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Looking Back - Country song, lyrics critique

by Liz
(Greenfield, Wisconsin)

Being new to this, any suggestions on how to improve this song would be great, Thanks. Brutal honesty is appreciated.

Looking Back

Verse 1:
When you were mine so many years ago
Didn't know how to let my feelings show
You were the sun the moon the stars that shone for me
You made me the kind of man I want to be

Chorus:
Looking back, how was I too blind to see
You were the only love for me
Oh tell me Baby, what's a broken heart supposed to do
When looking back is all I have of you

Verse 2:
Since you've been gone, my life hasn't been the same
Now that your gone all my memories call your name
You filled my life with joy and ecstasy
There’s no bigger fool in this whole world than me

Repeat Chorus

Bridge:
We can go back and grab tomorrow if we try
Because our hearts will never say goodbye
We're not living in this world just to be apart
Take my love, take my life, and heal this empty heart

Repeat Chorus










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Looking Back - Country song, lyrics critique

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Jan 12, 2011
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Needs some work
by: Anonymous

Verse one seems to be good until you get past, "the sun, the moon, the stars"

I think the Chorus kinda sucks and I would try and change it all together. It just seems to be too generic and not original.

First two lines in verse two are pretty good but would do something else with the rest.

And I think the bridge is really really good though.

Hope that helps. Sorry dont have any suggestions for the changes.

Oct 17, 2011
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good but wordy
by: Carter

i suggest these changes
verse 1:
didnt know to let my feelings show....

Made me the man i wanna be...

verse 2:
Theres no bigger fool in the world than me

bridge:
Take my love, take my life, and heal my heart tonight

theres just something to play with good luck

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