"Possesive Lyrics Critique - pop/ hip-hop

by Zach Hill
(Porterville. California)

This is wht I have so far...


This love for you is unshakable,
my one and only, unchangable.
To you I'm never worthy,
And your eternaly unbendable.
Fortunatly, my prides unbrakable.
Persistant, and untamable.
But our tempers got us shook,
Scared to look at you; so gullible.

This love for you 
It's no good for us.
All the sleepless nights,
Countless empty fights,
Im Unsure of us.
I wish you stayed, 
This situation remains so torturous.
And now we sit so far away,
And i still think about you every day, 
Wondering if there's any way,
I could get you back, i always pray.

I realize the mistakes I've made,
Ways I've treated you will never fade,
Addicted to the drama,
Hate and love you, on the same day,
I feel demented, so stressed by the things you say,
I've strayed from you and now I pay.

I apreciate the things you see, 
How you brought the best in me,
But u also brought the beast in me,
That brought out the worst in you,
But I still love you yes it's true,
And not just for the things you do,
This beast is on it's last fuse, 
I'm sick of all the fighting too,
I just wanna be with you, 
Happily, in good moods,
I just wanna be there for you,
Always and forever too,
And don't ever think I'm mad at you.

I'm devoted to this thing i've kept for me and you,
Unaffected by the things you say,
Were torn apart, yet mendable.
My concience says were thru,
But my heart still loves you,
Just promise me youll think it through,
Because no one can compare to you.

Now I'm fixated on my life, 
Tryna figure out what's right, 
What's done is done its over with,
I miss laying with you those nights,
And now your falling out of sight,
My heart feels like some dynamite,
I need you now more than ever,
I promise unconditional love forever,
And baby it's always better together.


Working on a chorus..