"Love's Prisoner, Confined by fear"

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"Love's Prisoner, Confined by fear"

by Rhoniesha
(Oakland,California,US)

......peace and love shall set me free.....

idk....trying to convert poems into songs

How can the same guy that critizes me
turn around and kiss me so gently sending chills through every inch of my body to the point where I literally feel weak in the knees?
I love him more than words could ever say
but I dont think I can stay if he continues to treat me this way

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"Love's Prisoner, Confined by fear"

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Nov 30, 2009
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put more into it. it is a great idea for a song though
by: Akilina Merel Koralie

what you already put down is a pretty good idea actually. just add more to it. i cant really say much on how cause not much is there and it is something you made but i can say this. if you are talking about someone else or are imagining it or the such then try to be that person you are writing about.if it is about you then try to bring back the feelings you had when writing the song and write down what you can think of then organize it.

one piece of advice (even though i am a beginner)
Do NOt Erase
thats right dont erase lyrics or ideas you wrote down. you may use them for another song or decide to use it later.

well thats all i gotta say. lets both work at it!!!

ps: this half reminds me of a character i read in a book called hawksong

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