Everyday Matters Lyric Critique country 
Would love some feedback on my lyric and would love someone to do the music as well.

Everyday Matters
© 2010 Cindy Prince

I’m frying eggs, making ...

I'll wait 4 u - Lyrics Critique 
I’ll wait 4-u a Million
years just to hear you say
I love you Dear, and
you will always be right here with
love and care. through the years....

I'...

A Legend Carries On - Country Song- Lyrics Critique 
AUDIO (Acoustic)
http://soundcloud.com/tim-horne/vn620059

A LEGEND CARRIES ON, original by Tim Horne (LYRICS)

I will always remember, how we use ...

Need your thoughts for some words/phrasing - Country ballad 
Working on a song, and need your thoughts on some of the words/phrasing I'm debating on. Where you see the ( ) its the 2 words/phrase I'm debating on. Let ...

"Matthew" Lyrics Critique - Bluegrass 
Matthew
©2011 Wayne Webb

Sweeter than the whippoorwill
A happy little tune
Echos through the green hills
On summer afternoons
He plays it for the ...

Somewhere In South Caroline - lyrics critique 
This is an uptempo funk song and yes the title is misspelled on purpose its pronounced care-oh-line. Id really like feedback on this one so fire away....

Standing Up For Myself Critique - pop song 
Verse:
Words they can't even explain
Everything you've caused me
All the pain
Try to hide all the hurt
Try to cover every wound
But I'm slippin ...

Battle me 4 part 2 by James Cook - lyrics critique 
The hustlers Dream, Battle me 4 scheem too make the cream, Pockets full of green when I walk I lean in Gucci Jeans ya shorty need to play for my team....
Battle ...

Apparition lyrics critique- Acoustic Metal 
Tell me what you think

Verse 1
I open up my eyes
I see the world in a whole new way
I'm crying deep inside
It's a brand new day and the skys are ...

Beth Lyrics Critique - Light Rock 
Hey, just to start off, I apoligize if the spelling is awful, i've never been good at that. Just alittle bit of background, i wrote this right after my ...

December Dandelions- Alternative - Lyrics Critique 
December has dandilions
They fall in the sky from anchored clouds
I'll hear the sirens calling
Everytime they come around

Feel the adrenaline crawling
...

If I Talk In My Sleep...Blues Duet - Lyrics Critique  
This song is based on real conversations between my friends and I as they helped me through a break up. I appreciate all feed back!

Male Verse 1

Im ...

You're Ok Tonight Lyrics Critique- No particular genre, just with an acoustic 
the tempo is around 76.
This is a duet, so when the female is only singing I will put a F by the line, when a male is singing i will put a M and when ...

"No More Tomorrows Critique - Country Song" 
Be extremely honest


Verse 1:

I took some chances,
and i didnt do, some of the stuff
that i needed to
now im wishing for
one more chance with ...

Alone Lyrics Critique - pop ballad 
Can you hear me
the young girl cries
these drops
are the tears from her eyes

how can I call this my home
in a world where I'm all alone
trapped ...

hadassah lyrics critique - (pop song) God's Hands (christian song) 
I am a 13-year-old missionary kid on furlough in the U.S. We head back to Senegal, West Africa in a couple weeks. Packing is always hectic!! There ...

Why you give hope to me...? Lyric Critique - DEEPAK SHARMA (Deep Modgill) 
When everybody drop me
why you give hope to me
when i think to die
why you tell me a sweet lie
it's the last fight
between the death & life
let'...

LOVE GUARD - Lyrics Critique 
Love Guard
©dave koehne 2011 (Allegro - open to recommendations)


That fateful night I didn’t expect
Leaned on the rail to catch your glimpse
...

with you (christian worship song) - lyrics discussion 
i am 13 years old (my birthday was last week) and i like to write praise songs. my dad picks out the chords for my songs on his guitar and a worship leader ...

Can I make a difference? Lyrics Discussion 
Okay, so I know that I am far from done but here is the first verse and the chorus. I really want feedback on this!!! I have written songs since I was ...

Starry Nights Lyrics Critique - Acoustic (Not sure what genre it is...?) 
Verse 1: I am sick of staring at stars
Trying to heal scars
We all know, it’s more than just skin deep
Trace patterns in the sky
With our eyes
And ...

The Glory Of My Life - Lyrics Critique 
Genre: Pop, Contemporary, Christian
Tempo: Slow Ballad

The Glory Of My Life
Music & Lyric by Salvatore Liggieri (BMI)

(Intro)
Glory! Glory!
To ...

Summer Rains Lyrics Critique - Alternative Rock Song- "fairly" slow tempo  
Summer Rains, Winter blames
I got you, you got me
Raindrops that fall from outer space
Will crack the earth and scar your face
Shes got some kind of ...

Everytime. Pop Song. Lyrics Review 
This is a really rough draft, it's just my first thoughts, but when I tried improving it, I froze up on ideas. Please help if you have ideas.

Walking ...

Strength To Carry On - Progressive/Rock - Lyrics Critique 
Alrighty, I'm 16 and I love writing songs and lyrics and want to know how i stack up. These are gonna go with a progressive-rock type of song....not the ...

I'm Not Supposed To Be Lonely When I'm With You - Lyric Critique 
[Intro: Woman-only ad lib?man returns home to find woman packing. He questions and she states that she has talked to him time and time again but he has ...

Carry this Burden lyrics critique - Folk 
I'd love a review of these.

If you want to hear the song, check out http://www.reverbnation.com/play_now/song_6297053


the circles of a vulture
...

Your Dying Heart Lyrics Critique - rock/pop song 
I here you crying in the dark
I try to help
But were so fare apart
Were could I start

Around the bend - here we go
Like a shooting star
Of ...

Out there - Lyrics Critique 

Out there By charlie in alabama

1st verse male voice

Some where/
Out there/
There is / some one waiting just for me ...

Who She is - Lyrics Critique 


Who she is by Charlie in alabama

My wife worked at a nursing home / after graduating school /
I dropped by to meet her for lunch / I thought it ...

The Last Stand lyrics critique (rock) 
this is the last stand
I can't take no more
trying to take you by the hand
as you close the door
this is the last stand
you used me way to long
you ...

KYLE, Lyrics Critique.. (genre) Hip hop/blues 
IM SO LOST.

Im so lost,
im so tired of remoulding my life,
so i drink and i smoke to feel like,
nothings hurting me,
even though nothings hurting ...

Making Love To An Empty Heart Lyrics Critique- Pop song 
You try to hide,but your tears wont let you go.
Try to understand-I dont want to let you know.
Its not quite the real thing,but its fine for what you ...

Janmarie Lyrics Critique -- Country Song "Leave" 
One of many songs I've written. "Leave" to be song by a male singer, soft country flavor with build up to chorus. Melody came with lyrics as I sat down ...

Hazel Eyes Lyrics Critique -Pop Country 
I was just a small town girl, Had a life of ups and downs
Wastin’ time hoping for everything that can’t come true
Yes I’ve imagined standing there, On ...

Who he Is country lyric by charlie from alabama 
Who he Is

My wife worked in a Nursing Home/
A RN just out of school /
I stopped by to have lunch with her /
I thought it would be cool /
I waited ...

Back to Reality Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
I know it's kinda long, but I hear it's good... so tell me watcha think :)


Back to Reality

Everything was perfect
Everything was how it should ...

The Typical Teenager Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
* Of all the songs I've wrote, this one hit me the most. This song is about people (esp. teenagers) who think they've got nothin' at all and later declare ...

It's All About A Cross - Lyrics Critique 
http://apps.facebook.com/ilike/artist/Tim+Horne



It's not about the fortune or the fame
It's not about the weather when it rains
It's all about ...

Geogia Bailey - As One Door Opens Another Is Close - Lyrics Critique 
VERSE 1
HERE I AM,LOOKING AT THE STARS.
WONDERIN HOW FAR THEY ARE,
AND HOW HIGH DO THEY SOAR.
HERE I AM, WATCHING THE RAIN.
AS IT DRIPS DOWN THE PAIN,...

Eyes Wide Open (One of the first sings I wrote) - Lyrics Critique  
This is one of the first songs I ever wrote, so It's not the best, but I'm still looking for any kind of suggestions. The beat is kinda medium. It is a ...

Life Board - Lyrics Critique  
Verse 1
I Want Love You Only Hurt,
The Fire Round My Heart Still Burns,
My Times Of Weakness Are Your Strongest Hours,
Your Words Are Razor Sharp ...

See you again Lyrics Critique- pop 
well i wrote this long ago, before knowing this website.. its my first ever written song n i know its not really good.. ! so tell me what you think about ...

Who Knew Lyrics Critique ( not my best, but we'll see what you think) 
This is just the beginnign of one of my songs. I figured I'd see how people like it before I put the whole thing on there yet. I'm new to this site, so ...

Garden of EVE - lyrics critique 
Hook)

Why did you leave? the garden of Eve,
your beauty must be for me, Sent
from the Heavens above, a prayer with love love....

(lyrics)

Your ...

fly away with me - lyrics critique 
We look away just for a moment
we stare as far as out eyes can see.

we dont know when, or where, or how,
this perfect love, it came to be.

fly ...

OMG lyrics critique - pop 
I don't like it a lot but I think it might have potential. If you have any advice please tell me!!!! I am still thinking of a title.

V1. Kissing, hugging,...

Lightning - Lyrics Critique 
One of my first ones. Hope you like it. :)

Lightning:

2AM and it rains outside,
The room is cold and dark,
Darker than the moonlight tonight.

And ...

The Fool's Shame- Pop - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1: Baby the love life or a western
Realize that there’s one way to find
That long dark light footed mind
In the deepest burnt hard infection
Conditions ...

Guitar - short version - lyrics critique 
With tired eyes he opens the door
And grabs his only consolation
Alot goes through his mind
As he seeks the right vibration

Inspiration he is missing
...

"I'd Never do that to you" Lyrics Critique - Alternative Rock Song 
This is the first song I've ever written....(so I don't mind if you don't like it). It's about a relationship where the girl messes up and the boyfriend ...

(no title yet - lyric critique 
Turn up your television
turn it up high
i dont want to hear them
i dont want to cry
sometimes it confusing
sometimes its bruising
Their using words
...

