*No Title Yet* Lyrics Critique-Pop/Rock?

by Kimberly D.
(Weaverville, CA)

This is a song that I wrote a long time ago about my biological father who has never been there. It doesnt have a title yet but I really want some comments on it and my other songs on this site too. Please dont be afraid to be harsh.


I should know
why you keep coming back
but i keep fooling myself
thinking that youll change
why can i not realizewhat i really have
i need to forget you
whoa (2x) yea yea
you tell me you love me
but only when you need something
well ima tell you something
but its never gonna be that
eo-ya-ya

Chorus:
Daughter to Father
you tell me you love me
daughter to father
i dont really care
so fuck off and step back
realize what your doing
so fuck off and step back
realize you have a daughter

Tell me why
tell me what your doing
tearing my family
were like this and then that
all because you wanted
a cow on your arm
oh yea yea

(Chorus)

You wanted her
now you got it
but at what cost
i miss my sister
i hate you
whoa (2x)
but its never gonna come true
with a cow on your arm

(Chorus)

I should know
why you keep coming back