in saddness lyrics critique - indie,easy listening

by emzhe smith
(wolverhampton)

For ages now i've been trying to make a song that tells a story and has meaning I need honest comments please and I hope you like it

when we were younger we'd always hide
always dream of a better life
with all the fortune
not so much of the fame
we always thought it was a silly game

when we were younger
nothing mean't a thing
we'd look up at the sky
always moan about our lives
with all the maddness
not so much of the past
cos theres no going back now 2x

chorus still I wonder where you are
did you ever reach the kingdom of light
or did you just stay with the stars
where did you go,
where did you run
you do too much it's no longer fun, it's not fun 2x

anouther decade older
you havn't worked a day in your life
I guess all ya dreams
and ambitions were a waste of time
you get out your pistol
put it to your head
don't care for a light at the end of the tunnel
cos your already dead