I get this right
and you
will be moving next to me
in the night.

Someday,
my heart will reveal
what words only hope to conceal.
Someday.

Verse 2:
As we watch the sun go by,
watching clouds float in the sky.

As we see our dreams come true,
all because I came to you
this day.

(Chorus)

Can't you see this is what life gonna be......
Someday!

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