My "Michelle Song" lyrics critique

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My "Michelle Song" lyrics critique

by Charlie
(BSB)

Hey again, this song is very important to me, I need it to be perfect. For the girl I love. I mean truly love. I gotta show her, and this song might do it. Sorry for using this an advice column instead. I've only got the verse so far. The theme is to really make her believe I truly love her.

Your name rhymes with everything blissful
That’s why I don’t worry but I breathe
You took me by storm I was incapable
Now I know why I’m supposed to live
Cause it’s you, cause it’s you, cause it’s you
Michelle

You showed me strength when walls are falling down
You shared those tear, gave me will and precious trust
We found our peace through the secrets of sound
And we’ll create the song that created us
Cause it’s you, cause it’s you, cause it’s you

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My "Michelle Song" lyrics critique

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Dec 23, 2008
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hi
by: Sweetie

I am s girl and after I read what u wrote it made me feel so proud. It's a really good song and I think u can send that to her becuz you have said what you really feel about her, and I think that's what matters.. Very nice job:)

Dec 24, 2008
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Flow
by: Chevelle

The verses are very nice lyrically but lack flow. I found myself stopping in various places to figure out where you were headed. Try taking out unnecessary words or adding in some to make each line of the verse the same number of syllables.

As for the chorus, think of a phrase that you most often associated with the love you share with this girl, or something that you say very often to her. I'm sure you say "I love you" a lot, but what else do you say that would make a good chorus?

Apr 28, 2009
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gr8
by: Anonymous

love it u should show it 2 her itll make her feel loved n dats wot every girl needs

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