Mackenzie Lyrics Critique - Pop w/ piano, acoustic guitar. kinda fast beat. 
(Verse 1)
I see you and I have to know
What's you're name and where do you go
I send you a smile and
You look down and smile too

You got me wondering-...

"Something Changed" Lyrics Critique -- Alternative/Pop, Midtempo 
A little background... basically about a guy who runs into trouble with his girlfriend who doesn't stay true to herself, and gives him a hard time. He ...

Obama Save Me - Lyrics Feedback 


You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘ve been turned down more than a bed spread,
at the local Holiday Inn.
I see big ...

Lost Cause Lyrics Critique- R&B  
All i have so far is the chorus and the first verse. but i just wanted to know what you think and how could i improve it.

Chorus: Baby girl we're just ...

Gone Lyrics Critique -Country Music 
I am 10 yrs. old and love writing songs. I am working on a song right now and this is all I have so far. Please tell me if this is a good start, comment,...

"At Day's End" - Alt country/rock - looking for feedback/critique 
v1
As you lay down in your sleepy town
with sunflowers outside your window
they gently toll as the night winds blow
waiting for the morning to come
...

In Her Eyes Lyrics Critique- Alternative rock or Rock 
My friend wrote this song for our band. We don't have the music yet but that's a working progress. I'm the lead guitar and lead vocals and I was wondering ...

lost (lost without u) - lyric critique 
chorus
lost (lost without u)
lost (lost without u)
im lost
verse 1
being lost without u is like a battle ive just lost no one ther to love me the ...

Rowan's Lyrics Critique 
Hey, my lyrics are for alternative rock songs, it's upbeat, fun. So tell me honestly what you think.



The suns burning brightly but not for long....

New York Lullaby Lyrics Critique - Australia 
New York Lullaby is a true story that I was inspired to write after meeting "tommy", homeless since returning from the Vietnam war, in Washington Square ...

Better Off, Pop/Rock - Lyric Critique 
Hey, so right now with this song i've been playing it with an acoustic guitar. I've been detating speeding it up and turning it into more of a pop/rock ...

Stood With my Back to the Wind - Lyrics Critique 
I grew up a drifter
my eyes on the rainbow
with colors
that fade in the rain
dreams of the highway
that came to me nightly
I tried to resist
but ...

You and I - R&B, pop, anythin really - lyrics critique 
its called you and i, i hope u guys like it. im trying to see who might be intersted in making this a real song. i've contacted record producers etc.


chorus
...

When You Get There - lyrics critique 
Hi. I wrote this for my 8-year-old daughter, who is certain she will be among the first group of astronauts to travel to Mars. And you know what? I pretty ...

beautiful lyrics critique - rock 
some words unspoken
some things left undone
some feelings unexpressed
but you're so graceful
that i must say so

your eyes are hopeful
full of ...

Do you remember lyrics critique 
hey this is my first song so I hope ya all like it


Do you remember the first time we met
i didn't know you nor would i forget
I thought that i should ...

My Life, Rock, Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1
I've been here waiting
For someone to sweep me off my feet
I am depleading
I'm not quite sure what I need
Verse 2
I feel ...

I'd Do Anything (Lyric idea. Need help!!)  
This is a song I'm writing for my grandpa. A couple years ago, he almost died and so I'm writing a song about it. I've got one line for the first verse ...

We All Fall Down Lyrics Critique - Power Ballad? 
Wrote this a while back after going through some stuff. What do you think?


It's the strangest feeling,
like diving down
into emptiness.
Just to ...

Timeless Tragedy Lyrics Critique - Unfinished/Undecided genre 
Half the man he has to hide
Half of him is trapped inside
The shelter of dark hides him away
In this prison he must stay

When the day breaks, the ...

I'm Not Cinderella - acoustic - lyrics feedback 
i wrote this song for my music assignment and would like to know what people think before i submit it :)

Once upon a time,
when nursery rhymes seemed ...

Memories - Lyrics Critique 
I remember
When we were young
I remember
All the fun

Memories
Of u and me
Memories
Of just we

Playin round
All over town
Thought we were ...

Heros- Lyrics Critique- country- by Lonnie 
Here's a song I wrote about two family members. A lot of songs are just made up stories but this one is very real. The first verse is about my 12 year ...

Guitars That Won't Stay in Tune- Lryric critique -country -by Lonnie 
Let me know what you think. Be rough I can handle it. Thats the only way I can get better

Guitars That Won't Stay In Tune

You can bitch and gripe ...

BEST SERMON EVER SEEN Country lyrics by Charlie in Alabama 
Best Sermon Ever Seen

He never failed to give
When someone was in need
I’d seen him work with his bare hands
Until his hands would bleed
He was ...

Dissapointment lyrics critique 
ok well dis is actually a poem i wrote last year but someone said it myt make a good song. Not so sure so just wanting some feedback bout what u think ...

"What’s The Point" lyrics Pop/Country© 
This is the first song I ever wrote...Hope you guys like it. And tell me what you think
*p.s please be honest....Thank you :)

What's The Point

Verse ...

Why the Ghetto cry's tonight? - Lyrics Critique 
Hook) R&B / Rap Spoken word)



Can u tell me why

The Ghetto cry’s tonight?



She’s been through so

Much heart ache and pain

She’...

Let me be the one - Lyrics Critique 
Let me look into your eyes
Let me give you a new brand life
let me take away all your
pain

Let me be your Shelter
through Rain

Let me be your ...

Table for Two Lyrics Critique - Country ballad mid tempo 
V1:
I sat down alone at a table for one
That should have been a table for two
I saw a couple in love acting like fools
The way that we used to do

I ...

Relax lyric critique Charlie in Alabama 
Relax

Red bull wakes him up
Red lights make him crazy
A double shot of espresso
In a Styrofoam cup
Adderall takes off the edge
He‘s walking too ...

Summer Romances - Acoustic - Lyrics Critique 
Summer Romances

I thought this summer would never pass
But then came fall so quick and fast
And you were just as quick to leave
As if you already ...

You And I lyrics critique- hard rock 
06/23/11

You and I Music and lyrics by Nicholas Bailey
Rune

Verse 1
I gaze into an angels eyes in the ashes of the flame
As she realizes ...

Devil Girl Lyrics Critique, Pop/Metal 
I'm still not 100% sure about this song so any input will help.

Verse 1
You look at me that way I know what you think
I've been a Bad bad boy, I deserve ...

Worst of Me Lyrics Critique- Metal 
Just wanting to know if the lyrics are easy to follow. Can you relate to what they say? Do they grab your attention?

Worst of Me By Nick

Its easy ...

The Truth - Lyric critique- country song 
THE TRUTH

i saw a man, i saw him die
the tears didn't quite fall from his eyes
and he said, "i die everyday,
so it's really not anything to worry ...

a love that was real (not final title) - lyric critique 
you fill your mind
with things back from summertime
when you were together
just tryin to succeed...

and you know its just as easy
to run back to ...

Sleepin' Drunk In Yesterday's Clothes - lyrics critique- country song 
Any general or specific suggestions would be welcome, for example- do I use the apostrophe instead of a "g" in word endings (sleepin') too much? I tried ...

Superstar Lyrics Critique- Pop 
Okay this song has a upbeat sound to it, but think Britney Spears could possibly sing this but just tell me what you think. Thanks so much!

Have you ...

I Forgot to Say I Love You - Pop Ballad - Lyrics Critique 
Wait, Just give me one more chance
This might be a surprise, so hold on with both hands
Your eyes shine bright, more than all the stars in the sky
and ...

face the sun again- lyrics critique 
Always wanna do the right thing
Don’t wanna be a mess
My heart is only thinking
And my brain is always wrecked

My ...

Love's Rhythm Lyric Critique 
Verse 1: He apologized that night
Begged for my forgiveness
When he looked at me
With those eyes
How could I say anything but
Yes, how could I say ...

IT'S ALL ABOUT A CROSS - Christian Song - Lyrics Critique 


IT'S ALL ABOUT A CROSS

It's not about the fortune or the fame
It's not about the weather when it rains
IT'S ALL ABOUT A CROSS
for the sinner ...

Stand up Lyrics Critique- Pop 
Look at me and what do you see?
A dumb blond babe, but there’s more to me.
Baby can’t you see, what I’m out to be,
More than you make me seem.

With ...

Luck Lyrics Critique- Acoustic Song 
This is one of the first songs I've ever written. I'm not quite sure yet if I am satisfied with the lyrics of the song or not. Any advice or critiques ...

The Sun Sets In Your Eyes - Lyrics Critique 
I Wrote This Randomly Hope You Like It :) x

Verse
It Was A Sunny Sunday Afternoon,
You Started Humming My Favourite Tune,
On A Bench Beneath The ...

I'm Just Me - Country - Lyrics Critique 
Let me know what you think. I'm open for opinions.

I’m Just Me

You’re the star of your hometown’s football team
And I’m, I’m just me
She’s on every ...

Rain Pours Down (I Wonder Why) - Lyrics Critique 
I Wrote This Song On A Rainy Day (: It's About Someone Leaving Your Life And You Feel Miserable But Your Trying To Find Good Things, Things To Smile About....

I can hear you calling Country Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this after working with a client who had failed recovery three times. The lyric speaks to the relationship an addict has with their drug..


I ...

Waiting To Shine - Country - Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this song about a year ago and the meaning is pretty clear in the lyrics...

Waiting to Shine

You sit at home
On your couch
Breathing in
...

Why Can't I be? - Country - Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this song about a guy in my algebra class last year. I'm over him now but still... it helped me write a song. Let me know what you think!!! :)

Why ...

Broken heart for free (Guitar,drums,keyboard. It's kinda fast) 
Well, it's often girls who do "everything" for there boyfriends,and stuff like that.
My sister was like that,so i got inspiration from that. The boy broke ...

Fake Smile Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this about a girl that I really like, it is about my feelings that I kept to myself about her and her boyfriend. I actually wrote this in real ...

Time Wasted Lyrics Critique 
Chorus
I don't know why I waste my time
Cause I'll never change your mind
Even though I was always there
You never cared

Verse 1
I've wasted all ...

