Lyrics Critique for Songwriters

Lyrics Critique for Songwriters

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Title: Unknown Lyrics Feedback/critque-Alternative rock 
another song wriiten by my friend Wade Patry. He has been on a writing storm latley, anyway just wondering what other people thought about this song. It'...

When You Get There - lyrics critique 
Hi. I wrote this for my 8-year-old daughter, who is certain she will be among the first group of astronauts to travel to Mars. And you know what? I pretty ...

Do you remember lyrics critique 
hey this is my first song so I hope ya all like it


Do you remember the first time we met
i didn't know you nor would i forget
I thought that i should ...

I'd Do Anything (Lyric idea. Need help!!)  
This is a song I'm writing for my grandpa. A couple years ago, he almost died and so I'm writing a song about it. I've got one line for the first verse ...

Saying Goobye - Lyrics Critique 
Verse 1:
So there we were sitting by the bay.
Thinking about what we had to say.
saying goodbye was my foremost regret.
by myself watching the sun ...

Heros- Lyrics Critique- country- by Lonnie 
Here's a song I wrote about two family members. A lot of songs are just made up stories but this one is very real. The first verse is about my 12 year ...

Guitars That Won't Stay in Tune- Lryric critique -country -by Lonnie 
Let me know what you think. Be rough I can handle it. Thats the only way I can get better

Guitars That Won't Stay In Tune

You can bitch and gripe ...

BEST SERMON EVER SEEN Country lyrics by Charlie in Alabama 
Best Sermon Ever Seen

He never failed to give
When someone was in need
I’d seen him work with his bare hands
Until his hands would bleed
He was ...

Breaking The Silence lyrics critique- pop punk/emo 
V1: On the warm nights, when we felt that way

All the cold sweats, that we had that day

On the drive home, that we just could not explain

To the ...

Nerds of the World Lyrics Critique 
Girls we all go for the same type of guy
the jocks the rockstars
the dreamy eyes
well i say it's time for a change
soooooo

Heres to the nerds the ...

Stood With my Back to the Wind - Lyrics Critique 
I grew up a drifter
my eyes on the rainbow
with colors
that fade in the rain
dreams of the highway
that came to me nightly
I tried to resist
but ...

Im So Sorry Lyrics Critique-Kate Carlon(Please dont steal)-Pop/Rock 
Verse 1:
I've Written them down a time or two,
But I just cant find the words to say to you,
I'm sorry things ended the way they did,
But don blame ...

Nora Lyrics critique- Soul 
I am a total beginner so feel free to rip me to shreds.I know this needs a ton of work


"The easy target"

Rueful looks, I never seem to forget
The ...

"My Life So Far - Pop/Punk" - Lyric Critique 
This is the story of my life
I gotta worn you it is a fight
But there are still a lot of challenges ahead
I couldn?t make it without my true friends
...

Speechless lyrics critique 
This is a song I wrote about this guy at school that I have a crush on. Lemme know whatcha think. Advice or suggestions for changes welcomed/appreciated ...

Tired - Lyrics Critique 
okay this one is not a typical song it doesnt really have a structure but it means alot...

Tired

My eyes are open under these sheets,
My body feels ...

Stutter - Lyrics Critique 
this tension plucks my hair like tightly wound guitar strings
and every time I push Im pulled back and Im trying to breathe

and the smell gets stronger
...

Things Will Be Better Tomorrow - Rock - Lyrics Critique 
so i made this song up for my band and i need honest feedback on it thanks guys!

As you bear a burden of what used to be
as your are mending your shattered ...

A little to late. Lyrics Critique- Love kinda song. 
A little late:
It’s the middle of summer
chilling with friends,
having a good ole time
you walked through those doors
like a wave hitting the shores
...

At The Gates Lyrics Critique- Metal song 
At The Gates (Written By Martin Synan)

This is a song I wrote about The Lord Of The Rings

(Slow intro)

There is a day when the world of men will ...

flashback - lyrics critique 
Could people please comment on this one i am only young and just been writing for about 6-7 months please could someone feedback on this. the first bit ...

Blue Tonight Lyric Critique - Pop Ballad 
Gave you everything you wanted
Gave you nothing that you need
Like a mighty oak tree you stood tall and strong
But I cut you down and watched you bleed
...

