Lyrics Critique for Songwriters

Broken heart for free (Guitar,drums,keyboard. It's kinda fast) 
Well, it's often girls who do "everything" for there boyfriends,and stuff like that.
My sister was like that,so i got inspiration from that. The boy broke ...

Marc "?" Lyrics Critique 
It is not completely finished, I am working on a bridge, but this it what I have so far. I don't have a name for this yet, I could use a little help. As ...

why should i stay (pop/country) - lyrics critique 
i am only 13 so the lyrics might sound cheezy but i tried

While you were staring into space
i was staring at your face
and thinking to myself that ...

Garden of EVE - lyrics critique 
Hook)

Why did you leave? the garden of Eve,
your beauty must be for me, Sent
from the Heavens above, a prayer with love love....

(lyrics)

Your ...

fly away with me - lyrics critique 
We look away just for a moment
we stare as far as out eyes can see.

we dont know when, or where, or how,
this perfect love, it came to be.

fly ...

OMG lyrics critique - pop 
I don't like it a lot but I think it might have potential. If you have any advice please tell me!!!! I am still thinking of a title.

V1. Kissing, hugging,...

Lightning - Lyrics Critique 
One of my first ones. Hope you like it. :)

Lightning:

2AM and it rains outside,
The room is cold and dark,
Darker than the moonlight tonight.

And ...

The Fool's Shame- Pop - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1: Baby the love life or a western
Realize that there’s one way to find
That long dark light footed mind
In the deepest burnt hard infection
Conditions ...

"What If" Lyrics Critique- Acoustic song 
You always told me not to waste my time on you
For some reason I didn’t listen
I fell for you so easily
How could I be so blind

Every time I was ...

Guitar - short version - lyrics critique 
With tired eyes he opens the door
And grabs his only consolation
Alot goes through his mind
As he seeks the right vibration

Inspiration he is missing
...

"I'd Never do that to you" Lyrics Critique - Alternative Rock Song 
This is the first song I've ever written....(so I don't mind if you don't like it). It's about a relationship where the girl messes up and the boyfriend ...

waiting lyrics critique 
green’s only emerald
after the rain
numb’s only comfort
after the pain

fire’s only warmth
after we’re cold
we only feel young
after we’re old
...

(no title yet - lyric critique 
Turn up your television
turn it up high
i dont want to hear them
i dont want to cry
sometimes it confusing
sometimes its bruising
Their using words
...

"Someday lyrics"- Slow pop song  
this is my first song and i wanted to see how you liked it! Please be honest even if it's harsh!

(Chorus)

Verse 1:
Someday,
i won't feel this pain....

Mackenzie Lyrics Critique - Pop w/ piano, acoustic guitar. kinda fast beat. 
(Verse 1)
I see you and I have to know
What's you're name and where do you go
I send you a smile and
You look down and smile too

You got me wondering-...

"Something Changed" Lyrics Critique -- Alternative/Pop, Midtempo 
A little background... basically about a guy who runs into trouble with his girlfriend who doesn't stay true to herself, and gives him a hard time. He ...

Obama Save Me - Lyrics Feedback 


You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘ve been turned down more than a bed spread,
at the local Holiday Inn.
I see big ...

Lost Cause Lyrics Critique- R&B  
All i have so far is the chorus and the first verse. but i just wanted to know what you think and how could i improve it.

Chorus: Baby girl we're just ...

"At Day's End" - Alt country/rock - looking for feedback/critique 
v1
As you lay down in your sleepy town
with sunflowers outside your window
they gently toll as the night winds blow
waiting for the morning to come
...

so many fears - lyrics critique - rap 
hey i wrote this rap based on the soldiers in the war, I'm a beginner so ill take positive and negative comments all on board. cheers.


on your chest ...

Through with you- adult alternative- lyrics critique 
(1st verse)
You have to be the one to tell me
About all the things i didn't know
What are the answers to my questions
Tell me the direction I should ...

Title: Unknown Lyrics Feedback/critque-Alternative rock 
another song wriiten by my friend Wade Patry. He has been on a writing storm latley, anyway just wondering what other people thought about this song. It'...

In Her Eyes Lyrics Critique- Alternative rock or Rock 
My friend wrote this song for our band. We don't have the music yet but that's a working progress. I'm the lead guitar and lead vocals and I was wondering ...

lost (lost without u) - lyric critique 
chorus
lost (lost without u)
lost (lost without u)
im lost
verse 1
being lost without u is like a battle ive just lost no one ther to love me the ...

New York Lullaby Lyrics Critique - Australia 
New York Lullaby is a true story that I was inspired to write after meeting "tommy", homeless since returning from the Vietnam war, in Washington Square ...

Better Off, Pop/Rock - Lyric Critique 
Hey, so right now with this song i've been playing it with an acoustic guitar. I've been detating speeding it up and turning it into more of a pop/rock ...

You and I - R&B, pop, anythin really - lyrics critique 
its called you and i, i hope u guys like it. im trying to see who might be intersted in making this a real song. i've contacted record producers etc.


chorus
...

