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"I Would" Country song - Lyric Feedback

by Shawn Wade
(Texas)

Hey yall, how ya'll doing? Wrote this song and would like to know what needs to be done with it

"I Would"
Shawn Wade

You look just like an angel
Your like a perfect dream
Oh what i'd give to have your love all for me
I'm a country guy that blew his chance
To hold you in my arms for everlasting time
You look beautiful in everything you wear
I love you from your little toes on up to your hair
Your like ever guys dream and especially mine
If i could hold in my arms just one more time
I Would

(Chorus)
Love you like you needed to be loved
Treat you like no other man could of
Hold you in my arms til the sun comes up
And never let you go until my time is up

Yes i would

Now there are many other girls out there
But your the one whos caught my stare
I love to be with you
Sure hate to be without you
I have to be alone
Cause your with that other man
That i just cant stand
So I'll wait my turn if it comes again
And if i dont get it
I sure as hell wont quit
Cause your still gonna need a man
Who Would

(Chorus)
Love you like you needed to be loved
Treat you like no other man could of
Hold you in his arms til the sun comes up
And never let you go until his time is up

So you just left whats his name
Now its time for me to pick up my pace
To capture your heart is the plan of my game
So here we go again
Sure hope i can win this time
Cause I Would

(Chorus)
Love you like you needed to be loved
I Would treat you like no other man could of
I Would hold you in my arms til the sun comes up
And I Would never let you go until my time is up

Yes I Would

Thats my song everybody, thanks for any ideas or thoughts you guys may have on it. Forgive if there is any typing errors. Thanks a bunch!




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"I Would" Country song - Lyric Feedback

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Sep 23, 2008
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I don't want to be too critical, but
by: Anonymous

You need to first use proper English when writing.

In the second line you are using the word "your". The CORRECT word would be YOU'RE, which is a contraction of you are.

If the incorrect word is the first thing a publisher would see, they would probably read no further.

Oct 02, 2008
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Beautiful
by: Anonymous

I'm a huge fan of country and I'll bet that would be a hit with the right tune and background music! Awesome lyrics!

Aug 16, 2009
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very strong chours
by: Lonne

chours is great. good story I think all of us has lived

Jun 15, 2010
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grammar
by: Anonymous

The grammatical use of "your" in the second line is correct.

Aug 31, 2010
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Rework it a bit
by: Joshua Rhodes

This looks like it could easily be a five star song. Great concept. You need to work on your rhyming scheme and make it one standard scheme. Also if it were me i would take out some of the verse and try to decide exactly what I wanted to say. It's a little too chunky for my taste. Like I said tho I'm digging the concept just not sure about the verses.

Dec 06, 2010
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awesome!!
by: Anonymous

I've never been a country guy, but this song I think has allot of potential for being a rock pop song.
Like I said I'm not country person, though I could not resist sing along with "I Would". Its very catchy, you did a great job!!

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