Lyric Feedback - Lyrics Critique from Songwriters

Nothing's Changed - Songwriters Lyric Feedback 
that was just a part of the dream,
i can still pretend that you were never here,
seeing you has tainted my feelings
now... i... know that

nothing'...

Birthday - Lyric feedback 
Birthday
Key of C


Everyone was gathered round, young and old

As she walked ...

The Eye of Your Storm lyrics critique- no genre 
I've never written a song before, so I'm feeling a little out of my league. I'm actually writing this for a friend, so I want it to be good. She's going ...

Songwriters Lyric Writing Critique - "just because you're a cop (it doesn't mean that we can't be friends)" 
just because you're a cop it doesn't mean that we can't be friends
we both know what goes on deep inside where the alley ends
you're not surprised at ...

The Pain - Songwriters Lyrics Critique- Ballad with certain parts that get a faster more powerful tempo 
The Pain (need help with song title; any other suggestions welcome)

They say it gets easier
As time goes by
They say you start to forget
But I keep ...

AndyL - Lyrics Critique - Dance/Rock 
chorus. Fooling never mind, we're 2 of a kind, we're sextastic funkers entwined.

Life in this town aint ever gonna be the same, since the hardcore funkers ...

Run with Scissors - - lyrics critique(: 
ayy, yo. heres another one guys. (:


Run with scissors

If your voice was a blessing
I’d be an angel by now
If your touch, silver
I’d have more ...

A better Man. (AKA The Prayer) Country Lyric Charlie in Alabama 
A BETTER MAN
Hello God, It?s just me down here,
I though I?d step out side and say a little prayer.
I know we don?t talk much, but it seemed like a ...

My Fools Paradise - Classic Rock - Lyrics Critique 
Its unconventional because it has only 3 verses and no real chorus, but its better to let the story speak for itself...enjoy

I had a dream last night ...

You've Got What It Takes - Lyrics Critique - Pop Song 
Streaming Player
http://www.soundclick.com/util/getpl...d=3877159&q=hi

Song Page
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=3877159

This song started ...

"Don't let me Down" lyrics-rock/pop 
I wrote this song for my best friend. I don't really like it but she does. I was just wondering what other people think

Don't Let me Down

verse 1:...

Can I Be Your Baby - Lyrics Critique 
Iv'e been working on this for quite some time.
Please be BRUTALLY HONEST when you comment.

Verse 1:
I cant breath when your warm skin is felt by me
...

No title yet, this is kind of a rock song 
Kind of a mellow rock song. Let me know what you think.

Verse:

You come around here
start to take away my glory
but the tables turn and then we ...

Better Times Rock with a reggae vibe - lyric critique 
I actually didn't write these lyrics, I work closely with my bass player who writes all the lyrics for our band. I wanted to get an unbiased opinion.

Verse ...

When He looks at Her Country Lyric 
When he looks at Her

When my daughter started dating,
my weekends were spent waiting.
For her to get home safe,
they?d better not be late.
Now,...

Conversational - Lyrics Critique Please! 
Hey, I just quickly wrote this on my lunch break...let me know what you think...let me know if you get what the story is about!

Cameron Thorp © 2008
...

Haunting Me - Lyrics Critique - Pop 
You're all I ever think about
Whenever I try to distract myself
You stop me
When I try to erase my mind
And I don't get very far I find
You've got ...

"what to say" - rock - Lyric Critique 
a song i wrote..


Well I woke up this morning,
Not knowing what i'd see today

And just when life seemed boring,
I ran into your face

Now i ...

Staples - Lyric Critique 
Staples


VERSE ONE:
Of all the things I’ve done wrong
This might be the best
I never said it out loud though
‘Cause you would have laughed

CHORUS:...

Goodbye - Lyrics Feedback 
(Verse 1)
I try to forget the happiest memories
but still your memories are everywhere
your all the pages in my diary
im finding some ...

Sticks and Stones - Lyrics Critique - Rock 
I'm 13 and this is one of the first songs I've written.

Why does it matter to anyone else,
Why do they have to make it such a big deal,
Does it make ...

Trying Lyrics - Country Song - Lyric Feedback 
Trying to hide the disappointment
The hurt the tears the pain
Trying to find the will to go on
To start all over again

Trying to make everyone happy
...

Just The Way Things Are - Pop/Rock/Indie - Lyric Critique 
just a little song
not to great
just looking for some feedback
thanks :)

Just The Way Things Are

See you in the school corridor
You give me ...

LOVE IS STRONGER! Lyric Critique Country 
LOVE IS STRONGER

You?ll probably start calming down
before you get to Birmingham
You?ll fiddle with the radio,
and wonder why the traffics slow
...

High Stakes - Lyric Critique 
What would you do when life stakes the odds against you, how far would you go for yourself and the one you love? This song answers it.

High Stakes
Key ...

if you know me (just a bit of my usless lyrics) 
(chorus)

if you know me
baby you'll see (really im a good guy)
i can do things he cant (and things you'll like)
all of the time (your in my mind)...

"Cold iron line lyrics critique. folk" 
Hi guys this is a song i'm working on.. the lyrics kinda just came to me so i want to try them out on a few folks. here goes
"(verse) i walk the cold ...

Don't Know Who I Am Lyrics Critique - Pop 
I've just got the verse so far, please tell me what you think of it!

''I’m lost in a thousand dreams
Not sure which ones are real
Now this magic love ...