Bumpy ride (slow pop) - lyrics critique 
only 13 don't trash please


Every open mind
has a closed door waiting behind
is the world ready for you
and are you ready too?
going into the ...

Marc "?" Lyrics Critique 
It is not completely finished, I am working on a bridge, but this it what I have so far. I don't have a name for this yet, I could use a little help. As ...

her romeo (pop/country) -lyrics critique 
thsi is a recent song but please keep in mind that i am only thirteen so you can critizise but don't be to harsh....

Its an age old story
filled with ...

what girls do (country/pop) - lyrics critique 
i am 13 and i wrote this in like 5 mins so it might be bad... don't be to harsh


I'm gonna use my hair brush as a microphone
dance aroung my room ...

"Why do you hang up? Lyrics Critique- R & B Song" 
Hey guys hw do u feel this one.
Pliz focus on the foll areas:
1.Message.
2.Can you feel the emotions in the song.
3.Use of language.
4.Structure ...

Lovers Pop R&B soft rock - lyrics critique 
lovers
I know that i, I know that we, and could we be lovers,
How could their be any other lover.......

I know that i, I know that we, and could ...

He's all you need -lyrics-christian 
V1 He spoke the stars into place in the sky
He healed the lepers, and heard the blind mans cry
he took time for the children
and set them onHis knee
...

"What If" Lyrics Critique- Acoustic song 
You always told me not to waste my time on you
For some reason I didn’t listen
I fell for you so easily
How could I be so blind

Every time I was ...

waiting lyrics critique 
green’s only emerald
after the rain
numb’s only comfort
after the pain

fire’s only warmth
after we’re cold
we only feel young
after we’re old
...

Someday Never Turns Today Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
Someday Never Turns Today

Verse 1 (A)
A head full of plans and a heart full of dreams
A one way ticket and she’s on her way
Sweet child of sorrow ...

I Will Be Me - Pop Song - Lyrics Feedback 
You said "Don't even try
You've lost your mind
Things will change
For the worst
It's gonna hurt
And you'll never be the same
When you fall and hit ...

"Someday lyrics"- Slow pop song  
this is my first song and i wanted to see how you liked it! Please be honest even if it's harsh!

(Chorus)

Verse 1:
Someday,
i won't feel this pain....

Sunshine - lyrics Critique 
Im sick of all these cloudy skies,
Hope tomorrow brings a sunrise
Cause I miss seeing my sunshine
Oh my sunshine where did you go

When we talk my ...

You could have been the one- country style - lyrics critique 
Did you think before you did it?
What would happen to my heart?
That It would shatter into pieces
And I’d be back at the start

Last night while ...

The Final Scene And The Air We Breathe Lyrics Critique - Acoustic/Alternative 
And are you always this serious? (Tell me now)
And are you always this delirious? (Tell me now)
Cause I've been blaming myself more then you know
How ...

"Tim's Song" Lyrics Critique-Country 
The suicide of my cousin inspired this song. A little depressing and kinda long I know but I had to get it out. Let me know what you think.



You ...

so many fears - lyrics critique - rap 
hey i wrote this rap based on the soldiers in the war, I'm a beginner so ill take positive and negative comments all on board. cheers.


on your chest ...

Breathe- Lyrics Critique-  
So this is the first song that i have written. i still feel like i should work on it .
this is has like a slow/spacey acoustic sound lol . tell me what ...

Through with you- adult alternative- lyrics critique 
(1st verse)
You have to be the one to tell me
About all the things i didn't know
What are the answers to my questions
Tell me the direction I should ...

Title: Unknown Lyrics Feedback/critque-Alternative rock 
another song wriiten by my friend Wade Patry. He has been on a writing storm latley, anyway just wondering what other people thought about this song. It'...

"My Life So Far - Pop/Punk" - Lyric Critique 
This is the story of my life
I gotta worn you it is a fight
But there are still a lot of challenges ahead
I couldn?t make it without my true friends
...

Breaking The Silence lyrics critique- pop punk/emo 
V1: On the warm nights, when we felt that way

All the cold sweats, that we had that day

On the drive home, that we just could not explain

To the ...

Nerds of the World Lyrics Critique 
Girls we all go for the same type of guy
the jocks the rockstars
the dreamy eyes
well i say it's time for a change
soooooo

Heres to the nerds the ...

Tired - Lyrics Critique 
okay this one is not a typical song it doesnt really have a structure but it means alot...

Tired

My eyes are open under these sheets,
My body feels ...

Im So Sorry Lyrics Critique-Kate Carlon(Please dont steal)-Pop/Rock 
Verse 1:
I've Written them down a time or two,
But I just cant find the words to say to you,
I'm sorry things ended the way they did,
But don blame ...

Nora Lyrics critique- Soul 
I am a total beginner so feel free to rip me to shreds.I know this needs a ton of work


"The easy target"

Rueful looks, I never seem to forget
The ...

Untitled Lyrics Critique - Goth/Rock 
Written a while ago, always liked it. Needs Improvement, What do you think?

I feel your eyes burning through my skin
I feel your breath on the wind
...

Saying Goobye - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1:
So there we were sitting by the bay.
Thinking about what we had to say.
saying goodbye was my foremost regret.
by myself watching the sun ...

EDITED I never thought that love could be - lyrics critique 
I never thought that Love could be
by james Cook
(Vietnam)

I never thought that love could
be 4 me I never thought love
i never thought that ...

Gota - Lyrics Critique 
Songwriter poet

By James Cook

Title Gota,

jaycook2001@hotmail.com

Gota make it, Gota Hammer, Gota take it, gota face it, to many years wasted ...

Heart for Sale - Lyrics Critique - POP 
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Heart for Sale

(Verse 1)
Heart for sale I don't need it
All those women they just bleed it
I feel so sad ...

The blocks be talking - lyrics critique 
The blocks be talking

Dead man walking

Body shaking, 25 life facing, in my Cell

pasoning In hell debating, Like I'm making deals with

Satan ...

She's My Intercity Girl - Lyrics Critique 
She's my Intercity Girl....

(Lyric)
She's my Urban live,
She's My city lights, She's My Hood love,
She's the first one I'm thinking of,
She's ...

In the House of Love - lyrics critique 
In the House of Love

Is there a Place for me

In the house of love.....


Could you Welcome me into the house of love
And forever it will ...

War on Faith - Christian Rock/Alternative - Lyrics Critique 
Zoned in on what you think is true
Afraid to look at what is askew
Despite the world that’s bending around you
The time for change is long overdue

We ...

angel in my eyes, lyric critique- country 
"angel in my eyes"

i was a young man from a small country town
living out on my own
and you came along in the blink of an eye
...

The Punk & The Gentleman - Lyrics Critique --- GENRE - Punk 
If I don’t say it then I can’t spray it,
Like a multi coloured riot of graffiti on the wall,
You act like your doing something when you’re full of nothing,...

What Happens in Vegas (Pop, upbeat) - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1
They say what happens in Vegas
stays in Vegas
but I got a secret
no way I'm keeping it

got my girls with me
and we party V I P
you caught ...

Can't hurry love- Lyrics critique- Rock song - 
Simple song..I apologize for any english mistakes!!(I'm brazilian)..don't need to lie to please..the truth will help me get better!!tks

Can't hurry ...

"I Thought Love" - Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight
All Rights Reserved

Title: I Thought Love

I thought love was playing silly games
When we sat beneath that ...

life it self lyrics critique 
I Love u more than (life it self)

I'LL give u all my Riches and wealth.......

I'll go through Heaven and hell

do hard time in Jail just to ...

Heaven Must be yours tonight By James Cook (lyrics critique) 
(Hook)

Heaven Must Be Yours Tonight
wake Up somewhere in Paradise

Heaven Must Be yours tonight
wake Up somewhere in Paradise.....

(Corus)...

Change Lyrics Critique - Acoustic Song 
I wanted to write a song based on something that just happened to me. But i want people to enjoy and relate to it, not feel sick from its lameness. Unfortunately ...

Evolution Lyrics Critique- Christian Alternative Song 
Thanks in advance for taking a look at my song. Your opinion is very much appreciated! If you want to hear a demo of this song I recorded on GarageBand,...

"Heres My Stance" Lyrics, Critique, Rap 
The tempo is average speed, and I do bend some words, and use pauses to rhyme. I ask you dont judge, me but judge the lyrical ability. I really want ...

"Believe In Us" Lyrics Critique - Rock or Alternative Genre 
I just want this song critiqued on every aspect as accurately and harshly as possible. I do not have a tempo or key in mind right now, so there is quite ...

I Gave It A Chance - Lyrics Discussion 
I saw you walking down the street beautiful as can be,

Then you turned around and smiled at me.

That was when I realised,

You're my dream come ...

Back To My Home Lyrics Critique 
First song I ever wrote, when I was 12... So don't expect it to be gold. :) It is a slower song with a simple rhythm and notes.

1- I saw you, in the ...

Looking Back - Country song, lyrics critique 
Being new to this, any suggestions on how to improve this song would be great, Thanks. Brutal honesty is appreciated.

Looking Back

Verse 1:
When ...

Dreaming With Opens Eyes Lyric Critique - Pop song 
(verse 1)
Hey stranger
Yeah you, the one who broke my heart
See, no one told me I was in danger
Of my life completely falling apart
I'd usually never ...

Battle of Love lyrics Critique- R&B 
Here is me, Here is you smiling in the photograph
I just cry and feel pain as I go on thinking back
back to the time when we were one
but the photo ...

Break Myself Lyrics Critique- unsure of genre 
I am breaking
someone catch me
Someone need me
Someone love me

They said, "Jealousy will drive you mad"
Well, I am nearing that breaking point
Please,...

Perfect One For Me - slow country- Lyrics Critique 
This song is a slow country beat and i really want opinions on it... let me know :)
Perfect One For Me

When I hold you
I love the feelings inside ...

The Breakup Song - Lyrics Critique 

The Breakup Song By Charlie in Alabama

You said you were sorry / but it’s over/
You say that we have/ slowly grown apart/
You say I no longer / pay ...

My Hero is Always You Lyrics Critique - Pop/Country? 
This song is titled My Hero is Always You. Im dedicating this song to my Step-Dad. And If I ever get this song recorded I want it to be my Father Daughter ...