Looking out My Window Lyric Critique-folks song 
Looking out my window, my
back against the wall,
I hear thunder
and I wonder
when the rain is gonna fall.

Looking out my window,
skies dark as ...

Dream lyrics Critique - RnB/ soul  Not rated yet
I had that dream again
The one with you and me
The one where i had found you
And you were in my reach

Yours arms open wide
Standing in the distance
...

Afraid of Waking - lyrics critique- Rock song  Not rated yet
“Afraid of Waking”

Verse#1

I’m so afraid of waking from this dream

Life is full of heartache and fear
I’m so afraid please don’t shake me

Why ...

"Think About You" - Alternative - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Walking by you, It's the first day.
I never know the right words to say.
You say one word, maybe two.
but I never thought I'd lose sleep because of ...

: Lyrics - Critique: Alternative/Screamo song?  Not rated yet
Okay--so, basically this song is pretty self-explanatory. i know that this isn't very good, but i'm a beginner. i'm only 13:). help me out? constructive ...

All Mine-lyrics critique Rock  Not rated yet
This is my first song enjoy it:

Verse 1:

Since the first time I saw you
I can´t get you out of my head
Girl, I think you are the one
Oh baby ...

'Every Time' Lyrics Critique Acoustic/Pop  Not rated yet
(Verse one)
Every time, it’s something else,
You never take responsibility.
You think it’s wrong because we’re friends
But what matters is how it ...

Breathe- Lyrics Critique-   Not rated yet
So this is the first song that i have written. i still feel like i should work on it .
this is has like a slow/spacey acoustic sound lol . tell me what ...

Through with you- adult alternative- lyrics critique  Not rated yet
(1st verse)
You have to be the one to tell me
About all the things i didn't know
What are the answers to my questions
Tell me the direction I should ...

In Her Eyes Lyrics Critique- Alternative rock or Rock  Not rated yet
My friend wrote this song for our band. We don't have the music yet but that's a working progress. I'm the lead guitar and lead vocals and I was wondering ...

It Even Snows in Mexico- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
Mexico Mex Mex Mexico
I think it pours in Mexico

Hot press and I got my finger to your chest
Regret ...

Self Centred Woman - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
It's a typical situation every saturday night
They never ask u politely, always talkin real shite
Never show you respect, got they're impressions of ...

"Hard Life Lyrics Critique - Alternative and Punk"  Not rated yet
Im 17 years old and my girlfriend of 10 months dumped me for one of my friends and i just started writing songs two weeks ago so please tell me what you ...

Help me on the title! Lyrics Critique - Rock/Screamo Song  Not rated yet
Note: all CAPS are screams.


(VER1)
The subtle signs are what give you away
With every breath, I hear you screaming silently
I look into your eyes ...

Go! Robbie Go! By Robbie Rohr and Dave Badham - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Go! Robbie Go!
By Robbie Rohr and Dave Badham


V1) D
Start my day at flag raisin`,
G
Inspiration's what I'm saying`,
D ...

Rainbow Chaos Lyrics Critique - unknown genre   Not rated yet
A girl stands alone in the dusk of the morn
she bequeaths her life to the end of the world
One last melody she decides to sing to the world
Mixing memory ...

"CHANCES" BALLAD - SCOTT - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
written to try and inspire those with doubts, those who cannot lift themselves from the floor... we all go there sometimes.

CHANCES

For ...

Just writting some stuff off the top of my head to see what you guys think  Not rated yet
so you're out with your friends
seems you forgot me again
and its hard to know
you'd rather be there

and now I'm home all alone
just waitin here ...

Arrogance For Ars* Heads Lyrics - pop punk/pop rock  Not rated yet
im looking for critique on lyrics suggestions/revisions and 1-5 system


You've got a giant god complex for a religious guy i wonder how you got you'...

Let Her Be -Lyrics Critique -Acoustic  Not rated yet
I always try to prove to you
that I can be something that
you won't regret,but whats the sense
in that? I'll keep trying and I'm so
sure you won't ...

Santa Clause don't come down the Chimney - Charlie-- Country Lyric Crtique  Not rated yet
1st draft
It is too long
It is too sad
what do you think?




1st verse
We tell our children
Everyday,
Believe in God
We teach them how ...

lost (lost without u) - lyric critique  Not rated yet
chorus
lost (lost without u)
lost (lost without u)
im lost
verse 1
being lost without u is like a battle ive just lost no one ther to love me the ...

hmmm...not sure yet - lyric critique  Not rated yet
ok..... so far i've only come up with a bridge and a chorus, i've written it for my cd production class so it might be reccored and put on a cd.

Chorus....

"Prison walls", country song, lyrics critique please  Not rated yet
I tried for so long to do
The best that I could
But in the end
I knew that I would

I turned to a life
Of robbin and stealin
I didn’t care about ...

Will I Be To Late lyrics critique- acoustic lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
V1: Ashes to ashes they all fall around me, Turning from ou to pick them back up.
Stop the abuse its tying my arms down, The fate of my life its all in ...

Meant to be Lyrics Critique - classic rock/Country  Not rated yet
Be as harsh as need be pls..., this song is for my GF and i will be playing at the hard rock hotel and casino for her.

Verse 1 As I watch this ...

Gabrielle Lyrics Critique - Rock/Pop Song  Not rated yet
I am looking for not a rough critique but not a soft critique either. I have a band but I am nothing but the song writer. So could you please critique ...

Nelli -Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Ba bum bum bum bum bum
Ha da da da da da

In a day she
Fills her needs
No other point of view
Nothing a skewed
Coming home to
Broken doors
Got ...

Memory Bank- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Here she is there she is here she comes
Coming home all alone no new story
She thinks she likes it that way
You see that woman on the street
She wants ...

Picture Frame - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Pictures in a frame
While I stumble down the stairs
Locked up tight, afraid what’s not inside
Indulge myself with what I have
Try to find a person ...

Cover Story- Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Making the page on a Sunday day
Thinking no one’s there
Surprise they got you good
You just made your page
Accident was not the case
Cover your eyes ...

Choking Silence - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
A day like no other when you shine on me
Like the brightest star
You lead me through this life

But now the time is over
You had to go
Using the ...

Dream It Lyrics Critique- R&B/Pop Song"  Not rated yet
Verse;If you want love
(then go for it)
If you want Fame
(then reach for it)
If you Dream big
(then dream it, but if u dream it u gotta believe it)...

"Ride or Die Lyrics Critique -R&B Song"  Not rated yet
This is the first verse & Chorus i came up with please tell me what you think!! Be Honest!

Ride Or Die
(Intro-talking) You know i've been thinking,...

Performer or Normal Lyrics Critique - Pop Song  Not rated yet
I get on with life as a performer,
I'm a competitive kinda person.
I like singing all the time,
I like dancing during the week.
I like to complement ...

"Let It Be Dear Lord, Let It Be" lyrics critique Love Ballad  Not rated yet
Through this world of storm and strife
you bring peace into my life.
It brings me joy to be your wife.
With your strength, stand by me.
Stand by me....

The Last Thing I Need - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
It's over now I'm leaving
and then she turned to go
our time together haunts me
like a name I used to know.
When darkness falls in silence
I see in ...

no title (yet) lyrics critique-pop? song  Not rated yet
brand new...still rough around the edges. please rate what we got so far...


Verse 1:
Now I'm in disguise
Just walking right by
So no one can see ...

Eyes to the sky---Rock/Pop lyrics critique  Not rated yet
She said while Im stuck rollin with these pretty eyes
Im gonna run around and hang with all those fancy guys
got no time for trash like you
just sitting ...

"This Darkness" - rock- Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Awaken a dream
Take away my pain
Hold me close to you
Never run away

I call for you From out of this darkness
Reach in pull me through
When ...

Hail To Fire Lyrics Critique- Metal song  Not rated yet
Hail to Fire (written by Martin Synan)

(Intro)

Hail to fire!!! (scream)

(thrash riff)

Hail to Fire
Prayers of Death
Your time is up
And ...

On Your Way - Scott Lyrcis Critique, slow rock, alternative  Not rated yet
Are you happy with your life?
Fed up telling silly lies
It’s time to take some time to think
You are making yourself ill
There are places you can go
...

"Tired"? Lyrics Critique- Rock  Not rated yet
I've got lots of lyrics for songs, just trying to put them together finally. Tell me what you think. You don't have to be nice. I'd rather have good criticism ...

army of one -lyrics critique  Not rated yet
army of one
fighting for my only true love
army of one
Fightin for my only true love
I miss u soo
But I aint givin up

Why chu go
Left ...