Angry Jesus - Post Grunge - Alt. Metal 
The mood is kind of like...A guy is getting frustrated with things and every time he gets down on life he turns to Jesus/God but every time he feels let ...

"Waves of Yesterday" Lyrics Critique - Rock/Acoustic/Jam/Progressive 
I have a few other songs, but I wanted to see if I was on the right track with my lyrics. These are the lyrics for one of my songs: "Waves of Yesterday"...

It ends tonight/I promise - Lyric Feeback 
Hi everyone, thanks for the supporting comment from my last ones, Queen of my heart.
Please give your review on this one and my other lyrics; 'Chance ...

Internet Woman - Country/ Bluegrass (lyrics for critique) 
Internet Woman
(Country/ Bluegrass)

Chorus:
My internet woman
She's the sexiest kind
She seduces me with pictures
That just blow my mind
I've ...

"You" -alternative song - lyrics feedback 
(Verse-1)
Woke up this morning,
thinking of you
Keep trying to get over
(all)the things you do,
A Siple Walk
A simple stare
A simple mention,
Oh ...

unsteady lyrics critique - pop/rock/alt (?) song 
sitting here
just thinkin bout the day that didn't come.
tomorrows expectations
limitations just begun.
another smile
the extra miles are fading with ...

The Streets Tonight - Lyric Critique 
The Streets Tonight
We packed up all our things, packed them tightly in the car
We ran around the house collecting
The memories and my guitar
Forced ...

Days Like This - Lyric Critique 
Days Like This

Well baby times are rough, then ever before
We work twice as hard, of this Im sure
The bills are always late, people calling my phone
...

Closer To You - Lyrics Critique ( any melody ideas?)  
Closer To You


In the hush of the mornings stillness
I hear that song bird calling
its calling me
calling me
singing, come closer to me
for I'...

You've Been Someone - Lyrics Critique  
You've Been Someone

You've talked of living things,
what they bring;
with your shackles on.
You've thought of giving rings,
pots and tins;
with ...

Draining Lyrics Critique - "Hard Rock" 
Hi, I'd appreciate any constructive input to the lyrics below. I only have some vague ideas for the melody so far:


Verse 1
Looking for a reason
Tryin'...

Rap lyrics i wrote - Lyrics Feedback 
Your whole life your spendin Chacin this one dream
Wanna stop Swimming Main Stream
wanna Pop Women and they scream ahhhhhhh!
Remember Hot Shot Bilie ...

"Theory Of A Superhero" Lyric Critique -- Pop/Rock Song 
Tempo: N/A

This song has no melody as yet... currently working on different variations but going for a commercial mid tempo sound. Plan is to build ...

Be Mine - Lyrics Critique 
(VERSE 1)

I WAS IN THE MALL CHILLIN AFTER SCHOOL
LOOKING ROUND FOR GIRLS SO I COULD MAKE A MOVE
AND THEN I SAW THIS CHICK
SO I MOVED REAL QUICK
BUT ...

Slinpeal lyrics critique rap/rock song music 
Verse 1:
From the outside,
You see skin,
you don't see where my mind even begins,
An apple that, you don't see the core,
If you could understand me ...

untitled need help not sure if it needs a chorus 
do you see the stars up in the sky
have you looked and tried to realize
how it started and why it came to be
come along and you will surely see

the ...

As Long As I Can Lyrics Critique - R&B Song 
As Long As I Can

What I wouldn't give,
Just to feel your arms around me.
What I wouldn't do,
Just to hear you say you love me.
I've been sleeping ...

victims lyrics critique rock song 
victims
chorus
victims of a tragedy
in your mind is what you see
close your mind blinds your eyes
when will they realize

verse ...

Reunited Lyrics Critique- RnB 
REUNITED( need help with the ending, a bridge perhaps or somethign like that)
Verse 1:

It was just a week ago
We were apart fighting
With ...

"Mirror" Lyrics Critique- Acoustic/Slow Pop 
(Verse:1)
Unrecognizeable,
This picture is a blur
cause you see,what they see
what they want you to see

and they don't even know,
your feeling ...

High School Crush - pop song - lyrics critique 
I've known him as long as I can remember
he's always been the only one I see
loving him has made me start to wonder
if I will ever find another guy ...

If I only had you-pop song - lyrics critique 
I lived all my life with my head in the clouds
and I had no idea if I'd ever be coming down
and then I met you,totally out of the blue
I knew you'd ...

I'll marry the bridesmaid anyways lyrics critique - alil bit of punk rock i guess, you know soundtracks for summer teen movies 
Hey it's Charlie, guess what, I'm writing this on the spot, so no real melodies yet.

Not the queen of status among her friends
Not the one to start ...

AndyL - Freefalling. Critique. Please comment.  

Freefalling throught this dream.
Can't tell up from down.
Why are you still hanging around.
Your not even dressed in the theme.
If your not in a ...

Coz I don’t give a damn- alternative/rock/pop - lyric review 
Don’t ask me to go, if you want me to stay
Don’t look at me sideways, I hate it that way
Don’t ask me to play along nice for your friends

Coz I just ...

This was Love- Lyric Feedback - Alternative Pop/Rock 
I know I bought this on my self
I know that I found someone else
and when you told me how you felt
I didn't know that 'this' was love

So I crawl ...

AndyL - Passion Flower Kisses Lyric Critique- Please comment 
Eyes amorous like the sea, not devoid of sensuality. Smile adorned like an accolade laid. Lips sweet like fire in the shade.

