No Title - Lyrics Critique

by lola

I dont have a title- this is my first song i hope people can help me improve please give me feedback and comments to help me improve (:

when i was just a little girl
a helpless person in the world
one day i sat down all alone
someone came up to me
they told me that i could be free
all i had to do was believe
then i would never be alone
all i'd gotta to was open my mind
and listen, listen in time

listen to the music inside
let it open your mind
it's gonna take control
let it inside your soul
just feel it flow
and soon you'll ambitions

because music is loud
and it rocks in and out
when music is near
we all dance with no fear
you aren't alone
all you gotta do
is look inside your mind

it's not to good probably not even a real song but please comment and help me (: