If I Talk In My Sleep...Blues Duet - Lyrics Critique

by Carter
(Southern Illinois )

This song is based on real conversations between my friends and I as they helped me through a break up. I appreciate all feed back!

Male Verse 1

Im glad that you took me out
I needed my mind off of-things
I had a good time, but I should't drive
Thanks for the couch and letting me stay

Chorus Male

But let me apologize!
If I talk in my sleep
When i've had a few drinks, start havin these dreams
And when I get up it's gonna hurt
So please dont wake me now
Im talkin to her

Female Verse 2
I try and try to be a friend
But maybe I should be afraid
Are you ever gonna let her go?
Ever gonna love again?
You know it breaks my heart when, I hear you call out her name

Chorus Male

Female verse 3

I know you can't find yourself
But she's the one whose lost
Anything that I can do to help?
Scared you're worse than I thought
Male verse 3
Just let me drink myself to sleep
I need to dream these memories
The memory I yearn!
Let me sleep, Im talkin to her

Chorus Together