Whispered kisses caught ...

Not This Time - Songwriter Lyric Feedback 
Verse 1: Why do you have to make things so complicated?/
Is this what we have become?/
Well tough luck to you/
You know we almost made it/
After all ...

Songwriters Lyric Critique - doesnt have a name,,,yet 
Um this is sorta my first song... thats been seen on paper, but it isnt finnished but i would really like your opinions and comments about what you like/...

Choice ( still thinking of title) Songwriters Lyric Critique- alt rock/emo/??? 
I don't really know what i'm doing but i like writing lyrics, so heres what i got:

Don’t follow me, don’t follow me tonight
I won’t be coming home
...

Hayden Lyric Critique- Rock Song 
Verse 1
Could there be more empty moments
Is there room for anymore pain
Can I take more disappointment
Or will it all just end the same

Pre Chorus-...

What will we do? Lyric Feedback /Country Lyric/ Charlie from Alabama 
This is an older Lyric I wrote.I have rewritten it several times. I think it has a powerful message.I would appreciate some feedback on this one.

What ...

Billys Got A Gun - Critique Rock 
Here's a follow up to the first song ("Theory of a superhero"). I look forward to your feedback!

Intro

He was a rebel who lived by his own laws
Lived ...

Country Song - Lyrics-critique 
Just A Country Song by Becky Big Canoe

I want to be a writer of country songs to help me ease my pain
And tho it may hurt like hell, they say no pain,...

suffer in silence - - - lyrics critique 
and yet another one, guys. enjoy?



Suffer in silence

You let me down
We said goodbye
My heart stands broken
Yeah, I’ll try to carry on
But ...

memories - lyric feedback 
Memories

(intro)

(verse1) You blow me away whenever you smile.
But every time I look back you are always gone.
I wish you’d just stay awhile, but ...

Unknown yet - lyric writing feedback 
This is my first time writing lyrics and I'm looking for feedback in general to get some kind of idea where i stand and what i should do next. Any help ...

foever/ Lyric critique /County Song 
FOREVER

There’s an empty bed room, down the hall
With a lot of faded pictures, on the wall
Each a reminder of the past
Time that has passed by way ...

Time Lyrics Critique - Medium Tempo Acoustic Song 
Hey guys, I'm Jake and this is one of the best songs I've written so far. I just want to know what you think about the lyrics; I feel like I can't make ...

"Sharon Lyrics Critique- Gospel Song" 
Surrender all and be freed from sin
Surrender all and worship him
Surrender all and make him your Lord
Blessed Savior, I surrender all

Heaven and ...

Now You Know - Lyric Critique 
All right, I just wrote this in five min. I've written ones that were twenty times better but this is kind of a new technique I've been using. It's a bit ...

My Best Friend Lyrics Critique- Slow Pop Song 
My Best Friend ( need help thinking of a title)

Verse 1:
You treated me wrong
you used me up, like a tissue
you kept me in the dark
i had some ...

At least all's right with the world - Lyrics Critique - Folk/Pop 
Boy you will never grow to more or less
Than the plaudits won on your latest test
And you will someday say that life is best
When you haven't got the ...

Perfect Girl, R&B 
This is the 4th song i have wrote now. Please comment and rate so i can improve were possible. Thank you.

Perfect Girl

Verse 1:

I woke up one ...

Now that ive lost you - lyric critique 
This is one of 3 songs i have wrote. I would like to try take them further. Anything needs improving let me know. Thank you for reading.


The day that ...

static --lyrics critique :)) 
heres another one guys. lemme know what you think.. i personally love this one. :))

Static

It rang 8 times before you
Even bothered to answer
What ...

The Unholiest Sunday Lyrics Critique – Heavy Metal Power Ballad 
(*I wrote this song dedicated to a very close friend of mine who committed suicide a few months ago because of a fight he had with his girlfriend)

[Verse:...

let me be - lyrics review 
hi im 17 yrs old my second song ive written. it has a 40's swing sound.


u looked u me in the eyes
i saw somethin more then i ever thought i would
...

pop song come back to me - lyric review 
hi im 17 yrs old and this is my first song that i have written. Its really slow. plz don't be 2 harsh remember first song still trying to figure it out
...

Bring it -- lyrics critique :) 
i just wrote this song like 5 minutes ago.. its suppose to be like a hip-hop dance/beat.. so here it is. :]]

Bring it

Walk in the club
Everybody ...

can't be myself, lyrics, rock, heavy metal maybe? 
He he its me again :-)

It's time for round two!

Verse
Time for life
To begin again
Time to realize
who knows when it will end?
But I still ...

"The Light That is You" -tentative title...acoustic/rock 
This is a song I hope to record and play at my wedding for our first dance. First song I've ever written and am having some doubts about the simplicity ...

still dreaming -- lyric critique 
i wrote this one night when i couldnt sleep.. haha.


Still Dreaming

2 am, I lie down deep in slumber
feelings are falling downward
I want to ...