When You Get There - lyrics critique 
Hi. I wrote this for my 8-year-old daughter, who is certain she will be among the first group of astronauts to travel to Mars. And you know what? I pretty ...

beautiful lyrics critique - rock 
some words unspoken
some things left undone
some feelings unexpressed
but you're so graceful
that i must say so

your eyes are hopeful
full of ...

Do you remember lyrics critique 
hey this is my first song so I hope ya all like it


Do you remember the first time we met
i didn't know you nor would i forget
I thought that i should ...

I'd Do Anything (Lyric idea. Need help!!)  
This is a song I'm writing for my grandpa. A couple years ago, he almost died and so I'm writing a song about it. I've got one line for the first verse ...

We All Fall Down Lyrics Critique - Power Ballad? 
Wrote this a while back after going through some stuff. What do you think?


It's the strangest feeling,
like diving down
into emptiness.
Just to ...

Timeless Tragedy Lyrics Critique - Unfinished/Undecided genre 
Half the man he has to hide
Half of him is trapped inside
The shelter of dark hides him away
In this prison he must stay

When the day breaks, the ...

Saying Goobye - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1:
So there we were sitting by the bay.
Thinking about what we had to say.
saying goodbye was my foremost regret.
by myself watching the sun ...

Heros- Lyrics Critique- country- by Lonnie 
Here's a song I wrote about two family members. A lot of songs are just made up stories but this one is very real. The first verse is about my 12 year ...

Guitars That Won't Stay in Tune- Lryric critique -country -by Lonnie 
Let me know what you think. Be rough I can handle it. Thats the only way I can get better

Guitars That Won't Stay In Tune

You can bitch and gripe ...

BEST SERMON EVER SEEN Country lyrics by Charlie in Alabama 
Best Sermon Ever Seen

He never failed to give
When someone was in need
I’d seen him work with his bare hands
Until his hands would bleed
He was ...

Fake Smile Lyrics Critique 
I wrote this about a girl that I really like, it is about my feelings that I kept to myself about her and her boyfriend. I actually wrote this in real ...

Time Wasted Lyrics Critique 
Chorus
I don't know why I waste my time
Cause I'll never change your mind
Even though I was always there
You never cared

Verse 1
I've wasted all ...

Bumpy ride (slow pop) - lyrics critique 
only 13 don't trash please


Every open mind
has a closed door waiting behind
is the world ready for you
and are you ready too?
going into the ...

her romeo (pop/country) -lyrics critique 
thsi is a recent song but please keep in mind that i am only thirteen so you can critizise but don't be to harsh....

Its an age old story
filled with ...

what girls do (country/pop) - lyrics critique 
i am 13 and i wrote this in like 5 mins so it might be bad... don't be to harsh


I'm gonna use my hair brush as a microphone
dance aroung my room ...

"Why do you hang up? Lyrics Critique- R & B Song" 
Hey guys hw do u feel this one.
Pliz focus on the foll areas:
1.Message.
2.Can you feel the emotions in the song.
3.Use of language.
4.Structure ...

Lovers Pop R&B soft rock - lyrics critique 
lovers
I know that i, I know that we, and could we be lovers,
How could their be any other lover.......

I know that i, I know that we, and could ...

He's all you need -lyrics-christian 
V1 He spoke the stars into place in the sky
He healed the lepers, and heard the blind mans cry
he took time for the children
and set them onHis knee
...

Someday Never Turns Today Lyrics Critique - Country Song 
Someday Never Turns Today

Verse 1 (A)
A head full of plans and a heart full of dreams
A one way ticket and she’s on her way
Sweet child of sorrow ...

I Will Be Me - Pop Song - Lyrics Feedback 
You said "Don't even try
You've lost your mind
Things will change
For the worst
It's gonna hurt
And you'll never be the same
When you fall and hit ...

Sunshine - lyrics Critique 
Im sick of all these cloudy skies,
Hope tomorrow brings a sunrise
Cause I miss seeing my sunshine
Oh my sunshine where did you go

When we talk my ...

The Final Scene And The Air We Breathe Lyrics Critique - Acoustic/Alternative 
And are you always this serious? (Tell me now)
And are you always this delirious? (Tell me now)
Cause I've been blaming myself more then you know
How ...

Breathe- Lyrics Critique-  
So this is the first song that i have written. i still feel like i should work on it .
this is has like a slow/spacey acoustic sound lol . tell me what ...

"My Life So Far - Pop/Punk" - Lyric Critique 
This is the story of my life
I gotta worn you it is a fight
But there are still a lot of challenges ahead
I couldn?t make it without my true friends
...

Breaking The Silence lyrics critique- pop punk/emo 
V1: On the warm nights, when we felt that way

All the cold sweats, that we had that day

On the drive home, that we just could not explain

To the ...

Nerds of the World Lyrics Critique 
Girls we all go for the same type of guy
the jocks the rockstars
the dreamy eyes
well i say it's time for a change
soooooo

Heres to the nerds the ...

Stood With my Back to the Wind - Lyrics Critique 
I grew up a drifter
my eyes on the rainbow
with colors
that fade in the rain
dreams of the highway
that came to me nightly
I tried to resist
but ...

Tired - Lyrics Critique 
okay this one is not a typical song it doesnt really have a structure but it means alot...