I'm Sorry Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
chorus

I'm sorry I'm sorry
for all the things that I've put you through
o please o please
please don leave i need you (love you) x2

verse 1
...

I dont wan't to be- lyrics critique -r&b   Not rated yet
1st verse

I want to make love to you one last time
I want to undress you slowly and take my time
I want to wrap my arms around your hips
then ...

in the dark lyrics for critique unsure of genre  Not rated yet
Hi guys this is my 1st post, ive written a few lyrics but cannot read or play any music so unsure if this would work as a song, comments greatly appreciated....

Rowan's Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Hey, my lyrics are for alternative rock songs, it's upbeat, fun. So tell me honestly what you think.



The suns burning brightly but not for long....

OUT OF CONTROL country Lyrics Critique By Charlie from Alabama  Not rated yet
He was her man
So with the back of his hand
He would remind her time after time
He?d watch the miles on her car
If she drove too far
It would drive ...

OBAMA SAVE ME! - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Written by Charlie in Alabama

You could say I’ve had some bad luck.
Well, where do I begin?
I‘...

Kiaras lyric critique - love song   Not rated yet
Maybe if I stop pretending
it would be alright
I cant express this feeling
I cant speak my mind
And they tell me just talk about it
I cant just talk ...

I;'m Not In The Picture Anymore Charlie Country Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
I’m not in the picture anymore

I said, hey bartender,
Can I pay my tab?
He said “sure thing buddy,
Can I call you a cab?”
As I opened my wallet,...

This thing called fate - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
All alone , I spent my day

Hoping that you'd come way

But I just don't wanna be that girl who waits

on someone who won't come and find her someday
...

untittled so far (incomplete) lyrics critique - punk rock/rock  Not rated yet
Im new at this and i dont think im very good but im trying. please give me some feed back.

i ran out the door and got in my car
engine wouldnt start ...

between my years critique- rock song  Not rated yet
Do u feel dead to me
Do you feel humble
Don’t try to hide from me
Or your walls will crumble

Make your wings known
To all that it can Be
Fall into ...

New York Lullaby Lyrics Critique - Australia  Not rated yet
New York Lullaby is a true story that I was inspired to write after meeting "tommy", homeless since returning from the Vietnam war, in Washington Square ...

Better Off, Pop/Rock - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Hey, so right now with this song i've been playing it with an acoustic guitar. I've been detating speeding it up and turning it into more of a pop/rock ...

Oh I Wonder - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I'm a beginer. And this is one of my first songs. Maybe the lyrics are kinda childish or stupid but they mean a lot for me. And I want to know others opinions....

broken heart (yours or mine) - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
(im still working on this plz leave some comments and give me tips)

Broken Heart (Yours Or Mine)

This broken heart whose could it be,
does it belong ...

When I Miss You Lyrics Critique - Ballad  Not rated yet
This is a very personal song for me, but i kept the person annonomous. It may need a lot of work because i'm young.

Verse 1:
Why does he
Say that ...

stronger - pop song - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
i see the sky shining oh so bright tonight i understand were i will be tonight not with you but with me

i dont need you any more i don't see you ...

rae lyrics critique-contempory song  Not rated yet
He said he loved like he never loved
He said he cared liked he never cared
He said he’d love me till the end
He said he’d care for me till then

I ...

D.slickness Lyrics Critique - soft rock  Not rated yet
friends by D.slickness.
Verse 1.
We all have friends we don't wanna lose but what if they, what if they choose to go a different way or ...

"Manipulating" lyrics critique "Pop Song"  Not rated yet
I'm done this over and over again
cause i don't stop it from happening
i believe that you'll change
and i fall for the game
cause you're so manipulating ...

marked - lyric critique  Not rated yet
every day i see your face and i realize your just a dream i will never reach if only i could hold on a little longer maybe i would get to see the mark ...

the individual - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Verse1: just sit back and hear me out
This is a tale we all know about
I just keep it simple don’t wanna have to shout
Some may disagree yet I don’...

You and I - R&B, pop, anythin really - lyrics critique  Not rated yet
its called you and i, i hope u guys like it. im trying to see who might be intersted in making this a real song. i've contacted record producers etc.


chorus
...

beautiful lyrics critique - rock  Not rated yet
some words unspoken
some things left undone
some feelings unexpressed
but you're so graceful
that i must say so

your eyes are hopeful
full of ...