"No Reason To Go" - Lyrics Critique - Country 
NO REASON TO GO
© S F 2008


(Verse )
Driving down this road, All alone,
Thinking to myself, What she did wrong,
Trying to recall, In my head,
Something ...

the footsteps of my heart - lyric critique 
had finally gotten over you
I had thought that might be so
but now you are all I think of
shows how much I didn't know

I now walk the footsteps of ...

a time to remember - lyrics critique 
hi guys this is the first song ive ever written it is only short but i need to know if it has potential it is all about a guy who I feel strongly for I'...

the rainbow that led me to you 
dark clouds descend across the sky
and the storm bird comes to call
the sky started to open itself up
and the rain slowly began to fall

a few moments ...

underated lyrics review pop 
hello shaun from liverpool england.
i am posting my lyrics to underated.
they are about siobhan donaghy who was a former member of the band the sugababes ...

Better Days Lyrics critque - Rock/Pop/Country kinda twist maybe?! 
Just want to know what people think of my lyrics, I do want to include the chords I am using too just to give you an idea how it sounds...

BETTER DAYS
...

wise smoker lyrics critique - accoustic rock 
washed up news
playing it again
people without clues
watching it again
hows the actor been
his clowns drop by
the world cried sorrowed
tissues ...

Lyrics Critique - Slow christian worship song 
Hey guys this is my first attempt at writing a song... so yeah I am gonna make a lot of mistakes, so please dont be like oh you dumb you shouldnt have ...

ended by jess country song 
i wish i knew what to say
i hope we can get past hey
words were gone from me today
it all ended after i walked away
we had a friendship that never ...

Not Yet Titled-Starting Lyrics-Rock-Lyrics Feedback plz! 
There is a clock outside my window
That tells me where I am
The timeline of my life is not exactly
The way I planned
I'm covered in scars
And stained ...

friends last forever - Lyrics Feeback 
it was like being inside a dream
I had my heart set right on you
but you were years older than me
I did not know what else to do

did not want to ...

Ever - (Lyrics for Critique) 
You said I wasn't good enough
I'd never be the same
You shook your head and laughed at me
Put your mom to shame
Left me sitting in the dirt
With nothing ...

Untitled - Song Lyrics Critique 
I've been working on this song recently, it is subject i've never experienced until recently so i just wanted some advice of any other writers. Basically ...

Forgotten Dreams - Lyrics Critique 
Every storm has lightning every rainfall has a dark cloud every rainbow has a pot of gold colours colliding to the end follow the path of the rainbow but ...

critique yesterday's fear lyrics - rock song 
Hi, my name is Roos, i live in the netherlands. I play guitar acoustic & electric and i write my own lyrics. Hope you will leave comments or give critique ...

Lonely Farewell Lyrics Critique - Rock Blues Song 
Hi, my name is Roos, i live in the netherlands. I play guitar acoustic & electric and i write my own lyrics. Hope you will leave comments or give critique ...

Reflections In A Dirty Mirror - Lyric Critique 
The title is pretty self explanatory...realising things about myself that I wish aren't true. I won't explain the lyrics coz they refer to several events ...

lyrics critique - pop/rock 
This is just the chorus......

some days you gotta break
outta the bombshell
let your world fall apart
burst through a wall
that's holding you back
...

Feel Fine lyrics critique- rock song 
I mostly write rap songs, and that is mostly all i listen to, but i figured id give it a try writing rock songs. i wrote a few and i want some feedback,...

Fade Away lyrics critique- pop song 
(V1) u want me/ but at the same time u want her/ see i told u i didnt care and it wouldnt bother me/ but the truth is, it does and i cant bear to see/ u ...

Changing Life - Christian Song 
When I was a young child my parent got divorced. I lived with my mom most of my life. When I was seven I started to see my dad again. Every other weekend ...

My "Michelle Song" lyrics critique 
Hey again, this song is very important to me, I need it to be perfect. For the girl I love. I mean truly love. I gotta show her, and this song might do ...

Better Man Lyrics - Country 
He walks in, gives a toothy smile
Nods to folks he ain’t seen in a while
And says, “Hello”
I’m pretty sure he doesn’t know our names
But it won’t matter ...

AndyL - Savannah Falls. Critique. Please comment.  
Chorus. Savannah falls by saphires light.
Like rainfall a sparkling delight.
Savannahs' hot n travelling light.
Swaying as the train takes flight.

Savannahs'...

Harmonize With Me Lyrics-punk/pop/grunge-medium tempo 
Just a dumb song i wrote, probably isn't ver good but please comment.

Everybody's got something to say
To say To say
Why the hell are you singing?...

Alone Lyrics-Punk/Alternative/Grunge 
I've got over 50 written heres one i hope to get feedback on.

I close my eyes as I lay to sleep,
Thaughts fill my head as the lids grow heavy,
Everything ...

Untitled (Not You) Lyrics Critique - Christian 
“Your tears, hold them back”,
“Don’t cry”, “Don’t act like that”,
“Your pain, I don’t see what you’re talking about”,

When it comes to looking back,...

Lonely Angel- Lyric Critique- Unknown Genre 
I'm looking for a genre so I can add a time and beat to the lyrics, please help?

You took my heart,
And tore me up,
So now I'm done,
This is yours ...

sunset - lyrics critique(: 
hey guys, this is just one of the many songs i have on here. just looking for some tips to make it better or flow more. (: thanks!


Sunset

I’ve ...

Untitled - Lyric Critique 
(its me being human and mortal but God is amazing) prehaps you could help?!

V1) I’m not that great Christian, infact there’s nothing great about me....

Change my heart... change my desires - lyric critique 
V1) There are so many things I want.
Not earthly things.
But that which is eternal,
which is heavenly.
These desires may fade away,
or change as ...