Tired

My eyes are open under these sheets,
My body feels ...

Im So Sorry Lyrics Critique-Kate Carlon(Please dont steal)-Pop/Rock 
Verse 1:
I've Written them down a time or two,
But I just cant find the words to say to you,
I'm sorry things ended the way they did,
But don blame ...

Nora Lyrics critique- Soul 
I am a total beginner so feel free to rip me to shreds.I know this needs a ton of work


"The easy target"

Rueful looks, I never seem to forget
The ...

Untitled Lyrics Critique - Goth/Rock 
Written a while ago, always liked it. Needs Improvement, What do you think?

I feel your eyes burning through my skin
I feel your breath on the wind
...

Wise Girl lyrics critique - country/soft rock 
this is my first song any feedback and constructive criticism would be much appreciated.

First verse

I’ll never lose the memory of that Saturday ...

You Won't Be The Same- Pop Song - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1
You were amazing
You were awesome
I thought you were the one that I needed in my life
But people can change
And you really did

Chrous...

Judge me on By James Cook Rap / Rock -Lyric Critique 

judge me on the way

i hustle and make my stacks

Big rubber bans, Every stack is a 100,grand

Chill in london to Japan. if ya been there than ...

Lyric Critique : Somewhere Out There (Pop) 
Somewhere out there I see a shining star
Waiting out in the night for all to see
What can I wish ?
What can I hope for ?
All I can do is tell myself ...

Not So Victimless Lies (were not ok) - Lyrics Critique- Pop punk 
This is one of the songs from our band, RetroGrade. Just starting to get into the local scene and wanted to see exactly what people think of the words ...

Give Me A Break- Pop Music Lyrics Critique 
Homework assignment due tomorrow
Don't forget about the science project
Research paper due next week
Remember that book your reading
Soccer practice ...

Speechless lyrics critique 
This is a song I wrote about this guy at school that I have a crush on. Lemme know whatcha think. Advice or suggestions for changes welcomed/appreciated ...

I'm Sorry Lyrics Critique 
chorus

I'm sorry I'm sorry
for all the things that I've put you through
o please o please
please don leave i need you (love you) x2

verse 1
...

Stutter - Lyrics Critique 
this tension plucks my hair like tightly wound guitar strings
and every time I push Im pulled back and Im trying to breathe

and the smell gets stronger
...

Things Will Be Better Tomorrow - Rock - Lyrics Critique 
so i made this song up for my band and i need honest feedback on it thanks guys!

As you bear a burden of what used to be
as your are mending your shattered ...

A little to late. Lyrics Critique- Love kinda song. 
A little late:
It’s the middle of summer
chilling with friends,
having a good ole time
you walked through those doors
like a wave hitting the shores
...

"7 digits" critique country pop  
7 digits running through my head
I walk into my house
First thing
I grab a notebook and a pen

Then I realize I won’t have to write it down
Cause ...

"lyrics" critique rock 
I cant figure out a song title for this : ((( But anyway, please tell me if you like the song or not : )))


Take my heart
Its not worth the fight
...

: Lyrics - Critique: Alternative/Screamo song? 
Okay--so, basically this song is pretty self-explanatory. i know that this isn't very good, but i'm a beginner. i'm only 13:). help me out? constructive ...

At The Gates Lyrics Critique- Metal song 
At The Gates (Written By Martin Synan)

This is a song I wrote about The Lord Of The Rings

(Slow intro)

There is a day when the world of men will ...

flashback - lyrics critique 
Could people please comment on this one i am only young and just been writing for about 6-7 months please could someone feedback on this. the first bit ...

Blue Tonight Lyric Critique - Pop Ballad 
Gave you everything you wanted
Gave you nothing that you need
Like a mighty oak tree you stood tall and strong
But I cut you down and watched you bleed
...

Looking out My Window Lyric Critique-folks song 
Looking out my window, my
back against the wall,
I hear thunder
and I wonder
when the rain is gonna fall.

Looking out my window,
skies dark as ...

leave me be - lyrics critique 
chorus:::
you were so nice and we were friends
but then you had to go and get in my space

you think its love
but you are so wrong
so leave me ...

OUT OF CONTROL country Lyrics Critique By Charlie from Alabama 
He was her man
So with the back of his hand
He would remind her time after time
He?d watch the miles on her car
If she drove too far
It would drive ...

A Drop In The Ocean- -lyrics critique 
Heyy this is my first song i wrote it for my girlfriend


A drop in the ocean,
A change in the weather,
I was praying that you and me might end up ...

See you again Lyrics Critique- pop  Not rated yet
well i wrote this long ago, before knowing this website.. its my first ever written song n i know its not really good.. ! so tell me what you think about ...

Lyrics Critique RAP LYRICS CRITIQUE "EYE SPY"  Not rated yet
My attempt at writing a rap, let me know you'r thoughts or if there is anyone interested in my lyrics i would like to here from you.. These lyrics are ...

Thats Just My Father In Me lyrics critique - Christian  Not rated yet
I know who I am, I'm such a rechid man
But all we like sheep have gone astray.
Selfishness and pride, then I run and hide
Each one of ushas turned to ...

