"Hey"----Lyrics Critic

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"Hey"----Lyrics Critic

by Nolan
(Nebraska)

Not finished....Looking for input...thanks

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Hey,
It's what you don't say,
In the games,
That we play

You,
Can never see through,
All our pointless views
Or am I confused

Chorus:

While you don't realize
I am still hypnotized
By you and all of your ways
I....just want to say

Hey

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"Hey"----Lyrics Critic

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Nov 22, 2008
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Has Potential!!!!
by: Jake

This song could be better mate, I never lie. What you should do is stop rhyming every line, there are other ways you can rhyme lines that are more interesting, and will make a song more interesting. Try rhyming every other line;

My love is for you
it will always be
I am for you
Let us break free

Notice that I didn't rhyme everyline, but every other. You don't need rhymes at all, but if you are a begginer, they always help. Check out my song, "Time" and see what you think!!!

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