Lyric Critique - christian/country
by Kyler
(Texas)
i really like the idea of where my song is going about the struggle of addiction, but i just don't think it flows well, and i just think some of the words could be replaced with words better fitted. this is only my 3rd song so it really isn't that great but i would love help!
Spiritual Fix
Went down to the river ,box full of pictures and a pound of cocaine, said Lord it’s the start of my new life till this point its all been in vain, and I’m the only one to blame. (Chorus) I’m living for you today, I’m tired of going my way, I give it all to the Lamb who was slain, I’m going your way.(End Chorus) As I dumped that $50,000 addiction down the river bank, I knew then victory was mine to claim. But then on the drive out of there, them o’l demons came whispering in my ear “son you need a fix, and you need it quick” Just then I screamed Lord I need you now, I need that spiritual high I’ve heard about, then I heard The Father say “In my Holy name you demons get out” (Chorus” “Son live for me today, leave behind your old ways, give it all to me and go my way.(End Chorus) I’ll give you the fix you need, but be sure to fix your eyes on me, cocaine is nothing but a false lead, so my son pick up your cross and follow me!”(Main Chorus)…Your all I will ever need, so I rebuke it and follow you my King!
