ill be there (working title)

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ill be there (working title) - lyrics critique

by trevor
(United States)

haha ok so...i have a problem. i have a chorus written down and this always happens when i try to write..i can get a chorus but no verses or bridge =P haha so this is just a chorus im posting but i hope you like it =) im writing it for a friend that means a TON to me and im trying to make it as good as possible..=)

Chorus:
And even when planets collide
Id travel through hell just to be at your side
And when everything is fallin apart
Id do anything to be the one in your heart
ill always be there...
always

haha so please...rate and comment because this friend means a ton and i wanna make it the best possible =)
Thanks! =D

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ill be there (working title) - lyrics critique

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Apr 09, 2009
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Nice start
by: Anonymous

Good Job getting started don't ever quit once you start.

And even when the planets collide
Id travel through hell
just to be there at your side
And when everything falls apart
Id do anything to be in your heart
I'll always be there...
Because I'll always care
anty time any place any where
Just like I've cared from the very start.

Now start writing a verse from some point in time

The first time I saw you
It like I already Knew you
like two old freinds who had never met

Just My Ideals I hope it helps you think in the form of the story you want to tell.

Jun 13, 2009
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cool
by: Anonymous

great lyrics and if I guessed the melody right, it sounded pretty catchy. Now for the rest of the song...

Oct 18, 2009
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AWESOME!!!!!
by: hendo

HOOOOOOLLLLLLY SHITE. thats amazing. im actually in love. thats deadset one of the best lyrics i have ever seen.
freakin awesome job

Dec 24, 2010
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ideas
by: marym

ideas cld be

with pride u say hello little did i know id past right through hell and heaven to be ur friend.

idk this is what u can probably add to ur lyrics hope this gives u an idea(:

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