Now Lyrics Critique- Pop/reggae

by Mabel :)
(South Carolina)

hey yall! I've been writing songs since 4ever and I just wanted to kno if this one was any good...it was the first one that I EVER wrote when I was like 8 sooooo...yeah theyve gotten better trust me!

VERSE 1:
I'm sitting here on the front porch
Bundled up and I can't ignore
That beautiful look on your face
I'm wondering if you noticed
That every time you come close I
I just go insane

PRECHORUS:
Oh you make me wanna say
Oh I'm gonna tell you today

CHORUS:
Hey you sitting there
Have you ever stopped and stared
Out into the world
Or look at this here girl
Hey you looking to fine
Have you ever taken the time
To wonder about me and you
And now its your turn 2

VERSE 2:
I'm walking down the hallway
13 years old and so I've been told you
Have found yourself a girl
I'm hurting inside
But I never stopped and cried
Cuz then I'd go insane
But Im still wondering

CHORUS

BRIDGE:
I'm sorry yall are done
But every door closed
Opens another one
I've been waiting alone
For you to notice me
And for you to say

"Hey you sitting there
Have you ever stopped and stared
Out into the world
I did then I layed my eyes on you girl"

CHORUS

I hope yall enjoyed it! Like I said, i wrote it when I was 8 I think so it's not the best but I hope yall still liked it!

-MABEL-
email me @

wizard1231@hotmail.com

THANK YOU :)