so many fears - lyrics critique - rap

by Tommy Quinton
(England)

hey i wrote this rap based on the soldiers in the war, I'm a beginner so ill take positive and negative comments all on board. cheers.


on your chest so wear a poppy for there sake
sending the soldiers to war its a mistake
to many deaths its a painful ache
its a new world that we need to create

sending the soldiers to war what for
get them out of there before there's anymore
soldiers just lying..... dieing on the floor
its a serious matter that we cant ignore

they lose there limbs they lose there lives
its a sad letter back to there husband or wife's
we should support the soldiers but get rid of the war
because there's to many hearts that are feeling so sore

heads face the floor because we've lost so many soldiers
but make them proud and raise up your shoulders
soldiers are the reason why we're still living
give them all the respect because that's what I'm giving

(chorus)x2
so many fears so many tears
so many lives lost in recent years
so many tears cumin from your eyes
to many soldiers losing there lives


they have to take that route and straight up shoot
they need more protection like a bullet proof suit
its larger health and strength that they need to recruit
so its hand to the temple i salute

they have to keep shooting round by round
i wish i could bury war and put it in the ground
the soldiers who have past i prey for you in heaven
all of this wouldn't of started if it wasn't for the 911

there passing away and there only my age
I'm only 19 there's to much anger to much rage
i think you'll agree we need it to change
a different life for those needs to be arranged

to much blood to much violence
bow your head for a minute have some silence
so stop the war do you agree
i want to stop saying REST IN PEACE

(chorus)x2
so many fears so many tears
so many lives lost in recent years
so many tears cumin from your eyes
to many soldiers losing there lives