Just One More Ride lyrics critique - country  Not rated yet
Well i got up at five o'clock this mornin
And I went straight to work.
Started mendin those old fences
With all that I was worth
But the fields got ...

Something I Missed Lyrics Critique - Adult Alternative   Not rated yet
Theres this bang bang pounding baby right here in my head
I ain’t got no alibi for whatever it is I said
I wish you goodnight and sleep out here alone
...

Same Way-lyric critique and verse input R&B  Not rated yet
Baby, what if I said I didn't love you...
quite the same way that you love me?
What would it change? Would you hate me?
Would you take away the love ...

Alter or the Door Lyrics Critique- christian  Not rated yet
v1. can you imagine how it would feel
to come into this house,
and not feel the power that used to flood your soul?
To stand here like a stranger ...

we checking out - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
a talk
Where we going:?
We going to par…..ty

chorus
Lets par……..ty
Lets party
Man, woman
come party
Boys, girls
come party
Shake, shake,...

Simple thought Lyrics Critique- Acoustic   Not rated yet
I’ve been awake for days,
thinking of how I should write this
it seems like every line I right is a mess
Every word sounds bitter.
Every line reveals ...

broken girl - lyric critique - no genre  Not rated yet
this broken girl
with the broken soul
this broken world
can't you see her life is broken

she's living a lie
she's hiding a truth
behind a bad ...

Note In My Back Pocket Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
One of my older songs


Friday night there’s a chance I want to take
Everyone is saying don’t pass it away
And so my decision is made
I’ve got a ...

This Is My Song Titled "Changes" - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1

I Don’t Know Who You Are Anymore.
You Are One Thing One Second Then Something Different The Next.
Who Are You, Who Are You.
I Just Don’t ...

poise - lyric critique  Not rated yet
this shadow towers
from a lack of power
when reality seems
to fit nightmares for dreams

when all that could
stops what should
the infinite ways
...

Love between Us Lyrics Critique - Country Song  Not rated yet
Love between Us

Verse 1 (A)
The candlelight is dancing with the wind
In the deep blue of the twilight sky
It’s just me, you, the moon and the music
...

Music of the Wind Lyrics Critique - Pop Song  Not rated yet
Music of the Wind

Verse 1 (A)
We don’t need the sunlight, we’ve got the moonlight
Letting your emotions show
Nothing else matters when I’m holding ...

Lost In Your Daze Lyrics Lyrics Critique - Pop Song  Not rated yet
Lost In Your Daze

Verse 1 (A)
She’s the sunrise when she smiles
That wakes me like the morning sun kiss
She’s a river that flows down a stream
That ...

Someday - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
I lost my sanity
I'm falling so deeply
Into a deep, dark hole
Lost in the middle
What's wrong with me?

I've lost my way
I should've gone another ...

I'll be there - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I need to recongize what we have been
We're like Batman and robin, friends through thick'n thin.
I want you to know theres no way i could ever ...

Christmas Joy - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Um.... This is like a little pome/song sorta thing but I figured you people out there might like the hear it so hope you like it!



This is the time ...

I Still Dream of Jeannie - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I STILL DREAM OF JEANNIE

c1994 Brian Beecher


As I sat alone
I turned on the radio
I heard a girl I knew
Who now has her own DJ show

I had ...

God Doesn't Only Take the Good - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
This is my first stab at this so be gentle.:)

This is a country song that starts out slow in the first verse and picks up some pace as it goes.

You ...

Saving Home Lyrics - Soft Rock - Critique  Not rated yet
These lyrics aren't finished yet and was just wondering if people would be able to give me some suggestions on how to finish it. I've got few song lyrics ...

Memories - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hey Guys, I have never written a song before so please don't be too harsh... It's not great but improvements would be great :) .

As tears fall down ...

"Gray Skies" Lyrics critique (alternative rock?)  Not rated yet
"Gray Skies" Lyrics Minor Key

ntro
Rain on me will ya?
Downpour your loves' rain drops.
I'll use no umbrella,
Because I want to be filled to ...

"i'm not going" lyrics critique (alternative rock? Jazz?)  Not rated yet
"I'm Not Going" Lyrics

Chorus
I'm not going; (intro starts "I don't wanna go;" instead)
No, not today.
I need you here;
I need you to stay.
And ...

"Farcry" Lyrics Critique (alternative rock?)  Not rated yet
"Far Cry" Lyrics

Verse 1
I want all of this, this in front of me.
I want that, only a finger tip away.
I want what's over there, just a couple ...

STOP lyrics review - Opinions  Not rated yet
I know it would never come true
But the moments I’m dreaming of you,
It all comes up to me
And I know what I’ll do.

Stop playing with my heart.
Stop ...

ill write a song for you - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
(verse 1)
ill write a song for you
oh, not cause you asked me to
but cause i want to, i want to
write a song for you

(verse 2)
to make your heart ...

sunshine rewritten - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
song bout my ex boyfriend of 5 years. i called him my sunshine because he was the only thing that lightened up each day, til he did a complete 180 and ...

Untitled- rock- critique please?  Not rated yet
I dont know how good this is, i wrote it quickly, but id love some feedback and opinions


(verse one)
of all The places ive gone wrong
this may be ...