I'll Still be Loving You Ballad critique  Not rated yet
When reality is no longer a dream.
When forever is no longer long.
I'll still be loving you.

when laughter is no longer laughter
and pain is no longer ...

Julia Lyrics Critique - Blue Ballad  Not rated yet
Here for me (dedicated to every girl’s impossible love)

Chorus:
Oh, why can’t you be here for me?
I shouldn’t tell you that I love you
‘Cause we’...

But What If... Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
Hey this is my first song so dont rip me too bad, i was gonna make it into a rock song
Any feedback can also be sent to footballfan634@gmail.com


If ...

Brave Fighter Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I am a brave fighter,
trying to overcome my fears.
Laughing out loud
is the way I shed my tears.

I am a brave fighter
cos my weakness
I must overcome....

Its a crazy world critique - rock song  Not rated yet
Its a crazy world, driving too fast
in the fast lane.
its a crazy world,
make me feel like going insane.

Its a crazy world,
look around.
its a ...

My Life, Rock, Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I've been here waiting
For someone to sweep me off my feet
I am depleading
I'm not quite sure what I need
Verse 2
I feel ...

"Dead" Pop Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Okay so this is only my third song, so I'm still a beginner and I'm 11, so it's not the best. This song is about my best friend, he believes in the rumor ...

Dream Girl to Nightmare - Rock Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Verse (one line should take about one second)

I have a problem
I can't feel you near me
Only my broken heart

I feel like I'm dyin'
I can't stop ...

Untitled Lyrics Critique - Goth/Rock  Not rated yet
Written a while ago, always liked it. Needs Improvement, What do you think?

I feel your eyes burning through my skin
I feel your breath on the wind
...

We All Fall Down Lyrics Critique - Power Ballad?  Not rated yet
Wrote this a while back after going through some stuff. What do you think?


It's the strangest feeling,
like diving down
into emptiness.
Just to ...

Timeless Tragedy Lyrics Critique - Unfinished/Undecided genre  Not rated yet
Half the man he has to hide
Half of him is trapped inside
The shelter of dark hides him away
In this prison he must stay

When the day breaks, the ...

I'm Not Cinderella - acoustic - lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
i wrote this song for my music assignment and would like to know what people think before i submit it :)

Once upon a time,
when nursery rhymes seemed ...

Memories - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
I remember
When we were young
I remember
All the fun

Memories
Of u and me
Memories
Of just we

Playin round
All over town
Thought we were ...

"Solar Eclipse" Lyrics Critique - Indie  Not rated yet
There was this old watch
his grandpa gave to him
he broke it somehow
i can't remember
well, she gave it back to him
managed to repair
oh, how thankful ...

Catfishin' lyrics critique  Not rated yet
It aint finished yet i just got the idea for it ummm...
as you can see its the first verse and the chorus so just let me know what ya'll think




Verse ...

Flat screen - Lyric Critique  Not rated yet
I want it to be a great song but i dont have the musical instruments and its a fast pop, rock kinda song! let me know what you think?? you can email me ...

Happy Ending - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Is it you, the one that I have loved
The one God sent me from above
And have I found the man of my dreams

Now I don’t know where ...

Why be here? lyrics critique - soft, sad kinda sound  Not rated yet
needs a bit o work. any ideas would b HUGELY appreciated =]

I'm so messed up. And i don't know why. My thoughts and actions. Fell short of who I am....

Dissapointment lyrics critique  Not rated yet
ok well dis is actually a poem i wrote last year but someone said it myt make a good song. Not so sure so just wanting some feedback bout what u think ...

block me tonight lyrics critique- sad pop song  Not rated yet
V1.
You can’t block my path as I’m walking down the street yeh, you can’t block me as I’m gunna cross the road ‘uh oh, your not gunna block me tonight ...

For a friend lyrics critique- sad pop song  Not rated yet
verse 1
this is for a friend,
that,
makes you feel like you could acheve,
what ever your dreams tell you,
this could be something imposible,
but ...

Bobby (Bonnie Lyrics Critique - jazzy/folk song)  Not rated yet
Something I wrote a while ago so, tell me what you think.

Bobby get out of the fire tonight
Oh You keep me burning and my mouth is dry
It's like waiting ...