ALL I HAD ---- punk lyrics critique 
Punk rock type thing. Just the first verse and what I think might become a chorus. Be critical! please!

thanks.
Sanarchym
x


I know I owed you,...

'Snow In July' Lyrics Critique---Country Song 
Please post all good or bad comments!!!

White Dark Clouds, flat tumbleweeds
Snow In July, clean air to breathe
Is this what its like, when your world ...

*grip* lyrics. pls critique. acoustic.  
hey guys,
i would love some input. your help would mean alot to me. so let me know what you think of this song.
its a break up tune.
thanks.

phil....

Two Steps Back Lyrics Critique - Rap 
chorus:
everytime i take one step
i take two back
going the wrong direction
down the wrong path
i been looking for someone
to show me the way
cuz ...

In Color - lyrics critique please! is accompanied by piano or guitar, so sort of a country song 
Verse 1

When I brushed by you,
you and your warmth with eyes like
the blazing sun above

Verse 2

Your face appears to be,
the purest rose in ...

all the kings men -- lyrics critique :)) 
this is one of the first songs ive written, i just found it saved to my computer. please, no mean comments. its not perfect, i know.. ohh and if anyone ...

Lyric Writing - Critique 
What do you think of this lyric constructive criticism, advice what u think please ?

Chorus

I love you with all my heart
You will always be a part ...

Empty, lyrics- a ballad  
Hello this is the first time I've posted anything so it should be interesting to see the response.
This would be a contemporary song with strings and ...

Typical -- lyrics critique :] 
i wrote this song about an ex.. we fought over everything... :/




Typical

King of the game
Get out there and play
While I’m on the sidelines
...

Endless - Lyrics Critique - Rock/Pop 
Hi Guys...this is a song i am working on at the moment. I am struggling with the chorus..Any Ideas?
The lyrics for the chorus are just there to give the ...

lyrics for critique: THIEF OF LOVE (country) 
THIEF OF LOVE LYRICS AND MUSIC: Mike Morton
October 27, 2008

We don't usually go to bed
Before one or two
And we don't make love all night ...

chorus of a song i am writting with no title yet. Christian song. 
Let the light shine down and fill this empty room,
let the glory of God change our spirits and our moods.
He is all we need to brighten up our lives,...

Untitled Lyrics Critique Rock 
2 songs here. The first is kind of passive. When the chorus kicks in it kind of picks up. Then the last part really picks up. I don't know I guess I'm ...

TWILIGHT ZONE - Lyric Critique 
I was led on my bed, gazing up at the stars,
Thinking of you, while stairing on up at Mars,
Dreaming ...

Say you will - lyric critique 
Say you will be there
Say you will be standing next to me
Say you will never leave me alone
Say you will never let me go

Don’t you forget me
I won’...

Lyric IDEA (no solid song yet, tips welcome!) 
I've had a really good idea for a song, but I can't seem to put it altogether into a well thought out song. I have the general idea, but I'm not finding ...

ALL I WANNA DO Lyrics for Critique - Ballad 
i will never be the one
who ever brings you misery or pain
i will never be the one
who drives away the sunshine and brings rain

CHORUS:
i wanna ...

doorway to a time greater - lyrics critique 
I first saw you coming through a doorway
for the first time I felt happiness show
how could a doorway seem so beautiful
that is something I will just ...

Sleep Cycles lyrics critique- Acoustic Folk 
Messing up her sleep cycles, Breaking up her dreams,
Causng her to lie awake until the morning beams come spilling through

Calling her to rise, calling ...

AS Long as You Love Me lyrics critique - Blues song 
* I'd like a light, general critique, and keep in mind that this is blues which utilizes a lot of repetition. Currently it's too short, so I need help ...

"I Would" Country song - Lyric Feedback 
Hey yall, how ya'll doing? Wrote this song and would like to know what needs to be done with it

"I Would"
Shawn Wade

You look just like an angel
...

Lost at Sea - Lyrics Critique 
Going to be played on Piano, with light Drums, and Guitar

Lost at Sea
I got a broken down car that can barley groove
Half a tank of ...

True Colours - lyrics critique (pop/rock song) 
You make it so hard
For me to breathe
I'm not quite sure
What you want to achieve
I always had you down
As being better than this
Is there ...

years apart - lyric critique 
the story had to go on without him
years apart nothing could happen
but I made myself keep on going
and I finally got through it

so if you ever feel ...

A Whiskey State of Mind (lyrics - critque - country) 
I'm an unpublished poet and this is my second attempt at writing song lyrics. I would appreciate any honest commentary - thanks and happy trails.

In ...

Livin in a shadow (of Love) - Lyric Critique 
Never known of a love so deep
now only shadows casted over me
Im covered in dust
Left behind with broken memorires, and the worst thing of it all I ...

Through Your Window - Lyric Critique 
Do you see her through your window?
She walks down the street and whistles
And watched all the cars pass
She hasn’t got any money
Or any food that ...

True To Your Heart Lyrics Critique 
This is a song thought of a while ago. It's not finished yet. However, any feedback about the lyrics would be very much appreciated.


Don’t you ...

Stephen - Lyrics Critique 
Stephen

Stephen walked along
the river shore that day,
something he'd last done,
as a child.
Was it latent comfort
that held his mind?
No-...

freestyle - lyric critique 
check it yo i come from va lost and found in da struggle where niggas say stay safe and stay out of trouble beats are loyall da law im tryin to cuff u ...