Miss Molly lyrics critique- Indie song  Not rated yet
Hi been writing scince i was 14, just need some feed back on a few songs, i have a passion for music and would love to be a professional songwriter

Here ...

"Yet! lyrics critique"-Kinda fast  Not rated yet
okay this song is a little rough so please help!

Verse:
How could you want me forever?
i almost see you never!

my heart is lost,
how much pain ...

Mackenzie- Lyrics Critique - (Same song but i re-wrote it) upbeat, sorta fast song  Not rated yet
(Verse 1)
I see you and I have to know
What's you're name and where do you go
I send you a smile and
You look down and smile too

You got me wondering-...

Lyrics Critique - Gospel song  Not rated yet
"Grandma,I Want To Go To Heaven Too!"

Has she flip herself on the couch

Her long curtly hair and big blue eye

She said I Want to go to heaven ...

Don't Let It End Critique - Rock/Punk Rock  Not rated yet
This song is supposed to be pretty tounge-in-cheek


I found out today
She just don?t give a fuck
But with a little bit of luck
I?ll get this girl ...

Yesterdays Coffee , Charlie from Alabama Country Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Yesterdays Coffee

I woke up this morning
Alone in our bed
I remember a fight
But not much that was said
Drinking makes me stupid
When I’...

Pick Me Up - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I'm looking to see if there is any suggestions to make my song better or if my song is any good.


Sittin around a bar one day
drinkin up my hard earned ...

You could have been the one- country style - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Did you think before you did it?
What would happen to my heart?
That It would shatter into pieces
And I’d be back at the start

Last night while ...

Restless Eye Syndrome- Pop music - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
If I’ve seen only one thing
It’s how hazardous this sight can be
I picked up my clothes and others
I’m out for the night, foresight I blame you

Verse ...

AFTER THE CLUB - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
THE MUSIC IS PLAYIN LOUD LIKE THE BEAT OF A DRUM YOUR BODY IS SO AMUSING WAY YOU GO DOWN HIT THE THE FLOOR

I DONT EVEN KNOW YOUR NAME
I DONT EVEN KNOW ...

How can you? Lyrics Critique- Mellow Rock  Not rated yet
I wrote another one. This is without hearing feedback on my other one, so the same mistakes will probably be here as well. This one actually has a chorus ...

Always lyrics critque/country It's an appreciation of my family, how things were then and now etc... kind of a "Tequlila Sunrise" meter  Not rated yet
My family always taught me good from bad
to come at life with everything I had
They were strong, they passed it along

I can look back and see all ...

Broken Hearts and Dead Dreams- Lyrics Critique- No genre  Not rated yet
Just pretty much a ballad. Maybe a slow rock song. There isn't a chorus, just a few stanzas. I might be adding a few later on, but this is what I have ...

I Miss You lyrics critique - undecided  Not rated yet
Verse 1. Remember all the times we had. The things we did. We caused disturbia in our own way. People didn't understand.

Chorus. And now I just roll ...

Untilted Song Lyrics Critique - Indie Rock Song  Not rated yet
VERSE 1: Every day I try to get things right
But I swear I'm moving on the wrong flight
But it makes no difference to you
You're moving on this wrong ...

Dark Prisoner lyrics.......dont know genre..  Not rated yet
Oh, just to tell you i didnt put my real name.
i kind of thought of these out of the blue...got the idea when i happened to come upon this vid on youtube ...

Gone Lyrics Critique -Country Music  Not rated yet
I am 10 yrs. old and love writing songs. I am working on a song right now and this is all I have so far. Please tell me if this is a good start, comment,...

I Don't Know How to Think - Soft Rock/Acoustic Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hey these aren't the first lyrics I've written but the first one I really feel for. I want to make sure they're good before I try to write a melody, because ...

Father Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Whenever I look in the mirror,
I can see you staring back at me.
I'm a picture perfect image of you.
I've been countin down the years,
Got tired of ...

"Tim's Song" Lyrics Critique-Country  Not rated yet
The suicide of my cousin inspired this song. A little depressing and kinda long I know but I had to get it out. Let me know what you think.



You ...

Hold On - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is a song i wrote for a high school assembly about being close to God... I've performed it a few times and just wanted some real feedback.


I ...

Live For You - inspirational/gospel (lyric critique)  Not rated yet
verse1 You woke me up today
It was'...

Goof - lyric writring - critique  Not rated yet
Chorus: (sung)
Hey girl
you know you coulda been my world
for ever my everything
i miss you girl
you know i just wanna kiss you girl
even when ...

Kiss Me I'm Dead-POP - Lyric writing - critique  Not rated yet
Moo rah ah
Moo rah oh la
Ba ba bum bum
Da da huh

Verse 1: Your touch is grey
Your kiss is cold
Don’t stare at me too long
I only came to not ...

The Night The Devil Danced With Me - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
This is my first attempt at songwriting. It's rather crude in my own assessment, but it led me to bigger and better things like "Lazy Days of Summer" and ...

Broken Sally Lyrics Critique- Goth/ Hard Rock song  Not rated yet
I am a doll, of such beauty
play with me. Though I am small
I can handle anything.
Twirl me around, make me feel free.
Here is my heart it's yours ...

