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My Best Friend Lyrics Critique- Slow Pop Song

by L
(SC, USA)

My Best Friend ( need help thinking of a title)

Verse 1:
You treated me wrong
you used me up, like a tissue
you kept me in the dark
i had some issues...

(bridge)
i needed your help but you weren't there for me
I needed you by my side eternally

(chorus)
you thought i could never fall...
thought i could never break....
you thought all of those words would just fade away
I need you
where are you?
Come back to me.... (come back to me)
We were always meant to be Best Friends For Life

Verse 2:
I thought you were my best friend
stay together until the end
You were the one who would
Laugh with me, cry with me, talk with me till we fall asleep

(bridge)
(chorus)

Verse 3: Sung faster and with more feeling
You just left me hanging in the dark
You took me for granted and used my heart
I thought you were different...
I thought were my friend...

(chorus)

I need my best friend....

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My Best Friend Lyrics Critique- Slow Pop Song

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Nov 21, 2008
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starstarstarstarstar 		:)
by: kelsey(:

fade away or hanging in the dark would be catchy titles. i loved it. (: very nice job.
Nov 24, 2008
Rating
starstarstarstarstar 		Coolll!
by: Anonymous

WOOW!! ITS AWESOME!
Nov 25, 2008
Rating
starstarstarstarstar 		Good
by: Jake

Good, and you really grab people's hearts with the last line, which is a must in any good song! Check out my song, "Time" and tell me what you think!!!
Dec 07, 2008
Rating
starstarstarstarstar 		good job
by: Anonymous

thanks for your comment for my lyric it ends tonight. your lyric is well written and it's the best best friends song i have read.
Feb 21, 2009
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starstarstarstarstar 		Wow.
by: Anonymous

You really tugg on hearts with this.
How about 'I needed you' for the name?
Comment either 'What happened' or 'tell me'
for me please.
x
Apr 09, 2009
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starstarstarstarstar 		SUPER JOB
by: NATHANIEL ORTIZ

WOW YOUR SONG IS AMAZING I LUV IT
Apr 26, 2009
Rating
starstarstarstarstar 		awesome
by: Anonymous

Those are awesome lyrics. This title is probably terrible, but maybe you could call it "Where's My Best Friend?" Comment my songs please.
Apr 28, 2009
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starstarstarstarstar 		fantastic job
by: nathaniel ortiz

wow i really love your song,ur really good at writing songs
Jun 18, 2009
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starstarstarstarstar 		use it
by: hollywood the band

could i use it for my band
Jun 19, 2009
Rating
starstarstarstarstar 		Sorry.
by: Anonymous

No, Sorry. You can't use it for your band.
Dec 13, 2009
Rating
starstarstarstar 		Power
by: Jeff

I could hear the power ballad coming out especially in the last verse where you speed it up.

I'm a big power ballad fan so I liked it. Would love to hear it to music

Jeff
Apr 07, 2010
Rating
star 		This is not a song that anyone would sing.
by: Amanda

For starters - it has 2 different messages I hate you, I love you. I needed you. You disappointed me.

The title is great, so if you sat down and made a laundry list about your REAL best friend - then you could write a genuine song. Don't write a song about someone who used you, because it makes you sound like a masochistic dope. "You used me but I want you anyway."

A real relationship doesn't end in THAT song.

A fantasy relationship that didn't work out is not worth singing about.

Make a list of friends who loved you back and write songs about them! Okay?

And put some effort into the song.
Apr 24, 2010
Rating
starstar 		good place to start, just work on it
by: Akilina

its a nice start. in my opinion it has some potential, its up to you to bring it out or not.
first ask your self this:

who/what are you singing this song for?

this looks to me like its directed at this "best friend" so wat feelings are supposed to be felt?
thats the biggest prob with the song, its confusing. is it supposed to be about betrayal? or maybe the friend betrayed and you dont believe that it was the same person you knew so you want the old them back. decide on ONE thing you want to tell.
its best if its something everyone can relate to.

the title is simple and rememberable (which is good)
but you can change it later if you want

also, dont MAKE words fit. if it doesnt work, it DOESNT work. do wats in the best interest of the song, youll see, even songs can have a mind in their own way.

you should also try listening to songs and focus on the goods. like, your fave songs, why do like them?

this is a slow song right? although this is supposed to be "pop" it might fit into a different style better. like one person did comment on here that one verse was like a sped up part of a ballad. try experimenting with different things. there is a different formula for different songs.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3EKzeBWx86w
the URL i put up is a clip (from anime) with a ballad (short version with subbs)
if you want you can listen to it.
i think it clearly gave off the feelings ment to be given.

with work you can make awesome lyrics that blows everyone away then all you need is music and your set!
good luck and thank you for listening to my rambling

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