Ima Fight Lyrics Critique - Pop/Rock/Country Vibe?  
This song I just wrote recently. Its about when I was 5 and I was molested. But somehow it ended up kinda being about when I had cancer too. I really want ...

"Broken" by Robert Martin *Country* Critique???? Thank You!!! 
I know I sound just like a broken record, tellin' you I know we're meant to be,

After all this time, I know you think we're over, but I won't give up ...

"Payday" - Lyrics Critique - Rock Song 
This is a song ispired by, well, payday...

Please give me your honest opinion. I can take it.

It’s payday today and I couldn’t care less
It’s just ...

Driving Me Crazy - Lyrics Critique 
So I called you today to talk things out.
I'm, sick of playing all of these games.
You didn't answer your cell so it rang right through
and I started ...

Should of Lyrics Critique - Country 
You came home late again tonight and didnt even call
I asked what you were doing and you said it didnt matter at all.

I told you just be careful cause ...

Up and Down Lyrics Critique - Pop Country 
I know I said we’re over right there on the crowd,
That day that rain the tears we shed
But I need you to know, and I’m dying for you to know that my ...

Velvet Sky Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre. (Only 13, not that good) 
Whispering wind,
Dark city lights,
Walking the streets,
In black velvet night,

(Chorus)
When daylight closes its eyes,
The city comes alive,
We ...

broken past lyrics critique-rock 
i havent came up with any bridge or second verse

i can still hear your voice in all of your notes.
like your right there telling me exactly what you ...

Claire's song lyrics critique- country/soft rock 
Since the day
I first saw u
Girl u looked so damn cute

Ooooohhhh and girl you know
 I never thought it'd go this far
But you stole my heart  
 
Now ...

Fly - Lyrics Critique 
I Wrote This Song When My Ex-Boyfriend Broke Up With Me And I Knew I Needed To Get Over Him. Thankfully I Now Am (: Tell Me What You Think.

Chorus
Your ...

Wise Girl lyrics critique - country/soft rock 
this is my first song any feedback and constructive criticism would be much appreciated.

First verse

I’ll never lose the memory of that Saturday ...

You Won't Be The Same- Pop Song - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1
You were amazing
You were awesome
I thought you were the one that I needed in my life
But people can change
And you really did

Chrous...

Judge me on By James Cook Rap / Rock -Lyric Critique 

judge me on the way

i hustle and make my stacks

Big rubber bans, Every stack is a 100,grand

Chill in london to Japan. if ya been there than ...

"7 digits" critique country pop  
7 digits running through my head
I walk into my house
First thing
I grab a notebook and a pen

Then I realize I won’t have to write it down
Cause ...

Lyric Critique : Somewhere Out There (Pop) 
Somewhere out there I see a shining star
Waiting out in the night for all to see
What can I wish ?
What can I hope for ?
All I can do is tell myself ...

Someday - Lyrics Feedback 
I lost my sanity
I'm falling so deeply
Into a deep, dark hole
Lost in the middle
What's wrong with me?

I've lost my way
I should've gone another ...

Not So Victimless Lies (were not ok) - Lyrics Critique- Pop punk 
This is one of the songs from our band, RetroGrade. Just starting to get into the local scene and wanted to see exactly what people think of the words ...

Give Me A Break- Pop Music Lyrics Critique 
Homework assignment due tomorrow
Don't forget about the science project
Research paper due next week
Remember that book your reading
Soccer practice ...

Choking Silence - Lyrics Critique 
A day like no other when you shine on me
Like the brightest star
You lead me through this life

But now the time is over
You had to go
Using the ...

Speechless lyrics critique 
This is a song I wrote about this guy at school that I have a crush on. Lemme know whatcha think. Advice or suggestions for changes welcomed/appreciated ...

I'm Sorry Lyrics Critique 
chorus

I'm sorry I'm sorry
for all the things that I've put you through
o please o please
please don leave i need you (love you) x2

verse 1
...

Stutter - Lyrics Critique 
this tension plucks my hair like tightly wound guitar strings
and every time I push Im pulled back and Im trying to breathe

and the smell gets stronger
...

Things Will Be Better Tomorrow - Rock - Lyrics Critique 
so i made this song up for my band and i need honest feedback on it thanks guys!

As you bear a burden of what used to be
as your are mending your shattered ...

A little to late. Lyrics Critique- Love kinda song. 
A little late:
It’s the middle of summer
chilling with friends,
having a good ole time
you walked through those doors
like a wave hitting the shores
...

Bobby (Bonnie Lyrics Critique - jazzy/folk song) 
Something I wrote a while ago so, tell me what you think.

Bobby get out of the fire tonight
Oh You keep me burning and my mouth is dry
It's like waiting ...

My Geisha Girl - Lyrics Critique 
Intro)
O my geisha girl
You open up my
eyes now I can
see brand new
light the way you change
my life with you is
truly paradise.....

(Hook)...

Random Axe of Violence - Critique - Heavy Rock 
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Random Axe of Violence

(Verse 1)
Jogging
Snogging
People in the park
Walking
Stalking
Victims after ...

ALL The Things I Can't Replace - Lyrics Critique 
ALL The things I can't replace



Like your smile upon
your face your Warmth and your embrace
your LOve and touch that's why i need you so much....

A Christmas Day - Lyrics Critique - POP 
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

A Christmas Day

(Verse 1)
Snow's falling
Mama's calling
Table's set
Lunch at one
It's December
I remember
...

Righteous Love - Lyrics Critique 
righteous Love
You shower me with
Love....
O righteous Love
U must be sent from the heaven's
above....
O righteous Love.....Love Love.....

OOO ...

Forget To Forget-Lyrics Critique-11/30/11-By Zendaik 
I wrote these lyrics, for a song about something i have no experience with whatsoever. Please do not steal anything from my song-i will sue you.

Forget ...

Who's your Lover - Lyrics Critique 
Who's your lover,

who's your man in and out
of covers...

I'll put no one above ya...

I'll give u so much pleasure
your heart is truly treasure
...

Hook line and Sinker - lyrics critique 
(Hook line and Sinker) R&B



Hook line and Sinker......
Babe girl u were my anker
the only girl I love in this world....

U were my foundation,...

Won't Be Leaving Alone Lyrics Critique- Country Song 
Hey everyone!
I'm a young country singer/songwriter looking for some HONEST critique! It's definitely a country song, so read over the lyrics and let ...

Kimiko By james Cook - lyrics critique 
I just like to let U
know how much I
Love U so Kimiko Kimiko
Don't ever let me Go......

U are the only one I want to
Hold

(Chorus)
kimiko ...

Why Try? Lyric Critique - Acoustic 
I guess I'll start off by explaining that I'm 15 and I wrote this song after a breakup, and the girl I was with wouldn't even look in my direction, I loved ...

Petra - "Lyrics Critique-( fast tempo song) " It's alright" 
I don't know the genre yet.
This is my second lyric.
Please tell me what you think of the lyrics.
I am Dutch so English is not my first language.
The ...

Runnin' Away- Acoustic Song - Lyrics Critique 
Pictures of my idols on my wall,
Slowly over time begin to fall,
But I’m bothered puttin' them up no more,
My fallen heroes on my bedroom floor

And ...

come along~ rock alt~lyrics critique~dave graves ~good or blah 
TAKE MY HAND GUIDE MY PLEASE
TAKE ME SHOW YOUR SHINING FACE
RAISE MY SEEDS BEYOND MY NEEDS
TAKE ME IN YOUR DREAMS

SO MANY SONGS SUNG
SO MANY ...

Unforgettable Soldier -Lyrics Critique 
Every night When they dreamed
They remembered the wait
that seemed to last forever
the time they thought he died
until they got the letter
how he ...

It's All About A Cross - Lyrics Critique 
IT'S ALL ABOUT A CROSS original by TIM HORNE


IT'S ALL ABOUT A CROSS (LYRICS)

http://soundcloud.com/tim-horne/acousti ... -all-about

It's not ...

the best of lovers - lyrics critique 


Lovers


I know that i, I know that we,
we are the best of lovers,
I know that i, i need you so, the best
love of my life ........

I ...

Strangers Lyrics Critique- acoustic song 

A thousand miles away
Still don’t take the memories away
Keep thinking if I stay busy
Forgetting will just be that easy

Funny thing is when you ...

You Lighten My Life [final 2011]- Balladine Blues - Justin Cayce - Lyrics Critique 
Thanks guys and gals for the previous positive feedback on this song as it was in 2009. My daughter has made a simple studio recording since then with ...

Jesus, Carry Me - Contemporary - Lyrics Critique 
So... I'm 20 years old, and I've been writing music for eight years now. This is some of my earlier work that I'm thinking of recording next. But you guys ...

Old Wooden Church , Country Lyric critique 
There’s an old wooden church
On a back road
Not too far from where I used to live
It was there in Sunday school
Where I found Jesus
And learned about ...

The Butterfly Song- Lyric critique 
Ok... So I'm only 13, and I know this song isn't amazing... but I'd love to know what you think!

My Daddy used to tell me
that I was his little butterfly
...

If it wasn't (Grunge type Ballad) - Lyrics Critique 
Slower tempo semi accoustic verse,s, with a heavy anthem type chorus.
.........................................

if it wasn't for the skin that ...

"Last December Lyrics Critique - Country/Pop Song" 
Sitting by my window
Watching the falling snow
Make light piles of white
On this cold winter night
And I'm smiling a smile
I haven't seen in while ...

Won't You Be Mine lyrics Critique 
Your bubble gum lips
You would never dream of this
A kiss, a touch, a feel
I would never believe it true
To be followed by the light
That makes you ...

A PLACE FOR BELIEVERS Lyrics Critique-Pop Song 
Tell me that theres A PLACE FOR BELIEVERS
That only you would understand.
Tell me that theres a place for retrievers,
that only you would give a damn....

Title:Believe in me, Electronic dance with vocals in it."lyrics" "critique" 
Title: Believe in me

I have done all the things right
It was a real fight
I no longer pretend
Will you be my friend?
Change has happening
Change ...

"The Mirror Lyrics Critique- Country Song" 
I think it was early
some may call it late
I know things were not wonderful
Hell not even close to great
my mind was really racing
though the ...