Song Title= A single thing "lyrics" and "critique" Genre=Pop/Country  Not rated yet
Verse(1)what if it starts raining and don't have your boots or umbrella what if it starts snowing and you don't have a scarf or a sweter and what if you'...

Just a dream-Pop song lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Hi this is my second song the first was Goodbye, Goodbye was a fictional song about suicide.This song is about a dream that I had with the girl I love ...

Violins, Pop-Punk - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Music is the only I believe. It gets me through the hard times and is there when my friends aren't. Music you are my inspiration for this song.


my ...

Humanity Depends On Us Lyrics Critique - Alternative/Pop-Punk  Not rated yet
This is the most unstructured song I have ever written. There's no chorus but i love the meaning, and thats all that matters.




Have my words already ...

"Running away" rock lyrics critique  Not rated yet
I wrote this song in a day so tell me what you think : ))


Running away
Barely breathing
Trying to find a meaning to my life
Running faster
Its ...

Goodbye Lyrics Critique -Metal song  Not rated yet
Verse 1:

Why do I live?
Does God enjoy this?
Does He like to see me
Walking down to the abyss?
Does He have fun?
To see me suffering
Because ...

this is a love song its called - why love hurts - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Why love hurts

Why is it that when I look at you im lost for words
Is because I love you so much it hurts .
Cant bare the thought of ...

Dream lyrics Critique - RnB/ soul  Not rated yet
I had that dream again
The one with you and me
The one where i had found you
And you were in my reach

Yours arms open wide
Standing in the distance
...

Afraid of Waking - lyrics critique- Rock song  Not rated yet
“Afraid of Waking”

Verse#1

I’m so afraid of waking from this dream

Life is full of heartache and fear
I’m so afraid please don’t shake me

Why ...

"Think About You" - Alternative - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Walking by you, It's the first day.
I never know the right words to say.
You say one word, maybe two.
but I never thought I'd lose sleep because of ...

All Mine-lyrics critique Rock  Not rated yet
This is my first song enjoy it:

Verse 1:

Since the first time I saw you
I can´t get you out of my head
Girl, I think you are the one
Oh baby ...

'Every Time' Lyrics Critique Acoustic/Pop  Not rated yet
(Verse one)
Every time, it’s something else,
You never take responsibility.
You think it’s wrong because we’re friends
But what matters is how it ...

It Even Snows in Mexico- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
I think it pours in Mexico

Hot press and I got my finger to your chest
Regret ...

Self Centred Woman - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
It's a typical situation every saturday night
They never ask u politely, always talkin real shite
Never show you respect, got they're impressions of ...

"Hard Life Lyrics Critique - Alternative and Punk"  Not rated yet
Im 17 years old and my girlfriend of 10 months dumped me for one of my friends and i just started writing songs two weeks ago so please tell me what you ...

Help me on the title! Lyrics Critique - Rock/Screamo Song  Not rated yet
Note: all CAPS are screams.


(VER1)
The subtle signs are what give you away
With every breath, I hear you screaming silently
I look into your eyes ...

Go! Robbie Go! By Robbie Rohr and Dave Badham - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Go! Robbie Go!
By Robbie Rohr and Dave Badham


V1) D
Start my day at flag raisin`,
G
Inspiration's what I'm saying`,
D ...

Rainbow Chaos Lyrics Critique - unknown genre   Not rated yet
A girl stands alone in the dusk of the morn
she bequeaths her life to the end of the world
One last melody she decides to sing to the world
Mixing memory ...

"CHANCES" BALLAD - SCOTT - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
written to try and inspire those with doubts, those who cannot lift themselves from the floor... we all go there sometimes.

CHANCES

For ...

Just writting some stuff off the top of my head to see what you guys think  Not rated yet
so you're out with your friends
seems you forgot me again
and its hard to know
you'd rather be there

and now I'm home all alone
just waitin here ...

Arrogance For Ars* Heads Lyrics - pop punk/pop rock  Not rated yet
im looking for critique on lyrics suggestions/revisions and 1-5 system


You've got a giant god complex for a religious guy i wonder how you got you'...

Let Her Be -Lyrics Critique -Acoustic  Not rated yet
I always try to prove to you
that I can be something that
you won't regret,but whats the sense
in that? I'll keep trying and I'm so
sure you won't ...

Santa Clause don't come down the Chimney - Charlie-- Country Lyric Crtique  Not rated yet
1st draft
It is too long
It is too sad
what do you think?




1st verse
We tell our children
Everyday,
Believe in God
We teach them how ...

hmmm...not sure yet - lyric critique  Not rated yet
ok..... so far i've only come up with a bridge and a chorus, i've written it for my cd production class so it might be reccored and put on a cd.

Chorus....

"Prison walls", country song, lyrics critique please  Not rated yet
I tried for so long to do
The best that I could
But in the end
I knew that I would

I turned to a life
Of robbin and stealin
I didn’t care about ...

Will I Be To Late lyrics critique- acoustic lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
V1: Ashes to ashes they all fall around me, Turning from ou to pick them back up.
Stop the abuse its tying my arms down, The fate of my life its all in ...

