Fake Smile Lyrics Critique

by Marc
(Ohio)

I wrote this about a girl that I really like, it is about my feelings that I kept to myself about her and her boyfriend. I actually wrote this in real time over a span of three days. As for a genere, I would't classify it. I just think its an acoustic song, I can't imagine a drum beat or bass line for this one. But thats just me, let me know what you think about it.

Verse 1
Its Sunday mornin' and
I stand there watching you talk to him
Wondering when my time will come
Not knowin if I'll be around long enough to see then

Pre-Chorus
But, I don't think I can wait much longer
Cause these feelings aren't getting stronger
I'm sorry to say I don't have allot of patience left in me
After all this time I thought you'd see

Chorus
The fake smile across my face
That pretty little mask to hide my pain
And the way my heart breaks from the thought of him with you
I'm trying to keep strong to see this through

Verse 2
Its Monday mornin' and
Your askin me about him
I swallow my pride and
Tell you he sounds like a great guy

Pre-Chorus
I don't think I can wait much longer
Cause these feelings aren't getting stronger
I'm sorry to say that I don't have allot of patience left in me
After all this time I thought you'd see

Chorus
The fake smile across my face
That pretty little mask to hide my pain
Or the way my heart breaks form the thought of him with you
I'm trying to keep strong to see this through

Verse 3
Its Tuesday mornin' and
Tonight you have a date with him
I hope he know how lucky he is
To be with a girl like you

Pre-Chorus
And, I don't think I can wait much longer
Cause these feelings aren't getting stronger
I don't have allot of patience left in me
After all this time I can't believe you didn't see

Chorus
That fake smile across my face
That pretty little mask to hide my pain
The way my heart broke from the sight of him with you
I'm not strong enough to see this through