I Love You, This is How I feel - Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre 
I really want to know what you guys think...Please dont be afrid to be Harsh. I really want to make this song perfect since its about my life.

I Love ...

No Title - Lyrics Critique 
I dont have a title- this is my first song i hope people can help me improve please give me feedback and comments to help me improve (:

when i was just ...

Dirt Road Blues lyrics critique chris brown 
Big ole trucks,big ole tires
Cathead biscuits and chicken in the fryer
Ice cold sweet tea, from a mason jar
Didnt wanna be nowhere but in her arms

Now ...

At Sixteen country lyric Critique 

At Sixteen by Charlie Mitchell

When I was a boy/
I wasted so much time/
I didn’t know /what I was trying /so hard to find/
This dating game was ...

why should i stay (pop/country) - lyrics critique 
i am only 13 so the lyrics might sound cheezy but i tried

While you were staring into space
i was staring at your face
and thinking to myself that ...

"lyrics" critique rock 
I cant figure out a song title for this : ((( But anyway, please tell me if you like the song or not : )))


Take my heart
Its not worth the fight
...

Help me on the title! Lyrics Critique - Rock/Screamo Song 
Note: all CAPS are screams.


(VER1)
The subtle signs are what give you away
With every breath, I hear you screaming silently
I look into your eyes ...

Dream It Lyrics Critique- R&B/Pop Song" 
Verse;If you want love
(then go for it)
If you want Fame
(then reach for it)
If you Dream big
(then dream it, but if u dream it u gotta believe it)...

At The Gates Lyrics Critique- Metal song 
At The Gates (Written By Martin Synan)

This is a song I wrote about The Lord Of The Rings

(Slow intro)

There is a day when the world of men will ...

broken heart (yours or mine) - lyrics critique 
(im still working on this plz leave some comments and give me tips)

Broken Heart (Yours Or Mine)

This broken heart whose could it be,
does it belong ...

flashback - lyrics critique 
Could people please comment on this one i am only young and just been writing for about 6-7 months please could someone feedback on this. the first bit ...

Blue Tonight Lyric Critique - Pop Ballad 
Gave you everything you wanted
Gave you nothing that you need
Like a mighty oak tree you stood tall and strong
But I cut you down and watched you bleed
...

Looking out My Window Lyric Critique-folks song 
Looking out my window, my
back against the wall,
I hear thunder
and I wonder
when the rain is gonna fall.

Looking out my window,
skies dark as ...

More than A Friend - Lyrics Critique 
More than a Friend

I was hungry /
You gave me food to eat /
I was thirsty /
You offered me a drink /
I was cold /
You opened your door / and you ...

Choke lyrics Critique - Piano Song 
Okay so this needs a lot of work, but it's my first song. It's mostly a bunch of chunks or words and it's probably too long.
But it's about making a ...

Never Again Lyrics Critique - Pop Song 
Hi, this is my, I don't know, 15th songs or something. I really love writing songs but I don't know if they're good.

Never Again

Everyday I go to ...

The Scars of Love Lyrics Critique - Country Song  

The Scars of Love ,by Charlie Mitchell

You made a big deal /
Out of saying /
it‘s over/
But I’ve known that it’s been over for a while/
All I ...

leave me be - lyrics critique 
chorus:::
you were so nice and we were friends
but then you had to go and get in my space

you think its love
but you are so wrong
so leave me ...

Kiss Me I'm Dead-POP - Lyric writing - critique 
Moo rah ah
Moo rah oh la
Ba ba bum bum
Da da huh

Verse 1: Your touch is grey
Your kiss is cold
Don’t stare at me too long
I only came to not ...

Will I Be To Late lyrics critique- acoustic lyrics feedback 
V1: Ashes to ashes they all fall around me, Turning from ou to pick them back up.
Stop the abuse its tying my arms down, The fate of my life its all in ...

OUT OF CONTROL country Lyrics Critique By Charlie from Alabama 
He was her man
So with the back of his hand
He would remind her time after time
He?d watch the miles on her car
If she drove too far
It would drive ...

Kiaras lyric critique - love song  
Maybe if I stop pretending
it would be alright
I cant express this feeling
I cant speak my mind
And they tell me just talk about it
I cant just talk ...

When I Miss You Lyrics Critique - Ballad 
This is a very personal song for me, but i kept the person annonomous. It may need a lot of work because i'm young.

Verse 1:
Why does he
Say that ...

"Make Me Smile" lyric critique 
(note: I put commas where there would be a pause in the music, not for any specific grammatical purpose).

The rumors hurt,
they cut us deep.
They ...

A Drop In The Ocean- -lyrics critique 
Heyy this is my first song i wrote it for my girlfriend


A drop in the ocean,
A change in the weather,
I was praying that you and me might end up ...

Is Heartbreak a Compound Word (Lyric feedback) ? country  Not rated yet
I am new here and not too sure what I am doing (yet) but I write a lot of lyrics and have collaborated with others on some but I want to get more out there ...

See You Again lyrics critique - pop song  Not rated yet
my very first song! :)
tell me what you think about it! :)


Your smile’s what keeps me movin’ around
Your eyes I’m always thinkin’ about
I’ve been ...

Prisoner of mind lyrics, critique - no genre, but possibly slow  Not rated yet
Prisoner of mind...visitor of blackness at night...
Hello, where's your grin, the one you wear when the doctor's are in?

Have the voices stopped? Do ...

You Surprise me Country lyrics Charlie in Alabama  Not rated yet
After 31 years of marrige my wife still surprises me so I wrote this for her.






You Surprise Me
Just when I think/ I‘ve got you figured out/...

I'm Past Caring for You - Lyrics Critique - POP  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2012 John Knight

I'm Past Caring for You

(Verse 1)
Well let me tell you
I think you're lying
'Cos your voice is shaking ...

Because I Love You - Lyrics Critique - POP  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2012 John Knight

Because I Love You

(Verse 1)
The sun came out
I saw you smile
The birds they sang
For a long long while
...

Soul of New Orleans - Country/soul-rock - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
This song was influenced alot by the music of the '70's through to the early '90's. Storytelling in music is not so common these days, but I'd be interested ...

Another Suicide - Emo, Acoustic - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
A broken life
and living a lie
All she wanted was to end all the pain
and take away her life

She was a girl so happy as she seemed to be

But ...

Jenny Penny - Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2012 John Knight

Jenny Penny

(Verse 1)
Jenny Penny, look my way
Jenny Penny, come and play
You're the sweetest girl I've ...

Once in A lifetime- lyric critique -alternative  Not rated yet
the general back ground is that i met someone at a park and we were great friends from the start and he had to leave the next day and he had changed me ...

alone lyrics critique - Rock/Blues  Not rated yet
baby boy living on his own
trying to make it on all alone
finds it hard
to live in the dark
lost his dad, hates his mom
moved away
went the old fashion ...

All You Need Is Love Lyrics Critique- R&B Song by Melissa  Not rated yet
(Chorus) 2x
Baby, I got this thunder in my heart
'Cause your sweet love is like a brand new start for me
I'm dyin ' little by little each day without ...

Another Round - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Misery loves company
and loneliness seems to be my only friend
So I pop the top on a bottle
and drink it at full throttle
Hoping my pain will mend
...

"A Line to Cross to Bear" lyrics critique - Folk/Indie  Not rated yet
First true attempt at songwriting (I'm 16). First half of this song was written months ago with a positive outlook of the future. I was getting ready ...

"Runaway Baby" (pop ballad) by Lauren Laine - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
She lays her head upon her pillow
not knowing what there was to follow
her heart keeps on racing
with every word he is saying
and tears fall from her ...

Waiting on Superman - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This song is R&B/pop, most likely a ballad, but it really depends on the instrumental I find that fits.

1st verse:
So much energy just to be superwoman
...

Table Talk Lyrics Critique - Soul/Reggae - Acoustic (It's a Satirical song)  Not rated yet
I am shrewd
Got the tools
I control the markets
I'm smarter than you

I am crude
Sometimes rude
I have the man-power
I'm much more than you

I'...

Beautiful Babies - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hello, I just wrote this song, it is going to be a part of my first album, and I'm having a hard time finding a melody that flows. So I think I may have ...

Prince Charming Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
The way you make me feel it's all real,
and I can't even reveal the real deal
of how I hate that I can't think straight anymore,
don't know what ...

Tomorrow - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is a song about a homeless girl, please give me any feedback. :)

V1: She sits on the corner of a busy street,
Her pride as dirty as her feet,...

Me And Old Mike - Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight


Me And Old Mike

(Verse 1)
Well I left Utah in my beat up car and forty three dollars in cash
I headed ...

In The Beginning, There Was - Lyrics Critique - Ballad  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

In The Beginning, There Was

Imagine the first twilight
Creation hours old
Think of what happened
A miracle ...

Just You - Lyrics Critique - POP  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Just You

You are beautiful
Yes you are
I'm thinking of you
As I drive my car
I'm going away
For a day ...

I Just Wanna Kiss You - Lyrics Critique - POP  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Title: I Just Wanna Kiss You

(Chorus)
I just wanna kiss you
Kiss you, kiss you, kiss you
I just wanna kiss ...

Bob Dylan (taught me everything I know) - Lyrics Critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Bob Dylan (taught me everything I know)

(Verse 1)
With my blues harp C
I just wanna be me
And play every ...

Eternally - Love Song - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Eternally

(Verse 1)
In the evening
When I get home
I'd like to think
I'm not alone
To have you there
...

Christmas Day 1916 - Lament - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight

Christmas Day 1916

The rats and mud
Smell the fresh blood
A letter to my Mom
Death's all around
This cold ...

I wanna see the summer here - pop lyrics critique  Not rated yet
I love this town
It's like a candle in the storm
flickering at the dawn.
You never know if it's still breathing tomorrow
Now I will pretend that I ...

Now Lyrics Critique- Pop/reggae  Not rated yet
hey yall! I've been writing songs since 4ever and I just wanted to kno if this one was any good...it was the first one that I EVER wrote when I was like ...

Santa Fell Down the Chimney - Lyrics Critique - POP Christmas  Not rated yet
A silly pop song for Christmas.
Might keep the kids amused...

Cab


Santa Fell Down The Chimney

Santa fell down the chimney and landed on his ...