Stuart - Lyric Critique 
Stuart

Eyes hidden to deflect the style,
beyond your hinterland
where a mission fizzed around;
the birth of something free, unknown,
this essence ...

Courtneys lyrics feedback - country/pop 
this song is about my best friend whos dad left when she was 4 years old. she could never get over why. she got into drugs, sex, and a lot of bad things....

turn around lyrics - pop song 
I'm just sitting here in class
waiting for the time to pass
it's almost time to go
quarter of four----
and then the bell rings
and everybodys out ...

Silent Night Lyrics Critique 
Please comment this. This song is about lovers and unlawful love. If you see any spelling mistake tell me.

Silent Night

I can see your eyes
Dawn ...

strike line lyrics critque rock song 
strike line
standing at the strike line
going over these feelings of mine
goverment says there is nothing we can do
but just let the ...

Not sure of a title, songwriters lyrics critique 
This is going to be the first song i've ever written. I've only been able to write the chorus, since I've been super busy getting ready for finals. I ...

"you've changed so much"Lyrics Critique-pop/punk 
okay so this song just popped in my head while i was going through some tough stuff.i was in a stage all teenage girls go through.so yeah..please give ...

My Baby Girl . - Lyric Critique 
Oh What happen? I remember that you’d just started walking
and before I knew it, you was talking.
Pre-school, Barbie dolls, bakers ovens,
And I’ll ...

The Old Man - Lyrics Critique 
The Old Man

On a wishful day under its cream sky,
where the sun hid then peeped awhile,
the old man looked out and away,
from his window decked with ...

Untitled - Pop song - Lyric review 
I only have one verse and the chorus done, but I want to know what you guys think of it so far. I would say it's medium tempo (when I write song lyrics,...

Untitled Lyrics - I just need to know if it has potential Alternative 

I just put this together for someone...
.



So it's come to this
A resentful life
And tears well cried
Can I take this knife
To your foes ...

make a change - punk - lyrics feedback 
Air filled with gas, faith of the children crumbling to pieces no one helping the world, people aren’t helping only making matters worse, stopping the ...

Turn on your TV! lyrics critique - punk rock 
Standin around In walmart, Leaning up against the wall.
Listining to the beeping, the sound when our dignaty falls. Every year It's the same old sh#t,...

"Analyze This" Lyrics critique 
"Analyze This" by Dennis Fraser

Over analyzed has my brain paralyzed

All of these random thoughts, has my brain in knots

So I grab another beer,...

Mirror Lyrics Critique - Rock / Alternative Song 
The idea is about people who have committed suicide. They're stuck between this world and the next (in the mirror) because they regret what they have done....

Icy Mountain - Lyric review 
There is this Icy Mountain
Every year i try to climb
Every year i get a little higher
It's myself i'm trying to find
My reflection is very blurry
In ...

Forget Her - Lyric feedback 
song in the process let me know wat u think

verse
Theres only so much that I can say to make you wanna feel this way
The cards are drawn and my heart ...

you have nothing to lose - lyric critique 
it always happens once in a while
you look over and see someone
and even if you don't know them
you still feel they are the one

you want to get to ...

Emergency Exit Lyric Critique: Love song. 
Warm greetings to all lyricists. These lyrics are from my first effort to write a song. I have been frustrated as to where can I submit it for appraisal....

Losing You - Country - Lyrics Feedback 
This is what I have so Far


It came to me one lonely night
With one look into your eyes I saw the fright
The sadness of losing someone so close to ...

lyrics to song: Why? - hip hop - lyrics feedback 
hey everyone. this is like the first song ive written and i was hoping to get some feedback about it. It just feels like its missing something complete ...

"Hey"----Lyrics Critic 
Not finished....Looking for input...thanks

Verses

Hey,
It's what you don't say,
In the games,
That we play

You,
Can never see through,
All ...

Forgive and Forget Lyric critique (Havnt choosen its genre) 
This is the first song i've written and i have no idea how to write a song and im 13 btw and i wanna be a song writter. i dont know how to put music to ...

Texas Moonlight- Country - By: Peyton Day 
Girl it's been to long since i've seen your face
I haven't felt your touch in way to many days
there's something about you that keeps drawing me near
...

Eatin Alive - Lyric Review 
A lot of hatin’ cause ya never had the feeling I get
when I am all ready and set
to do what I gotta do just to reach success
or get eatin’ alive if ...

Murder Of The Crows Lyrics critique Rock/Metal  
They come to pick your skin,
as your walking right in,
to the Trap of your life.
The PAIN, the Fear,
of them picking out your ...

My Lyrics Critique - Random song 
I wanted to know what people thought. It doesnt Rhyme I wanst trying to make it Rhyme, but other than that...What do you think?

VERSE I:
I wear that ...

Believe lyrics critique - rock 
In the back of your mind Always searchin to find a road to lead us somewhere Run the course of life try an control it Seems ...

no one said lyrics feedback 
are my lyrics any good to produce???
verse;
when you put your hands on me,
i feel so sexy.
i loose my self controll,
i dont no how to be what you ...

"Love's Prisoner, Confined by fear" 
idk....trying to convert poems into songs

How can the same guy that critizes me
turn around and kiss me so gently sending chills through every inch ...

"Southside of Jupiter Lyrics Critique - Alternative Song"  Not rated yet
Hey! thanks for checkin out my song :] this was one of the first ones I wrote so tell me what you think
(verses)
I wonder why, it's so hard to say goodbye
...

