Cruel Lyrics critique- Rap and Pop

by Brianna
(Auckland New Zealand)

I am only 13 so yeah and this is my first time writing a song so dont judge it too harshly...but do judge it on what you think of it


Cruel
V1 I open my eyes but your still there ??.
I try to disappear but you are awake now??.
Why oh why are you so cruel, I played the fool but now

Rap Cruel, cruel, cruel why am I here putting up with all this abuse in my ear
Don?t you understand I don?t wana hold your hold hand your love is in vain putting the the pain and the blame in my brain coz your love is like a hurricane spinning round and round and then bringing me down for the final act?. Some would say your crusade is????.

Cruel, cruel, cruel but for you it?s just another day making the world spin the way you say is good but it?s cruel?.. You got me like a puppet on a string but what am I supposed to do if the birds don?t sing.

Repeat v1

Chorus cruel, cruel, cruel it?s what you do it?s who you are
Buy a fancy car just for you not for me coz that?s just what you do see??? so cruel

Ending I know I gotta get out, gotta get paid, gotta get a brain gotta go and get my life back on the tracks again but I still love you
Faintly?. It?s for the best