doorway to a time greater - lyrics critique

by talitha greer
(victoria point QLD)

I first saw you coming through a doorway
for the first time I felt happiness show
how could a doorway seem so beautiful
that is something I will just never know

I could see the light shining through
could feel all my hope coming through
coming through the sliding doors

you walked through the door shining
shining like a bright full moon
I felt myself rise up high and soar
soar high up over the mighty land
I felt great powers from within me
seep out and spread their colours
when you came through the door

I cast my mind back to that doorway
that one doorway to a time greater
so much happened at that doorway
that doorway I will always remember

I could see the light shining through
could feel all my hope coming through
coming through the sliding doors

you walked through the door shining
shining like a bright full moon
I felt myself rise up and soar
soar high up over the mighty land
I felt great powers from within me
seep out and spread their colours
when you came through the door