Meant to be Lyrics Critique - classic rock/Country  Not rated yet
Be as harsh as need be pls..., this song is for my GF and i will be playing at the hard rock hotel and casino for her.

Verse 1 As I watch this ...

Gabrielle Lyrics Critique - Rock/Pop Song  Not rated yet
I am looking for not a rough critique but not a soft critique either. I have a band but I am nothing but the song writer. So could you please critique ...

Nelli -Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Ba bum bum bum bum bum
Ha da da da da da

In a day she
Fills her needs
No other point of view
Nothing a skewed
Coming home to
Broken doors
Got ...

Memory Bank- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Here she is there she is here she comes
Coming home all alone no new story
She thinks she likes it that way
You see that woman on the street
She wants ...

Picture Frame - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Pictures in a frame
While I stumble down the stairs
Locked up tight, afraid what’s not inside
Indulge myself with what I have
Try to find a person ...

Cover Story- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Making the page on a Sunday day
Thinking no one’s there
Surprise they got you good
You just made your page
Accident was not the case
Cover your eyes ...

Choking Silence - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
A day like no other when you shine on me
Like the brightest star
You lead me through this life

But now the time is over
You had to go
Using the ...

Dream It Lyrics Critique- R&B/Pop Song"  Not rated yet
Verse;If you want love
(then go for it)
If you want Fame
(then reach for it)
If you Dream big
(then dream it, but if u dream it u gotta believe it)...

"Ride or Die Lyrics Critique -R&B Song"  Not rated yet
This is the first verse & Chorus i came up with please tell me what you think!! Be Honest!

Ride Or Die
(Intro-talking) You know i've been thinking,...

Performer or Normal Lyrics Critique - Pop Song  Not rated yet
I get on with life as a performer,
I'm a competitive kinda person.
I like singing all the time,
I like dancing during the week.
I like to complement ...

"Let It Be Dear Lord, Let It Be" lyrics critique Love Ballad  Not rated yet
Through this world of storm and strife
you bring peace into my life.
It brings me joy to be your wife.
With your strength, stand by me.
Stand by me....

The Last Thing I Need - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
It's over now I'm leaving
and then she turned to go
our time together haunts me
like a name I used to know.
When darkness falls in silence
I see in ...

no title (yet) lyrics critique-pop? song  Not rated yet
brand new...still rough around the edges. please rate what we got so far...


Verse 1:
Now I'm in disguise
Just walking right by
So no one can see ...

Eyes to the sky---Rock/Pop lyrics critique  Not rated yet
She said while Im stuck rollin with these pretty eyes
Im gonna run around and hang with all those fancy guys
got no time for trash like you
just sitting ...

"This Darkness" - rock- Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Awaken a dream
Take away my pain
Hold me close to you
Never run away

I call for you From out of this darkness
Reach in pull me through
When ...

Hail To Fire Lyrics Critique- Metal song  Not rated yet
Hail to Fire (written by Martin Synan)

(Intro)

Hail to fire!!! (scream)

(thrash riff)

Hail to Fire
Prayers of Death
Your time is up
And ...

On Your Way - Scott Lyrcis Critique, slow rock, alternative  Not rated yet
Are you happy with your life?
Fed up telling silly lies
It’s time to take some time to think
You are making yourself ill
There are places you can go
...

"Tired"? Lyrics Critique- Rock  Not rated yet
I've got lots of lyrics for songs, just trying to put them together finally. Tell me what you think. You don't have to be nice. I'd rather have good criticism ...

army of one -lyrics critique  Not rated yet
army of one
fighting for my only true love
army of one
Fightin for my only true love
I miss u soo
But I aint givin up

Why chu go
Left ...

I dont wan't to be- lyrics critique -r&b   Not rated yet
1st verse

I want to make love to you one last time
I want to undress you slowly and take my time
I want to wrap my arms around your hips
then ...

in the dark lyrics for critique unsure of genre  Not rated yet
Hi guys this is my 1st post, ive written a few lyrics but cannot read or play any music so unsure if this would work as a song, comments greatly appreciated....

Rowan's Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hey, my lyrics are for alternative rock songs, it's upbeat, fun. So tell me honestly what you think.



The suns burning brightly but not for long....

OBAMA SAVE ME! - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Written by Charlie in Alabama

You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘...

Kiaras lyric critique - love song   Not rated yet
Maybe if I stop pretending
it would be alright
I cant express this feeling
I cant speak my mind
And they tell me just talk about it
I cant just talk ...

I;'m Not In The Picture Anymore Charlie Country Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
I’m not in the picture anymore

I said, hey bartender,
Can I pay my tab?
He said “sure thing buddy,
Can I call you a cab?”
As I opened my wallet,...

This thing called fate - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
All alone , I spent my day

Hoping that you'd come way

But I just don't wanna be that girl who waits

on someone who won't come and find her someday
...

untittled so far (incomplete) lyrics critique - punk rock/rock  Not rated yet
Im new at this and i dont think im very good but im trying. please give me some feed back.

i ran out the door and got in my car
engine wouldnt start ...

between my years critique- rock song  Not rated yet
Do u feel dead to me
Do you feel humble
Don’t try to hide from me
Or your walls will crumble

Make your wings known
To all that it can Be
Fall into ...