Black Mold lyrics critique - still working on think Codeine-ish melody  Not rated yet
Black Mold

You grow and you grow and spread yourself out
Pretending to know what love is about
You attach yourself, bind so f***ing tight
Just for ...

"last hero" lyric critique-country rock  Not rated yet
looking for feed back to know if this is the right song to submit for publishing

last hero

i heard them say today
another hero ...

Stronger Lyrics Critique - Rock Alternative Song  Not rated yet
I'm a little nervous about this but I hope I'll get positive feedback. Took me about ten minutes... Pretty much about a girl realizing that she wants to ...

The Worst Thing About You Lyrics Critique-- Alt. Rock Song  Not rated yet
Remember the day 
A few years ago 
You ruined everything
And after that day 
When you went home
Did you even think of me?

The worst thing about ...

Love You Tonight "Lyrics Critique" Country Song   Not rated yet
Oh, you’re thousands of miles away from me
But, somehow we know it’s meant to be

So, I’m
I’m gonna love you one night

Oh, it might take a while
...

"Papa" [Acoustic Alt/Rock] Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Oh dear land of a'rolling hills don't tell me where you end
I could live a million years in a land that smells of bread
Oh dear red rooftops your clay ...

Pawned Her Ring Today Lyrics Critique ...Country ballad slow tempo for male singer   Not rated yet
This is just a rough draft tell me if you think i should go on or just scratch it

Pawned Her Ring Today

Verse 1
I've put the bottle down
...

Somewhere In South Caroline - lyric critique - up tempo blues song  Not rated yet
Somewhere In South Caroline

Verse 1
You took a one way ticket
Straight out of my heart
You left me feelin' like I was, gonna die
...

Lead Me Ahead - Lyrics Critique - Alternative Rock  Not rated yet
Chorus:
When I run away. When I move away.
Will you always be here by my side?
As a friend?
As an enemy?
As a lover?
As my destiny?

Verse 1:

When ...

No Title Yet lyrics critique- folkish. Haven't figured out a chorus yet  Not rated yet
My thoughts go too deep, my head thinks things through
my hands are bound and yearn to break loose
A new year came but all went unchanged
I know now ...

Getting high to get by Lyrics Critique county lyric Charlie  Not rated yet
Getting high to get by

In a dirty public restroom.
Drinking some tea he made from mushrooms.
there are sores on his face from all the meth.
There’...

in saddness lyrics critique - indie,easy listening  Not rated yet
For ages now i've been trying to make a song that tells a story and has meaning I need honest comments please and I hope you like it

when we were younger ...

Fate is Your Compass - Pop - lyric critique  Not rated yet
verse 1

Young girl, around 16, pocket fulla dreams
over bearing mother and a secret belly ring.
One day she had enough, packed her stuff
said ...

The First Time Lyrics Critique- Country  Not rated yet
The First Time


I just got back from Iraq
I was on my way home
I could have taken a train
I could have taken a plane
Just my luck I took ...

Happens For A Reason Lyrics Critique- Country Song  Not rated yet
Hey everyone!
I'm a young country singer/songwriter looking for some HONEST critique! Please take a look, read through the song, and let me know what ...

A Nation of Slaves Lyrics Critique - Heavy Metal, Hard Rock  Not rated yet
Their eyes are watching
Every move you make
But we’re complacent
To be lulled
Into a false sense of security

We’re all slaves
To the system
Yes,...

"Easy Does It" Lyric Critique - Rock/Country/Folk Song   Not rated yet
Hello All,

Wanna be lyricist here with no musical ability, just want to know if the attached lyric is music worthy?
Please advise, thanks much!

“Easy ...

I Cried All Night - Lyrics Ballad - Critique  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight
Title: I Cried all Night

(Chorus 1)
I cried all night
When you said goodbye
Let me dry my eyes now
Let me ...

This bluebird can fly - country - (suggestions, tips, feedback)  Not rated yet
I need some feedback on my lyrics, i find lyrics kinda hard to write. This is a country song about how someone can change someone for the better, the tempo ...

"Coming Home- lyrics critique"  Not rated yet
Ive been gone from the truth
Ive hid myself from the fear of knowing you
The things ive done, the places ive been,
How can I be forgiven for all ive ...

All I need Lyrics critique - Rock   Not rated yet
I wanted a beat like beatles..did it..the lyrics was the hardest part..but I wrote'em..what'd you think?

All I need

You see
All I need is all that ...

unforgetable lyrics critique- pop song  Not rated yet
I'm Hailey, I'm 13 years old and I've been writing songs since I was 6. Singing and songwriting is my dream. This song isn't complete yet, but I wanted ...

Get Well Soon - Country - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this when my mom was diagnosed with cancer. Tell me what you think.

Jesus please speak for my mother
Give her the strength she needs to recover
...

Better days Will Come Lyrics Critique- Rock/Pop song  Not rated yet
Simple song..from my heart..=}..Hope u Like it..Be honest..

Better days will come

There are days
that we keep in our memories
and days that we'...

Lyrics critique Pop/Rock- Wish you were here  Not rated yet
Uhh..Simple song..my friend dies a couple of years ago and she was everything to me...but she's gone..and I couldn't help but write a song for her..it'...

"Possesive Lyrics Critique - pop/ hip-hop  Not rated yet
This is wht I have so far...


This love for you is unshakable,
my one and only, unchangable.
To you I'm never worthy,
And your eternaly unbendable....

You Should Have Called Back "Lyrics critique" "Rock Song"  Not rated yet

You walked in my life
Took me by surprise

Never wanted someone, so bad
Between my thighs

You had a certain
Charm about ...

Moving On- By Lisette Archer-Barber- Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1:

We've been though the pain ..
We can see throught the rain..
You were there but now im sittin all alone trying to move on
because we know ...

Fast Lane Rita Lyrics Critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
Author: John Knight
©2011 John Knight
All Rights Reserved

Fast Lane Rita

A girl down in Texas
She stole my Lexus
Drove off down Highway 41
I ...

From me to we Lyrics Critique - Country Song Charlie from Alabama   Not rated yet
I wrote this after visiting at a family reunion recently
I remembered past reuions and such it just came to me.


From Me to We

See that front porch ...

Kendall Lyrics Critique- Pop Punk up beat song.  Not rated yet
Title: Adam's Song
Tempo: 160 BPM


Verse 1:
You are the reason why
I’m waking up, shaken up
from lingering dreams
that aren’t so sweet.
you ...

Plays It Safe- Needs Chorus - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I know man with thunder in his hand, but he plays it safe

Things inside others may find so he plays it safe

You ask him why all excuses ...

Four Corners - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
Traces, of a dreams eye, a glimpse inside my mind
Faces, those who’ve lived and learned, been burned
Places, of regret, time not spent and I’...

Better Than You lyrics critique - Rock  Not rated yet
(verse 1)
How can i? Forget your name, forget your face
And now can I? Just move on, just be strong
you left your mark; all over me, please set me free
...

Sounds like the life to me / A parody to Sounds like life by Darryl Worley - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Sounds like the Life

I got a call last night from my x wife
Who said the alimony is due
She said if you don’t pay
The sheriff will be on his way
...

Creativity Lyrics Critique - Hip-hip  Not rated yet
Intro, Radio sound
108,27, daily news, we bring you everything
From heaven to the ground.
We got the lyrical artsy here with us tonight
You're about ...

AndyL.UK. Dream the dream. Please Critique. (Lyric Critique)  Not rated yet
I would like a chance to write lyrics for commercial puposes can anyone help me. email lavellea@ btinternet.com



Dream the dream and not the lie....

No More Secrets - Pop, unknown genre - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hi, I'm really open to specific comments like if I don't really make sense at a certain point or if you think I could use some better words. I'm not quite ...

Alone lyrics critique- alternative i guess  Not rated yet
ALONE

Spoken: In my life I am alone, there’s no place to call my home. There’s no wind to carry words, and no rain to calm my nerves. I always lay awake ...

Journey of a man lyrics critique- rock  Not rated yet
okay this is pretty much the farthest I've ever gotten in terms of length of a song and I'm not quite done yet and it's also pretty much my first song
...

Bitter Pill - Lyrics Critique - Acoustic Song  Not rated yet
They say a good beginning makes for a good ending
So how could I know that you'd become condescending?
And just as cold as those days in January
The ...

Til I get paid - lyrics critique - upbeat country song  Not rated yet
Hey first post here ever, I dont really want anyone to borrow these, I copyright all my lyrics (the poor mans way ; ) ofcourse) sooo I hope you like, suppose ...

The Ride - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I Wrote This Song Because Some People Were Being Really Horrible To Me, And I Wanted Others To Know That If They're In That Situation You Can Do Something....

Swing Sally Lyrics Critique Pop/Soft Rock/Country Crossover Song  Not rated yet
VERSE:

Swing Sally, silver lady
Back alley baby.
I like tha way your swingin' flows.

Jingle in my pocket,
Tryin'to find another hole.

CHORUS:...

Never Trust a Man - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
**This is the first song I have been attempting to write in MONTHS! The chords are A-, F, C, G. I fingerpick the chords throughout the whole song. It has ...

"Sabronana Lyrics Critique- What Do You Say  Not rated yet
Chorus:
What do you say when it's all too much
What do you do when love isn't enough
Your time is wasted avoiding the things that shouldn't have happened ...

nashvilles not my home Country - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
nashvilles not my home
Writer Ken Lillie
Nashvilles not my home

I saw him at a truck stop
Sleeping under a big oak tree
He asked me for a dollar ...

Moving On Lyrics Critique - not quite sure about genre yet, or the type of sound i'd like to give it  Not rated yet
hey everyone(: this is one of the first songs i've ever fully written... it basically came from personal experiences with friends who truly weren't friends ...

My Pretty Liar - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
My Pretty Liar

Tell me... a story off the top of your head.
You always tell the best little lies.
Sell me... every single feeling that I
Wish you ...

P.S I'm Still In Love With You - Lyrics Critique - Accoustic/Slow Pop  Not rated yet
Lyrics: (P.S im still in love with you - chorus/hook)

V1:
Ive been wishing, dreaming and waitin
For you to turn around
Take it back and rewind to ...

