Kiss Me I'm Dead-POP - Lyric writing - critique

by Blair
(Maryland, USA)

Moo rah ah
Moo rah oh la
Ba ba bum bum
Da da huh

Verse 1: Your touch is grey
Your kiss is cold
Don’t stare at me too long
I only came to not be alone
Had my keep and wanted more
But was locked up to rust indigo
Losing faith in the haze
Crossing into a grand attack

Bridge: Would like a symphony in May
Want Baltimore in July
Remember nasty words I said
Wasn’t like black in June
Moo rah ah
Moo rah oh la
Places change and I can’t take a word I said away
It’s what I write down that states
The plague that stole my stone for sake
Ba ba bum bum
Da da huh

Chorus: After every single person has said their word
It’s strange to me I can seem to grin
Moo rah ah ah
Kiss kiss then win
Kiss kiss not fair
Kiss kiss living with malevolent monsters
Kiss me I’m dead
Kiss kiss I’m dead

Verse 2: She said her friend’s a photographer
Coming back to old studio
A sound rang tenderly
Said boy you don’t know
What you just got yourself into

Bridge: Would like a symphony in May
Want Baltimore in July
Remember nasty words I said
Wasn’t like black in June
Moo rah ah
Moo rah oh la
Places change and I can’t take a word I said away
It’s what I write down that states
The plague that stole my stone for sake
Ba ba bum bum
Da da huh

Chorus: After every single person has said their word
It’s strange to me I can seem to grin
Moo rah ah ah
Kiss kiss then win
Kiss kiss not fair
Kiss kiss living with malevolent monsters
Kiss me I’m dead
Kiss kiss I’m dead

Verse 3: I’m in the sand I’m in the bend
It’s unlikely I can fend (2x)
Drank my whole soul
Choked it down
Said it was so good I couldn’t just stop at dead
No no she took a picture of me then said
Why don’t you have a head

Chorus: Kiss kiss then win
Kiss kiss not fair
Kiss kiss living with malevolent monsters
Kiss me I’m dead
Kiss kiss I’m dead (2x)