Oh I Wonder - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I'm a beginer. And this is one of my first songs. Maybe the lyrics are kinda childish or stupid but they mean a lot for me. And I want to know others opinions....

broken heart (yours or mine) - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
(im still working on this plz leave some comments and give me tips)

Broken Heart (Yours Or Mine)

This broken heart whose could it be,
does it belong ...

When I Miss You Lyrics Critique - Ballad  Not rated yet
This is a very personal song for me, but i kept the person annonomous. It may need a lot of work because i'm young.

Verse 1:
Why does he
Say that ...

stronger - pop song - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i see the sky shining oh so bright tonight i understand were i will be tonight not with you but with me

i dont need you any more i don't see you ...

rae lyrics critique-contempory song  Not rated yet
He said he loved like he never loved
He said he cared liked he never cared
He said he’d love me till the end
He said he’d care for me till then

I ...

D.slickness Lyrics Critique - soft rock  Not rated yet
friends by D.slickness.
Verse 1.
We all have friends we don't wanna lose but what if they, what if they choose to go a different way or ...

"Manipulating" lyrics critique "Pop Song"  Not rated yet
I'm done this over and over again
cause i don't stop it from happening
i believe that you'll change
and i fall for the game
cause you're so manipulating ...

marked - lyric critique  Not rated yet
every day i see your face and i realize your just a dream i will never reach if only i could hold on a little longer maybe i would get to see the mark ...

the individual - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse1: just sit back and hear me out
This is a tale we all know about
I just keep it simple don’t wanna have to shout
Some may disagree yet I don’...

I'll Still be Loving You Ballad critique  Not rated yet
When reality is no longer a dream.
When forever is no longer long.
I'll still be loving you.

when laughter is no longer laughter
and pain is no longer ...

Julia Lyrics Critique - Blue Ballad  Not rated yet
Here for me (dedicated to every girl’s impossible love)

Chorus:
Oh, why can’t you be here for me?
I shouldn’t tell you that I love you
‘Cause we’...

But What If... Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Hey this is my first song so dont rip me too bad, i was gonna make it into a rock song
Any feedback can also be sent to footballfan634@gmail.com


If ...

Brave Fighter Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I am a brave fighter,
trying to overcome my fears.
Laughing out loud
is the way I shed my tears.

I am a brave fighter
cos my weakness
I must overcome....

Its a crazy world critique - rock song  Not rated yet
Its a crazy world, driving too fast
in the fast lane.
its a crazy world,
make me feel like going insane.

Its a crazy world,
look around.
its a ...

My Life, Rock, Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I've been here waiting
For someone to sweep me off my feet
I am depleading
I'm not quite sure what I need
Verse 2
I feel ...

"Dead" Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Okay so this is only my third song, so I'm still a beginner and I'm 11, so it's not the best. This song is about my best friend, he believes in the rumor ...

Dream Girl to Nightmare - Rock Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse (one line should take about one second)

I have a problem
I can't feel you near me
Only my broken heart

I feel like I'm dyin'
I can't stop ...

I'm Not Cinderella - acoustic - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
i wrote this song for my music assignment and would like to know what people think before i submit it :)

Once upon a time,
when nursery rhymes seemed ...

Memories - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I remember
When we were young
I remember
All the fun

Memories
Of u and me
Memories
Of just we

Playin round
All over town
Thought we were ...

"Solar Eclipse" Lyrics Critique - Indie  Not rated yet
There was this old watch
his grandpa gave to him
he broke it somehow
i can't remember
well, she gave it back to him
managed to repair
oh, how thankful ...

Catfishin' lyrics critique  Not rated yet
It aint finished yet i just got the idea for it ummm...
as you can see its the first verse and the chorus so just let me know what ya'll think




Verse ...

Flat screen - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I want it to be a great song but i dont have the musical instruments and its a fast pop, rock kinda song! let me know what you think?? you can email me ...

Happy Ending - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Is it you, the one that I have loved
The one God sent me from above
And have I found the man of my dreams

Now I don’t know where ...

Why be here? lyrics critique - soft, sad kinda sound  Not rated yet
needs a bit o work. any ideas would b HUGELY appreciated =]

I'm so messed up. And i don't know why. My thoughts and actions. Fell short of who I am....

Dissapointment lyrics critique  Not rated yet
ok well dis is actually a poem i wrote last year but someone said it myt make a good song. Not so sure so just wanting some feedback bout what u think ...

block me tonight lyrics critique- sad pop song  Not rated yet
V1.
You can’t block my path as I’m walking down the street yeh, you can’t block me as I’m gunna cross the road ‘uh oh, your not gunna block me tonight ...

For a friend lyrics critique- sad pop song  Not rated yet
verse 1
this is for a friend,
that,
makes you feel like you could acheve,
what ever your dreams tell you,
this could be something imposible,
but ...

Bobby (Bonnie Lyrics Critique - jazzy/folk song)  Not rated yet
Something I wrote a while ago so, tell me what you think.

Bobby get out of the fire tonight
Oh You keep me burning and my mouth is dry
It's like waiting ...