From Me to We - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
From Me to We

See that front porch swing/
Swaying in the breeze/
It’s still hanging in the same place /
Where my dad dropped down on one knee/

As ...

Beating Lyrics critique - probably trance, but that doesnt rlly matter...  Not rated yet
So yeah this is the first full song i ever wrote... i know its not really good, like the 2nd verse is weird and some of the wording is a bit akward, but ...

Why? lyric critique acoustic alternative  Not rated yet
Just when i had you off my head
Your voice came whispering into me
Turned into reality by this cold universe
I now see why love hurts

Why do you ...

Your Love lyric critique alternative  Not rated yet
Lead on by your love
I am lost in transition
Apathy in my vein
For a life without you

The quiver of your lips
The butterflies of our first kiss
...

Letters Of Regret lyrics critique - Country/soft rock?   Not rated yet
Verse 1
Dearest Courtney,
My first love that was true
I have often thought of you
and all that we went through......
It has been so very long
I wonder ...

This world?? lyrics critique- up tempo rock/pop  Not rated yet
I sat down and came up with this..my first, please be honest

V1
What have we turned into?
Thou shalt not judge
It seems that it is all you do
The ...

"All Eyes On You" :) - pop - lyric critique  Not rated yet
Heyyyyyy i am Danielle im 14. i wrote this song hoping it my be good. tell me anything that you would change about it. thanks :D

“All Eyes On You”

La ...

"Teeth Marks" Lyrics Critique - Indie Song  Not rated yet
You're not prepared
You were caught unaware
Try remain detered
To avoid that rant
That only precedes, trouble

Somethings boiling
Not what you'...

My Old Friends lyrics critique Country  Not rated yet
My Old Friends

I’m going sailing this weekend with some of my old friends,
I’ve been away to long, and I need to make amends....

Lord, It's A Good Night To Cry Lyrics Critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
(To be played in a Hank Williams style)


The rain is fallin' outside
I can't keep the tears from my eyes
Today was the day she said goodbye
So Lord,...

Song lyrics critique - Abbey   Not rated yet
This is the first song I have ever written with the Guitar so its not that great wich is why im looking for some suggestions on how to improve it. It uses ...

Gift Lyrics Critique - Electronic Pop  Not rated yet
Verse 1: Your blood is like a bullet in my system
Body splits in two but I feel whole
Life is like a gift don’t dismiss it
A face is full of words
...

Stand Up - Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
There's a million prayers that are unheard
children crying and people getting hurt,
why do we have to go this way?
i wake up in the morning and hope ...

Remember The Day - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Here They Are I Hope You Like Them



I'm Sitting Here
My head spinnin round
I'm lying down
my feet on the ground

Chorus:
Im trying to remeber ...

Best Friends Lyrics Critique- Acoustic  Not rated yet
Hi! I'm Hannah and 13 years old. I started this song when I got the news that my best friend since kindergarden would be attending a private school from ...

The Ride - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I Wrote This Song Because Some People Were Being Really Horrible To Me, And I Wanted Others To Know That If They're In That Situation You Can Do Something....

Say Goodbye - lyric critique - Country  Not rated yet
I have never written a song before until now. This is the second one I have written over the past couple weeks. I hear it as a country ballad.

Say ...

Walking Man Lyrics Critique (Slow-Rock, 4/4 Beat) Guitar Chords (Dm - Am - C - G) Strum - ( v v v ^ )  Not rated yet
(Dm) (Am)
Do you think you know
(C) (G)
the walking mans pain

rags for clothes and
a many a stain

who would open their
...

"If Only You Knew Lyrics Critique-country song"  Not rated yet
You look and wave and I try to act cool
but really you made my day at school

I see you everywhere by never really gotten to know you

And I wonder ...

"Don't You Remember? Lyrics Critique - country song"  Not rated yet
Don't You Remember?

That night in your truck on that old dirt road
The laughs we shared for hours on our boat
I was smilin from ear to ear wondering ...

Rinse and Repeat - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I’m really sore at the moment
And my heart is heavily beating
Seems I will never be defeating
The many dumb soft skin treatments

Now she starts to ...

A Simple Day With You Lyrics Critique - Unknown Genre  Not rated yet
I wake up every day
and I have so many things to do
but none of them sound as good as
spending the whole thing with you

No, there's nothing that ...

"Come Home (War)" lyric critique- Pop/Indie Ballad  Not rated yet
I'm a lover,
I've a broken disease
I'm just another
sad case with a tendency for war.


Drive me home,
take me far away
where I can hide
from ...

I’m Not Changing Me Lyrics Critique - Pop  Not rated yet
Hey, I wrote this 2 years ago when I was all trying to find myself and stuff. These are my very first lyrics. Can I have your most honest opinion on this....

Thank You/ Christian worship song - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Thank You for the day
You took my sins away
All alone there on the cross
For the broken and the lost
What a death to die
What a debt to pay
How could ...

Looking Back - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
looking back
when i was young
when i met deliah, with a smoke in her hand
talkin about some dude
if i only i knew,i'd would have found something to ...

And then came death Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
How can I die?
When I have seen nothing of this world
How can time be so short
In the eyes of a human child?
A song as old as time

The ancient lords ...

Thinking of you - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I raised myself, is the only thing I can do
Since I don’t want anything more from you
Moving with my life is the best thing right now
I know how mentally ...

My goodbye- country(-ish?) - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
Do you understand—?
What I’m even saying?
Do you get why I’m here—
Don’t you even know that I’m not staying?
Everything is falling apart—...

Liar- unsure of the genre - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
How could you do this to me after all that you've seen? I've shown you the life I lived, and you never want to see me again. I opened up from ...

hometown - rap - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i cant stress enough,
the pain that you see,
the thoughts i wanna relieve,
but they cry for more,
my head is sore,
im loosing my grip,
wheres reality,...

Navajo Lyrics critique- Folk Song  Not rated yet
Navajo
(c)2011 Tyler Ragle

I had a friend lived just over the bridge
In a little old house up on Big River Ridge
Didn't say much, he would walk in ...

Stop the heartache rock ballad or country - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
The city lights
The cool night air
Baby i wish you were here
So i could play with your hair
Im tired of spending these nights alone
When are you coming ...

What you want from me - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
Every time I come around man I always hear u cry/And believe or not baby I hate to see u cry/havin a piece of mind is somethin money buy/We fittna ...

Beautiful People Lyrics Critique- R&B/Pop  Not rated yet
Once upon a time you made me fall in love with you
and I know, you really loved me too
I really cherished
Our precious moments
So just imagine all ...

Lyrics critique - idk title yet either   Not rated yet
Will there ever be a lover
that is also your friend?

will there ever be a father
that stays til the end?

i dont know but somewhere out there
theres ...

Lyrics critique - No title as yet  Not rated yet
i dont know what the title would be yet

Jump, jump
as high as you can
theyll never reach you when youre high in the sky
out of their reach
you dont ...

Nows My Time Lyric critique - Rap song  Not rated yet
my thoughts are slightly dazed,
right now my lifes a maze,
i dont know where to go,
il put on a show,
for my fans then im back off home,
but i cant ...

Taking over lyrics feedback - R'n'b song  Not rated yet
I try to focus,
but its you thats there,
everywhere i go its you,
my imagination seems hazy,
i think of us,
and it all becomes clear,
where i wanna ...

Realize (The Lights) - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1: You saw me then for the last time before you knew the truth
How can the dead walk and learn to love again?
Sleeping alone again? You’re just ...

Yesterdays Coffee Country Lyric Critique   Not rated yet
Yesterdays Coffee
By Charlie Mitchell

I woke up this morning
On the wrong side of the bed
I remember something about a fight
But not much that ...

The PuzzLe Country Lyrics critique By Charlie in Alabama  Not rated yet
THE PUZZLE

He slowly opened up the box
Looked at the picture on the top
And poured a thousand little pieces on the table
He knows how to do it
There ...

Journey in a Cage Lyrics- Acoustic song  Not rated yet
Verse 1:
I woke up one day and realized I loved you
I pray that you love me too
Gaurdian angel, you showed me heaven
I promise to make you smile while ...

Only in stories (lyrics critique) -Pop/Rock song  Not rated yet
The life of a young girl, the life of young girl. Lives in fairy tale full of ponies and princes. The life she lives is a lie. Waiting for her prince ...

Lyrics Critique - Rush (chorus) - Pop  Not rated yet
ive only got a chorus so far....but im not sure if its good or not.....feedback? :)

C my heart stops beating whenever i hear your voice
your touch....

Something Special - slow (pop/punk) (need ideas)  Not rated yet
This is all I have , a song I'm writing for someone special
I need some feed back please
Are these any good?
What can make them better?
anything ...

Mechanical Heart- Lyrics Critique - Electronic/Dance Song  Not rated yet
Mechanical heart

INTRO:
(Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Why, why, why)

My mechanical heart
Is as cold as ice
It can be sweet
...

"Shadow Lover" Lyrics Critique - Rock/Metal Song  Not rated yet
This song was written for a girl that I loved but she didnt feel the same way so the only thing I could be was a friend(a Shadow Lover). And she hurt me ...

As good, as it gets country Lyrics By Charlie from Alabama  Not rated yet
As good, as it gets
By Charlie Mitchell

The Whippoorwills are singing
We’re on the front porch swinging
Lightning bugs,
Are dancing in the dark
...

Valentine Lyrics Critique- Slow Pop Song  Not rated yet
(INTRO)

Will it happen

My dear

Will ya finally say it

Admit it

You know you wanna do it



Will it happen

My dear

Will you finally ...

Death Valley lyrics critique -rock  Not rated yet
Death Valley (Song of an Unknown Soldier)

Verse 1
We sat at the bar laughing as we drank our beer
Just loving life before we went to war
We heard ...

Here I Sit Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
I see that little girl
As she makes her way to school
I see the bruises she tries to hide
Everyone else can see them too

It aint hard to figure out
...

Forever On My Mind Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
Lying in this motel bed
Feelin nothing but sorry for myself
Muffled moans through paper-thin wall
Brings to mind nothing else

The radio is playing ...

