No title yet, this is kind of a rock song

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No title yet, this is kind of a rock song

Kind of a mellow rock song. Let me know what you think.

Verse:

You come around here
start to take away my glory
but the tables turn and then we have
another story

Stand and criticize, the morals I say
I live by
Point your finger as if
I should have to tell you why

Chorus

It was once unknown, but now I know,
just where I'm goin
you call my bluff, and realize
your cards are showin
Now if you don't mind, Im gonna go
do what I do best
Just ease my mind, lay my worries to rest

Verse

You come around here and tell me
how to spend my free time
when the smoke clears I can't help
if i'm feelin so fine
who are you to judge
we all see that your fingers ain't clean
you've been around, I'm sure you ain't
seen what I've seen

Chorus

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No title yet, this is kind of a rock song

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Nov 05, 2008
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Love it :D
by: Sweetie

Muah it's a very nice song and I'm loving everything about it:)

Nov 10, 2008
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:D
by: kellers(:

i lovedd it! :D haha. veryy nice job. and if youre having troubles with a title, just pick out a small line or what not.. like "when the smoke clears" is one that stood out to me. :D good job.

Nov 21, 2008
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Nice work Mate!!!
by: Jake

Very good, reminds me of Guns N' Roses lyrics a bit. Good use of words and rhymes, I like the sophisticated sound of it! Check out my song, "Time" and see what you think.

May 09, 2009
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Good work!
by: Anonymous

This is realy good! Don't worry, I'm sure a title will come to oyu. Just let it alone for awhile and then come back 2 it, just let it come to u. I find that helps

Sep 04, 2009
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awesome
by: Mike

i loved it, i wish i could write lyrics, im thinking i might give it a try on here at some point lol if your thinking of a title you should call it my bluff or something

Nov 30, 2009
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nice job. keep it up!
by: Akilina Merel Koralie

i like the sound of the lyrics. it is very catchy, right now i can only imagine what the music will be like but if you get good music to go with it, then it will have people having problems getting that song out of their heads.

Try to make it just a little longer. like one or two more verses should make it about 3 minutes worth. unless, if there is going to be music, you put in an instrumental part where someone jams with the guitar or something. cause these lyrics sound like what would be in a fast rock song.

as for the title issue.... it should be your very idea and i cant see the main point of the song (which is one thing you should work on) to me it is talking about someone that irritates you but
the title should be like a simple, catchy summary of the song in only about, one to four words.
you can use a couple of words from your chorus, or maybe you can use as a title, what first inspirated your idea for this song.
again, it must relate to the song.
if it is as i guessed, about someone the really vexes you then the title shouldnt be something like "free time"

thats all i am saying.

Mar 01, 2010
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hey
by: Kayla

i agree it should be a little longer but otherwise it is really good. just pick a line that really sums up what the song is about. that should help with the title.

Mar 16, 2010
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Awesome!
by: Anonymous

These are awesome lyrics...i wrote a riff a couple weeks ago that would work perfectly with this. i dont know why im telling you this because if i used it that would be plagiarism. anyway, i love it!

Mar 23, 2010
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Rough
by: Chris

please dont go
because the road i walk
is the road to no-where

if i could give you a rose
it would wither and die
if i could give you the world
it wouldnt be enough

so please dont go
just stay with me
ill be the one you need
just stay with me because your the air that i breathe

if i could give you a rose
it would wither and die
if i could give you the world
it wouldnt be enough

Jun 17, 2010
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:)
by: Kayla

I loved it!! I liked the line tables turned or something like that for the title.

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