Climax Of Fighting Lyrics Critique - punk/rock song  Not rated yet
As she walks, I just see her back
My heart wants to chase her, but my feet refuse
My heart wants to call for her, but my mouth's kept shut

As I walk ...

Breaking Point Lyrics Critique - Soft Rock Song  Not rated yet
Breaking Point


I don't want to live in a world full of recollection.
I'm just happy to be me, and that's all I want to be.
Don't come up to me saying ...

right with you lyrics feedback  Not rated yet
this song is about a girl who changed my life, who made me realize what im worth. and all the time i wanted to be with her
RIGHT WITH YOU

All day long ...

Fairytale Lyrics Critique- slow and fast  Not rated yet
Any suggestions welcome(help with title)


Fairytale

I look out the window
waiting for my Prince Charming
To come and carry me
Away...

I stare ...

Believe lyrics critique - rock  Not rated yet
In the back of your mind Always searchin to find a road to lead us somewhere Run the course of life try an control it Seems ...

Mannequin - kinda soft rock ballad   Not rated yet
verse 1
i watch you walk by
thinking your life is awry
yet i wish i were you
but i cant do anything but stand by

chorus
cause all i am is a mannequin
...

Tyranny-Kind of rock-ish, like late Hilary Duff, Superchic[k] and a little Barlow Girl  Not rated yet
where do you think you are going
do you think i really care
you have tyranny from your pretend throne
you have tyranny alone_______
chorus
i wont ...

Oh Well Lyrics Critique - accoustic guitar  Not rated yet
I'm not sure it's great. I know it's simple, my favourite song to sing. And yeah I wrote, just need feedbacks on how to improve. I used the guitar to make ...

Oh Well Lyrics Critique - alternative rock  Not rated yet
Hey I'm Charlie, I wrote this song so I was wondering you guys can help me build up. It's called "Oh Well"

You gave your heart to me
To see if you'...

"Winter" Lyrics critique - Rock - Blue  Not rated yet
Please comment and Inform me on any suggestions/correction ideas you have. I know it doesn't have a real chorus, but it goes well will the musical composition....

No More Tommorow Lyrics ~ Hard Rock (Sort of Like Powerman 5000 and Rob Zombie)  Not rated yet
Was Listening to a Powerman 5000 cd on the way to school this morning and though it would be interesting to try something like this. So after my Command ...

John Lyrics Critique - Rock Style  Not rated yet
I've been grabbing the horns of the bull
Ever since I met you
And now my glass is half full
And there's nothing I can't do

My glass is half full!...

"I'm Not Done With You" lyrics-Hard Rock/punk/grunge/pop-fast tempo at verses, slow-medium tempo for chorus.  Not rated yet
This has nothing to do with me. it came to my head and i just wrote it down.

Well its not the way its meant to be
take a grip on the corporate anarchy
...

Fly, an Original Song - Lyric Writing Critique  Not rated yet
These are the lyrics to my song, Fly:

Try flying and see how long it takes you to fall

Try walking through fire and see if you survive

I guess ...

Waiting For That Day - Rock/pop  Not rated yet
I walk dow the path
Through these doors
Opening up to nothing more
Found the exit but it's up so high
Can't reach it no matter how hard I Try

Waiting ...

PunkPrincess lyrics critique- pop rock  Not rated yet
Okay heres another song by me.i was sord of bored.=)

I put on my converse
strap my guitar
i turn up the volume
then i let it rock(let it rock!)

chorus...

She - Pop Rock - Lyrics Critique  Not rated yet
Kinda short song about missing a girl, feedback much appreciated.

Her heart is beating for me,
She looks out onto the shore,
She calls, shes lonely,...

Any Idea - Indie - lyric feedback  Not rated yet
Verse 1
I was just a boy when the world got turned upside down

Seemed like i was left for dead

Had no clue what was going on

Seemed like all ...

I can't let you pass me by  Not rated yet
As I brush past you,
I notice your gaze
Inquisitive about me,
but I hide in my shame

Because I know that
you could never be mine
And my hesitition ...

Dancing in the Middle of the Street Lyrics Critique- Slow/Fast mellow Pop song  Not rated yet
ANy suggestions welcome about anything

Dancing in the Middle of the Street

Move it to the left
Take it to the right
Feel the beat and the rhythm
...

I Do Lyrics Critique - slow indie/alternative song  Not rated yet
The road ahead of me is just another expressionless face
Reminding me of every reason why I shouldn?t go
Is there really no choice or just one I can?...

Lyrics Critique - The Weatherman (softrock song)  Not rated yet
the Weatherman

when dryed up rivers are overflowing
when theres things you can't replace
it may be news to you that its raining
but no weatherman ...

Boy Next Door Lyrics Critique - R&B  Not rated yet
First verse

It started about a month ago we were chillin' and he called me baby
He acted like he didn't notice it but later on he said I was his type ...

Liefde - Afrikaans Ballad - Love song  Not rated yet
Hey guys. This is my first afrikaans song that I wrote. I don't know who of you will understand it, but it's about love and what love is doing. I hope ...

Foolish lyrics - critique - RnB  Not rated yet
Verse 1
Its been so long,
Since ive felt ur touch
times been
Passin by but i feel like im in a trance.
This emptiness
I feel inside
I put on a smile ...

apparently - lyrics critique (:  Not rated yet
heres another one(: enjoy?