So Low Lyrics Critique - Country  Not rated yet
I got drunk last night
'Cuz I still don't care
'Bout my way through life
Be it bad or fair

I live in a drunken haze
'Cuz it's all I know
It's too ...

when tears fall (r&b) lyrics critique  Not rated yet
When tears fall i just wanna help you all
because when tears fall i can see us both crying
because we know your really trying
oh when tears fall i ...

Already gone? lyrics critique...  Not rated yet
Just trying to get some feedback on these lyrics to see where i need to go from here...all feedback welcome. I'm a vocalist who is tired of singing someone ...

Death Valley- Rock Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
Verse 1
We sat at the bar laughing as we drank our beer
Just loving life before we went to war
We heard the news as the day drew near
Were going the ...

Death Valley lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
We sat at the bar laughing as we drank our beer
Just loving life before we went to war
We heard the news as the day drew near
Were going the ...

Sarah’s crying "Lyrics" "Critique" "Rock"  Not rated yet
Sarah’s crying
By
Peter and Michael Sheehan
The Last Bite Band


Sarah cries for the pain in the air (So much P-a-i-n)
Sarah cries cause no one ...

Buy One Get One "Lyrics" "Critque" "Rock/Pop Song"  Not rated yet
Buy One Get One
By
Peter and Michael Sheehan
The Last Bite Band

Early in the morning-fog is rollin in-Cruising down the boulevard
There you are-...

"MIKE’S SONG" "Lyrics"-"Crytic"- "Pop Rock"- "Rock"  Not rated yet
MIKE’S SONG
Written by
Peter and Michael Sheehan
The Last Bite Band
I girl, feel it’s time to say this thing to you
It’s time girl, I give you my ...

I would fight the gods for you (country-blues) - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
My first song. Hope u guys like it

my life has no meaning
Im a provider thats it
i have nothing to strive for
i am cursed i am broken

but you ...

NOT BLAMING YOU-"Lyrics"-"Critique"- "Progressve Rock"  Not rated yet
NOT BLAMING YOU
By
Peter and Michael Sheehan
The Last Bite Band

I wait the time of forever (Its Eternity) without you
If only you were there by ...

dream wedding - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
this is perfect
everything id reamed
have my something borrowed and something blue
im so lucky to marry you

my white dress
its strapless
with a ...

A little lovesong critique - Acoustic Pop Song  Not rated yet
When I
look into your eyes
I'm lost
and telling myself lies
That I
can't be in love with you
(oh - with you)


With the way you walk
and the ...

Cruel Lyrics critique- Rap and Pop  Not rated yet
I am only 13 so yeah and this is my first time writing a song so dont judge it too harshly...but do judge it on what you think of it


Cruel
V1 I ...

Burn - Lyrics Critique -Pop  Not rated yet
I thought i had you
bu you slipped right outta my hand
I said I loved you
in hopes that you could be my man
but...

You break me (break me)
You ...

Lonely Roamer- soft pop - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Ok this was a song that just kind of popped in to my head so it may not be too good, but please give me your opinion! I did put thought to it though!

She ...

Maya Lyrics Critique - Ska, Reggae Song  Not rated yet
This is a song about a girl who enjoys having fun. I hope you understand what i am trying to convey in this song. Thank you

Maya

Hey, Maya
Did you ...

No Power Over Me (Pop Genre) - lyric critique  Not rated yet
No Power Over Me
Potential for David Archuleta’s Anti-Bullying Campaign
©dave koehne, 2011


What on earth are you doing?
Turning these 8-hours into ...

this house of hate. rap. lyrics discussion  Not rated yet
this is my first attempt for writing lyrics and i think its pretty good here check for your self; this house of hate.

walkin the door,just disgusted ...

the Secretive Strength of Animal Worship- lyrics critique  Not rated yet
The Secretive Strength of Animal Worship

VERSE
there are some things so closely guarded
sealed tightly in a metal case
the case is held together ...

Apologetic Lyrics Critique- Slow Pop Song  Not rated yet
I'm sorry
for what i've done
i know it wasn't right
but baby you're the one
call me crazy
just lemme be your girl
for once i've found someone
...

Forget You Lyrics Critique- Pop/R&B Song  Not rated yet
Every time I see ya
I just wanna kiss ya
you're my wanna be lover
and my best best friend
but there is a problem
you don't even want me
you just ...

Here we go again - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
It is about a crush moving away & you care so much after they hurt you so badly.

Verse 1:
Can We please make this fast
So I can go home, think it ...

Father's Day Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1: I’m not afraid of living
You changed me so I could do that
From when I was a baby
To who I am now
You stood and reminded me
I was still just ...

Untitled lyrics critique -- pop/rock  Not rated yet
Well, I'm a complete novice when it comes to writing lyrics, so feedback is really important to me. There is a story to this song, but I've tried not ...

"Mamas' Little Man Lyrics Critique - Country song"  Not rated yet
I would like Hard critique on structure more than content although any input will be greatly appreciated.

Little boy walking
down a gravel road
To ...

A Secret in My Heart - Country Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Pretending as much as I want, make no difference,
Do you wonder for how long this would last?
How high we really must surge before a fall?
Chorus
At ...

marym lyrics critique pop rock - lost  Not rated yet
hi plz tell me how to make this better .
LOST

i thught you couldve changed but i guess i always knew the ship was sinking
well i ...

Petra- The waves of the ocean- lyrics critique- slow tempo  Not rated yet
Let me know what you think, I think it is useful for a slow tempo song.

Titelsong: the waves of he ocean

Verse:

I think life is like a musical ...

"Not Alone" - Rap, Pop, Metal Lyrics Discussion  Not rated yet
Ayeyo this is just the intro to this song of this mixtape i'm making, let me know if it really reaches out to you

Intro:
Its our march through the ...

Together (Ballad) - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
ballad (focused on teenage pregnancy for some reason??)


TOGETHER


theres a place I know its better
Than the state i'm in just now
Driving through ...

Chewing gum pavements (sidewalks) rock/grunge lyrics discussion  Not rated yet
a medium tempo look at nightlife in a small town.

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CHEWING GUM PAVEMENTS



Freinds of freinds ...

Unobtainable (Engaged tone) Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is a dark kinda grungey tune (and please folks i'm not some mad stalker type, just wanted to try and express a broken relationship in a darker way)...

Beautiful mind Lyrics critique-Soul  Not rated yet
Verse-
Girl I'm in'trested in who you are
And your eyes shine like just little stars

And i see the beauty that you are
Sites like---when two stars ...

AndyL.UK. Savannah Falls. Please Critique. THIS IS A REDRAFT  Not rated yet
Just got told I haven't got any rhythm. I would love to prove them wrong........ BUT I CANT SING A NOTE! HELP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Savannah ...

I can't see -Lyrics critique - indie song  Not rated yet
love, it's just strange
It's just sitting there, just out of my range
But i can see it so clearly now
What i wanna understand is how

The pain sours ...

The story of flings. - Alternative, Indie, Crude. Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse One:
Where have you gone? I wish I knew,
Where have you been when I need you,
You are so far and yet so near,
I can't even smile without ...

Hopeless Romantic - Acoustic Rock - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Haven't been here in a while
Had no intentions of coming back
But things will slip and slide
And amounts of depressants won't lack

The place that ...

Whore boy Lyrics Critique - Indie/Alternative song  Not rated yet
Nobody deserves what you put them through
While the disdain comes from my point of view, as we wade through the strife
Arising a small sense of pity
...

The Bouquet Lyrics Critique - Indie song  Not rated yet
Steel structures tear down my dreams
Shoved in front of tidal schemes
Plastic power pushes us down
Enveloping me asking them to drown

The pieces ...

"I do" Lyrics Critique - Country/Pop  Not rated yet
When all else fails
You loose your belief those fairy tails
What's the point anyway
It's not prince charming is every coming for me
I just wait and ...

Your Story Lyrics Critique- Acoustic/Rock Song  Not rated yet
Deep in my heart
I felt the tug of your smile
Tatooing my with feelings
That I've never had.
When I'm without you
I fall to the sky
Breaking my ...

Your Story Lyrics Critique- Acoustic/Rock Song  Not rated yet
Deep in my heart
I felt the tug of your smile
Tatooing my with feelings
That I've never had.
When I'm without you
I fall to the sky
Breaking my ...

"Gazing Eyes" Lyrics Critique Rock song  Not rated yet
Gazing eyes Can see forever
Focused eyes see short

How do we know where we belong
If everybody tells us what’s right and wrong

I know this world ...

want to be peter pan lyrics critique- alternative  Not rated yet
I can’t forget what I was and what I became
The more things change more I don’t want be in this game
I never get my numbers on this ...

Enchant Me lyrics critique- No genre yet but most likely metal or rock along those lines  Not rated yet
I'm only putting a little bit of mine...
Look around tell me what you see
Tell me what you see
Smile as you fall and hit the ground
Do you feel the ...

No Title Lyrics Critique- Punk/Pop song, Somewhat of an up tempo  Not rated yet
I'm getting back into writing lyrics, I'm in a band now and I'm hoping to really get somewhere with it. For us it's about the music and at times, the message ...

Love of a Lifetime - lyric critique- rock (kind of lengthy)  Not rated yet
it's been such a long time
I should be already over you
but you're still in my dreams
everyday and night
why did your heart
have to take a flight,...

Better Off From The Start -Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
to have had love and lost it,
is better than to never had loved at all,
I'd like to make an argument against that,
because i dont think that you know ...

Just Not the One for Me - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Do you wonder if this chance your gonna take will lead the right path
Do you ever think just for a second that he might not be the one for you
Babby ...

"Take It Lyrics Critique" pop-rock  Not rated yet
“Take it”

That one, you want it, but what you want you just can’t have
Step one, move on in, get there first before they grab
What you want, its yours ...

*No Title Yet* Lyrics Critique-Pop/Rock?  Not rated yet
This is a song that I wrote a long time ago about my biological father who has never been there. It doesnt have a title yet but I really want some comments ...

Sadist Lyrics - Rock song - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I've been writing ever since i got into middle school, but I've never been that good with songs, but now im hopping since I feel alot of emotion about ...

Lyrics Critique - It doesnt have a name yet? nor a genre  Not rated yet
First time i have ever written anything


I may be scared but for the new life
The one know one knows
And i hope i will never live
Not just yet, not ...