Now that ive lost you - lyric critique

by Luke Harrison
(Exmouth, Devon,England)

This is one of 3 songs i have wrote. I would like to try take them further. Anything needs improving let me know. Thank you for reading.


The day that i lost you was the day my life changed forever
Nothing can change the way things used to be, not never
I was so happy when i had you
No one can understand what im going through
I wish some how things could go back to how they used to be
Id do anything for you to come straight back to me

What did i do wrong for me to lose you
I dont think you know what your putting me through
Id do anything for you just to get you back
without you my mind is just gunna crack
I love you and i need you
Please take me back and stop what your putting me through

I miss the way you used to hold my hand every where we went
You dont relise how special that really meant
I miss the way you used to look into my eyes
And the way i used to rest my hand on your thigh
I miss the way we used to hold each other
The way we used to love one another

What did i do wrong for me to lose you
I dont think you know what your putting me through
id do anything for you just to get you back
Without you my mind is just gunna crack
I love you and i need you
please take me back and stop what you putting me through

How can you just move onto another boy
Its almost like you used me, just like a toy
You told me you loved me and that you needed me
How could you just end it and leave me free
You told me you never wanted to lose me
Some how i cant say i would agree

What did i do wrong for me to lose you
I dont think you know what your putting me through
Id do anything for you just to get you back
Without you my mind is just gunna crack
I love you and i need you
Please take me back and stop what your putting me through