Apparently

Stuck in a mess; revved up with distress
Help me out (me out)
Overly obsessed; who would have guessed
...

The Beating of Your Heart Lyrics Critique-   Not rated yet
( Slow but powerful songs; picks up strength, speed, and power towards end )

The Beating of Your Heart (Any suggestions on title or anything else)

Looking ...

Never - Alternative - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
I found love while walking on the road,
I made promises while roaming around,
walking and roaming on the path of life,
that cut my heart like a knife,...

House of Mirrors - lyrics critique - funk folk  Not rated yet
I was done looking but peeked once more inside
There at the bottom with nowhere to hide
Was a trick of the light
It caught my eye and then it was gone
...

'Dream' Lyrics Critique--Country Song  Not rated yet
Please post all good and bad comments!!!

One day riding on a unicorn
Dreaming endless possibilities
Thinking of you and nobody else
I cant get you ...

Acoustic...... One of these days. Lyrics critique  Not rated yet
One Of These Days
Verse 1
One of these days
when you've come to your sences
will you write me a letter
just to put me at ease

Cause I'll admit
...

My Forever Man- Contemporary Christian/ Country  Not rated yet
My Forever Man
Written By Amy Bennett

Lying here again, for the millionth time, looking up at my ceiling in my twin bed. Seeing the first snow fall,...

Broken Pieces (pop/rock)  Not rated yet
(verse 1)
I woke up this morning
tryin to find my broken pieces
i found nothing but empty spaces
im feelin broken and so lonely
fix ...

It shouldnt of been you - lyric review  Not rated yet
Please rate and comment. My 4th song now.

I remember the last time that you said you loved me
Now ive started to see
What i really could have had
...

Margarita Tex-mex lyrics critique  Not rated yet
Margarita
(who are you?)
Music & Words: B.Turner 8/11/08

Intro: 1 2 1234
V1: We met the first time through some mutual friend
she didn't know ...

"Last Request" lyrics critique-?  Not rated yet
I don't like this song and I want to completly rewrite it though I'm blank on where to start. I need some help.

Last Request

A hope, a fear
another ...

Shes so unique - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
This is another song that I have wrote. Please comment, Thank you.


Verse 1:
Shes Got A Style Thats So Unique
the Kinda Style I Would Love To Meet ...

What do you Want? Lyrics Critique   Not rated yet
Hi, I'm new at this song writing thing, so let me know what you think.. . this song is basically about me being stressed out with school and work, I'm ...

The Kisses And The Cuddles - Lyric review  Not rated yet
Heres one i wrote for my friend to give to his girlfriend :) Heres Meant to be a Pop Lyric/Song! Can you please Comment, leave some cronstructive critiscm,...

don't ever go away - lyric critique  Not rated yet
to avoid confusion this song is about me not knowing where this guy is but can still feel he is around

whenever I wake up my head
is full of thoughts ...

Windows chorus lyrics critique - Folk/Pop  Not rated yet
backed by acoustic guitar

Look at the glare on the window.
Look at the glare in my life.
Look at the mixtures of colors,
as they turn into light....

untitled - jen (pop, acoustic, folk song) - Lyric review  Not rated yet
let me know what you think, this is all I've written so far. :)


Verse 1:

I took a breath
then I took a step
but you seemed too far out of reach
...

money love - lyrics review  Not rated yet
she got eyes of the greenest kind
think she see you, well your wrong
shes all you want all that you need,
but shes got to be moving on

she just want ...

Rock it lyrics review - R&B  Not rated yet
(Chorus)
Rock it
(9x)
You can just be stoping and i can just be stopin it
and I can just be rockin it.(3x)
Rock It
(9x)
You can just be stoping ...

Whiskey, Tears and Blood. Lyrics Critique Blues Rock  Not rated yet
I am a veteran of Operation Iraqi Freedom and after I got back to the states I wrote this song about a dude that sees his friend die over there and can ...

Watchtower Prelude - Lyrics Feedback  Not rated yet
Wrote this this morning when I couldn't sleep (same time as the other song I posted.

I play this in a slower rhythm than the rest of the song but speed ...

Contry/Folk song (speed writing)  Not rated yet
In college we use to do a speed writing excercise. It's pretty self explanatory. Anyways I couldn't go to sleep last night so I did it. Here it is. Tell ...

Somebody Once Asked Me Lyrics Critique-Unfinished folk-ish, pop-ish song  Not rated yet
Somebody once asked me/"Are you sure you're not lonely?"/Somebody once asked me/to take them on home/I'm crying to my sheets/To my pillow and my blanket/...

What can I do Lyrics Critique R.B.  Not rated yet
What can I do

What can I do when there is just me and you,
maybe I can think things through, to try and get you.
Cause the more I do,I still can't ...

Please Stay Lyrics Critique R,B, Song  Not rated yet
yeah,yeah,yeah,

baby baby baby baby baby
stay for awhile
you know how I feel
about you
so baby please stay

and what more can I say
to keep you ...

Had Nothing - Ballad - Lyric Feedback  Not rated yet
Chorus:
What happened when you, had nothing?
Don't be untrue, you once did.
I know better, than to think,
It will never, happen to me.

Gojng to ...

'Kiss me goodbye' Lyrics critique - inde/rock   Not rated yet
Ohhhh, ohhh baby.
Just kiss me good bye,
Coz I Aint? coming back alive.
This is something I gotta? face,
a war I know is already lost.
So kiss me ...