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Petra - "Lyrics Critique-( fast tempo song) " It's alright"

by Petra
(Australia)

I don't know the genre yet.
This is my second lyric.
Please tell me what you think of the lyrics.
I am Dutch so English is not my first language.
The rhythm of the second and third verse is a bit different than the first verse.

Title: It's alright

Verse

Look back about your life has been
It wasn't always how it seem
But you remember, you remember
People gave you back some good advice
You were hurt it wasn't always nice
But you remeber,

Chorus

It's alright to be forgiving now
for all that it's happenend in the past
You are the only one who can fix it now, but make sure you do it fast

Verse

It took a while to realize, but you took people's good advice
But you remember, you remember
To be yourself, know who you are
You've done a good job so far,
You remember

Chorus

It's alright to be forgiving now
for all that it's happenend in the past
You are the only one who can fix it now, but make sure you do it fast

Verse

Life's good you know it. you won't take anything for granted
Forgive,let go,enjoy the life you have now
And allow it to give you the happiness you deserve
So do remember it's alright and stop your personal fight

Chorus

It's alright to be forgiving now
for all that it's happenend in the past
You are the only one who can fix it now, but make sure you do it fast




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Petra - "Lyrics Critique-( fast tempo song) " It's alright"

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Nov 21, 2010
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Thanks for sharing
by: janmarie

I felt your lyrics, Petra. I like how you changed up your verses and chorus but kept the theme of the song consistent. You may want to consider shortening up a few of the longer lines by rewording or getting rid of some extra words. Keep the thoughts, think of the phrasing. Reuse the phrases (as you have done) for emphasis.
I hope this helps.

Dec 02, 2010
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Can do better
by: Anonymous

Am sorry but am not feeling this...you do have a story to tell but u arent bringin it out well enough, plus ua lyrics are kinda plain, the only style i see is repetition and single rhymin words...

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