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Lyrics Critique - Slow christian worship song

Hey guys this is my first attempt at writing a song... so yeah I am gonna make a lot of mistakes, so please dont be like oh you dumb you shouldnt have done that or idiot you shouldnt have done this blah blah blah.. constructive criticisms are however welcome.. I wrote the verse and the prechours... but only a little bit of the chorus coz i got stuck.. lol I havent thought of a title, so yeah maybe help out a bit with that too,
And also do you guys think i need a 2nd verse? coz I kind of hate those songs with only verse... Thanx.
and Like i said im new at this song writng thing! so please help me out brothers and sisters!

Love you all tons
Adam
----------------Song below-----------------------


When I look back at my life
So filled with misery and strife
I can't help but burst into tears
Wish someone was there to wash away my fears


When I look at this crazy world
Lying, betrayal, guns and swords
Into the hopelessness I stare
Wondering why nobody seems to care


PreChorus

Yes, life is unfair, life is mean
Makes me want to cry, want to scream
But don't fret, there is still hope
The one life saving rope:


Chorus

Jesus, our saviour and only hope
Even in the times when life is the hardest to cope




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Lyrics Critique - Slow christian worship song

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Oct 09, 2008
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nice
by: Anonymous

hey your good so keep on trying.Let no person get to you keep trying.
sister in Christ,
Arden

Nov 25, 2008
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Love the bridge!
by: Jake

The thing that I like most about this song is the bridge, it just captivates! Keep going, this is good. Check out my song, "Time" and tell me what you think!

Apr 24, 2009
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Hey
by: Chase A.J.

This is awesome.I play in a christian band and i was wondering if i could use this song email me at kevin_mills10@yahoo.com

Jul 10, 2009
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cool
by: Anonymous

i have a hard time writing worship songs...this ones pretty good:) pretty cool too.

i dont kno how i could help you, but check back over your lyrics in a few days, and something might click..and keep listening to other songs! they give inspiration:)

Aug 19, 2009
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Just needs to be longer
by: Lonnie

I like it,love the message, well writen I just think you need to speand some time on it and finsh it and it would be an awsome song. keep writing

Dec 09, 2009
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nice!
by: Anonymous

its good so far just keep going on...God will put something in your mind and itll be even BETTER! u rock!

Dec 10, 2009
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tag
by: rose

the tag is my absolute favorite part! it brings the whole song together. keep up the good work.

Jan 14, 2011
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=)
by: hadassah

it's awesome! check out my song with you (christian song)

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