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Draining Lyrics Critique - "Hard Rock"

by JH
(Sweden)

Hi, I'd appreciate any constructive input to the lyrics below. I only have some vague ideas for the melody so far:

Verse 1
Looking for a reason
Tryin'´ to figure out
Can someone tell me
what this is all about

Chorus
Sensing draining perceptions
I'm not in the game
Sensing draining perceptions
Thing's aren't the same
Anymore, anymore, anymore

Verse 2
Just don't understand
What is it I can't see
I need your guidance
Am I someone or just me

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Draining Lyrics Critique - "Hard Rock"

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Sep 03, 2008
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I know where your comming from
by: inspiration101

I was able to come up with a rythm and a melody for this first verse.(although I wanted to change,"things aren't the same" to,"things don't seem the same or things don't feel the the same.
But the second verse could not fit with the first unless you comletely changed the flow.Get it bro?

Aug 26, 2009
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Fab five star
by: Anonymous

I think the verses fit perfectly in with the chorus. I could really sense the beat in your words. I'll be looking out for more of your songs ;-)

Dec 03, 2010
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awesome
by: Anonymous

i think if you tried putting it in the vein of metallica?annihilator with very rough vocals (or even screams/growls) you could very easily make this into a perfect song

Jun 14, 2011
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allitle longer
by: Rune

Unless your intent is to have a really short song or alot of instrumental fill, you should add to your verses or add verses of the same length and have the song structure something like verse, verse, chorus, verse, chorus. That's just me though. Otherwise, I like it

Oct 23, 2011
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Quite good
by: Anonymous

Quite good really needs to be a bit longer but other than that just keep going

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