Cracks Lyrics Critique

by Francesca
( USA)

HI! I'm 14 and this is one of the first songs i've ever written. I would love to hear your critiques, so please comment!!!! The lyrics are sort of "odd". I tried to make them sort of metaphorical. Hopefully it makes sense :).

Lyrics:

Chorus-
Cracks drew me inside
As I slipped through their holes
Rush through my veins as I collide
Controlling our souls

Verses-
Naive
Her perception deceived
Was so curious
Their meanings so spurious

Drawn by her illusions
Amplified by the delusions
She?s jumping on a thin wire
Her life they desire

Pre Chorus-
Falling down
My screams turn to a silent sound
Seize the air
A heart in despair

Chorus

Verse-
She is scared
Her heart?s impaired
Beyond the surface she is breaking
From the mistakes she is making

Pre- Chorus
Chorus

Bridge-
Climbing on splintered hands and knees
Shards seen at every degree
Trying to grab the light
(I?m) Not falling into cracks tonight

Pre- Chorus

Chorus-
Cracks drew her inside
As she slipped through their holes
Rush through her veins as she collides
Controlling her soul.